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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-03-16 04:41:51 Reply

At 3/14/08 03:51 PM, Karco wrote:
As for my own WIPs, I've been stuck with this one for quite a while now and could use some suggestions on where to go with it. :\

It's a kick ass song, nothing to make it better, only like a real intro or something.
I could use tips on this.
It starts out as the average Jurian song but gets more Rock Like after a while.


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-03-17 13:36:14 Reply

Should I make a 7 min song or a 8 min song

Hmmmmmm =)

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-03-17 21:28:02 Reply

At 3/14/08 03:51 PM, Karco wrote:

:Criticism...

Hey, I forgot to thank you for your honest and thorough thoughts on that, so... thanks.
I'm not planning on finishing it, but each track is a learning experience and you gave me some things to think about, so again, thanks.


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-03-17 22:26:46 Reply

At 3/17/08 01:36 PM, Dj-Immune wrote: Should I make a 7 min song or a 8 min song

Hmmmmmm =)

78 minute song


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-03-17 22:38:12 Reply

At 3/17/08 10:26 PM, Envy wrote:
At 3/17/08 01:36 PM, Dj-Immune wrote: Should I make a 7 min song or a 8 min song

Hmmmmmm =)
78 minute song

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-03-20 17:01:11 Reply

At 3/16/08 04:41 AM, Jurian wrote: I could use tips on this.

yummm. some constructive crit:

the piano would be better if it was more lifelike, vary volume a little bit so that it sounds like someone playing piano. IMO that would be good, even with teh mood ur trying to get.

i thought the song progressed really well. careful not to make some of ur instruments get drowned out tho.

i liked the melody that ur electric guitar followed, but i didnt like the sound of the guitar itself. its jst... mehhh. too synthetic and too bland, i think. if u can try distorting that or finding another sound for it, that would be great.

the ending seemed a little abrupt, but that might be jst because its a WIP.

finally, i wish there were more ambient effects/sfx that would make the song sound more textured, IMO that would be sweet.
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okeydoke, i have a short clip of a remix of "low" by flo rida im trying to make. its sounding like a breakbeat benny benassi song lol. what do u think? where should i go from here? i did teh chorus but im not sure what to do for the rest lol

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-03-20 20:15:37 Reply

Labaratorytest.wav

i made this today, it's a 15 sec loop, does it need anything?

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-03-20 20:34:17 Reply

At 3/20/08 08:15 PM, loogiesquared wrote: Labaratorytest.wav

i made this today, it's a 15 sec loop, does it need anything?

that thing around 0:20 or so attacks the ears, maybe alittle less of that
and needs more drums (but that's cause i love drums)

other than that it didn't really loop over that well

but was a good listen, nonetheless


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-03-20 20:51:11 Reply

aww i got skipped. well heres an updated, extended version of what im doing

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-03-20 20:54:19 Reply

At 3/20/08 08:51 PM, p4c wrote: aww i got skipped. well heres an updated, extended version of what im doing

apple-bottom jeans?
your idea's a remix?
huh, i feel i've heared this before on a RMXRadio.
i don't see that's it's diffrent enough for NG. but it IS a nice song.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-03-26 03:36:24 Reply

Hey all,

I would like some good critics on this one :)

http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/260308/3 0876_Joowna_-_Chilly_Tonic_v_1.0.mp3

1. Which genre could I name it?
2. Do you miss a main melody?
3. You like the kick?
4. Anything you like to say?

thx in advance
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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-03-26 06:21:16 Reply

http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/260308/6 46_Full_Speed.mp3

First attempt at techno... tell me what you think about it. I really need help EQing the bass and the panning so if you got any tips on that then feel free to share so I can finally finish this thing. Also the end area sounds a little wonky so don't mind that right now.


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-03-30 05:49:53 Reply

ill take a look at ur guys's stuff once i get back from vacation. DONT LET THE THREAD DIEEE!!!

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-03-30 13:28:57 Reply

At 3/26/08 03:36 AM, Joowna wrote: Hey all,

I would like some good critics on this one :)

http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/260308/3 0876_Joowna_-_Chilly_Tonic_v_1.0.mp3

1. Which genre could I name it?
2. Do you miss a main melody?
3. You like the kick?
4. Anything you like to say?

thx in advance
Joowna

genre: dance or house

missing a main melody? NOO! dont corrupt this. there is a melody, its just more subtle, and if u add something over that, the song would jst get stale and bland like the big piles of sappy trance on newgrounds. i like it this way, much more head-bob-age going on

kick: sounds a bit weeak and not very textured. IMO you can go 2 routes successfully - make it harder and rougher, bringing up the higher frequencies and distorting/adding more samples to play at the same time to get a reasonably textured kick, or do the opposite--keep it really laid back, relaxing, subdued and muddier. i think those would sound best, ur choice tho.

