At 8/12/08 01:50 AM, Muesical-Pope wrote:
At 8/12/08 12:22 AM, p4c wrote:
nooooooooo read the rules!! comment on the post before before you post your own... *sigh* ill look at it tomorrow evening though. but i still want thoughts on mine ;)Oh noes i didn't read
Dont flip a shit
I'll review you :/
First off..Grow some nads and stop being a whiny 12 year old...
as far as ur "ill be loving" song
it feels like the vocals come in off the beat in a way that was a bit weird to me
Anyways I dont really know the song, and what parts of it are what you have done and what are part of the original song.
Did you just add the beats? because if so its hardly your work :/
but yeah I guess the concepts okay
What parts of it are you? Obviously not the vocals...
It sounds good and all... but then again im pretty sure the original was already amazingly mastered
Sounds like it could be well developed. Good luck with that.
If all you did is the beats though... Thats hardly a WIP or your own work :/
lets not turn this into a flame battle, but the point of the wip thread is to get comments on ur wip, not for ppl to incessantly post them and not bother to leave advice. you should grow some nads, learn to read, stop jumping to insults, and then finally fulfill the point of the thread instead of undermining it. im not flipping a shit--it just doesnt help at all when the review is neglected. the only reason i didnt leave u a review immedately was because i had to go to work the next day.
in regards to my song, the only part that isn't me is the vocals, and im splicing them up now. for the intro few seconds, i threw in some other parts of the song into it, but im still working on it so i havent spent much time splicing yet. if you want to know how it originally sounded, here is the youtube link.
for your song, here we go.
intro starts out nice. good job. when the drums and vox came in i think they felt like they just were slapped in. try leading into them, maybe be less abrupt in introducing those elements or just have some sort of transition.
the guitar is good throughout the song. i love the sound, its very pensive and thoughtful. in terms of mixing, i wish it was more immersive--this is a large aspect of the vibes of teh song, so widening it with a stereo imager, thorwing a soft reverb, or splitting it and spreading to the right and the left on the mixer may be a good idea.
the vocals throughout sounded a bit feeble, like you were trying to restrain yourself a ton instead of letting your voice come out fully. but be careful about that because i dont you probably dont want to sound like your screaming or somehting lol. and sometimes, i could tell you recorded them in separate instances and it made it flow strangely at points like 0:49. and finally, you may wanna consider an autotuner.... lol.
the lyrics were fine, though [sappy cliches? i dont care lol]
the backup vox every now and then were you make your voice chorded got lost--i didn't hear it until i listened a few times.
i wish the drums werent so far back in the mix. it makes it a bit shallow, and too trebly if you ask me. the bass drum gets lost and the snare sounds tinny [no i dont have a shitty system lol].
i think i'll assume that the bass guitar is synthetic because it sounds that way. i think you should modulate pitch and loudness more, along with some slight distortion, to get a more realistic sound.
the sound of the keys [starting :38 or so] didn't jive very well for me, i guess i just dont like the sound of them. it was too synthetic and unfeeling, and the chords you chose were a little bland, even if they did follow the tune of teh song. maybe some dissonances may be interesting.
throughout the whole song, for basically all your melodies, they don't vary enough dynamically. it makes them sound almost blatantly synthetic but trying not to be, you know? the subtleties matter so i think you should focus on that.
i think i had more comments, but i had to leave my computer for a few hours and i dont remember what i was going to say lol. maybe something about variation, since it seemed pretty constant the whole time, i guess. but im not sure, so i hope this stuff helps lol. cheers.
and nav, yeah, i think they can be really simplified to something to this effect:
[0) post it externally, not on newgrounds--this isn't an audio advertisement thread, you know.]
1) post wips here.
2) review the person before you.
3) don't repost wips.
[4) bump if needed :[ the thread gets inactive easily]