anything i'd like to say? good job so far. but, be careful about repetitiveness and just slapping on loops as it goes on--try to m ake the parts and elements of the song just flow into each other instead of making more loops come into play, try making slick transitions [i dont mean complicated or annoying--i just mean catchy and fun. that can be as simple as taking out some instruments for a few beats, or it could be flat out FX mayhem :]

cheers.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-04-02 00:57:17 Reply

http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/010408/6 2684_Thoughts.mp3

Could anyone, give me good helpfull critcism, I know that the ending sounds stupid(FL broke down just a minute before ending the rendering), and it will be fixed in te final version.

Thanks


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-04-03 11:21:52 Reply

http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/030408/4 0884_Unoi.mp3

I just recently started this one. It's really raw right now, so any good feedback would be awesome. I plan on submitting this to the pico mac so if you plan on entering too, now would be a good time to start feeding me fake advice :P


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-04-03 11:23:08 Reply

At 4/3/08 11:21 AM, Quarl wrote: http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/030408/4 0884_Unoi.mp3

sorry, bad link... try this.


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-04-03 13:49:47 Reply

well here is my next project...well plz tell me what you think...

http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/1 34514

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-04-03 17:53:10 Reply

At 4/3/08 01:49 PM, sonicxtreme wrote: well here is my next project...well plz tell me what you think...

http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/1 34514

peace

Well, it sounded great on my lap top speakers, but when I threw on some head phones the lead synth kind of rounded out and didn't sound as good. What you have going is great, just keep working on it, and try to get that lead synth to sound good on all platforms. Mater that bitch. I'm not too sure how to go about doing that, but I'm sure someone else in this thread might be able to help you out there. Melody was really cliche. Not bad, just really familiar. Try to work out some notes that will help this stand out.

Hope to hear the final sometime soon!


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-04-03 18:45:13 Reply

well thanx... i just launched the loop to see wut was goin to happen...not mastered anything on that loop,just something to cause an inpression of my project idea.thanx again.


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-04-03 20:52:33 Reply

Check it

I don't really need help, just tell meh what ya think =O

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-04-05 15:52:53 Reply

Still looking for some feed back :(


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-04-05 15:55:46 Reply

you know what? It doesn't matter. I guess I'm done with it any ways.


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-04-05 18:57:25 Reply

Hey, I was making my first song in FL7 and I wanted some feedback on my song. I already submitted it to newgrounds. http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/1 35183

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-04-05 19:00:49 Reply

I'm not sure if this is the finish version or not...

Should it be?


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-04-27 07:57:26 Reply

Hope you can help me improve this song!


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-04-27 15:39:21 Reply

At 4/27/08 07:57 AM, Kygore612 wrote: Hope you can help me improve this song!

kyogore - this is pretty weak as of now, all it is are a bunch of preset synths and samples coming in and out in the same loops over and over again.

1) the drums are really really weak - they dont form a coherent beat nor a catchy one either. if you're going for a trance sound, try using the usual four on the four beat - bass drum --> hi hat --> repeat. [and maybe every other kick gets a snare drum or a clap], jst look at the top songs on the trance charts here and ull recognize it.

2) the melody at the start is okay, though it needs to change and grow more as the song goes on.

3) the plucky instrumetn thing is weak too. you jst need more variety and stronger synth sounds

overall i think this has a LOT to improve and needs to be developed a LOT more--it sounds like a 5 minute FL masterpiece. sorry for being harsh :\

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-04-27 15:41:57 Reply

now, can you help me? making a remix of mariah carey lolll

im not done but i jst want comments and ideas for the rest of the song.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-04-27 20:09:52 Reply

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2008-04-28 00:26:21 Reply

Well I never heard the original, and I have no idea what is original/ sample, but from what I can tell, you have a really good mix going right now.

I might ask you to put more umpf in that kick. Have that bass kick pump the track a bit more. The tracks lacking a bit of bass.

The snare/claps work well until the cheers drop out 1/3rd of the way through. I'd say that the snare at about there is a little weak. Dunno, might be preference.

The destruction on the vocals around half way through suck! Either keep to the original sound or work in a different effect. And shit, those high pitched noises are death on my virgin ears. Get those out!

Fix those little things and you have a pro track. Really, aside from all that, every thing sounds pretty good man. Great mix.

Now if someone could give me some feedback on this thingy. I started it earlier today and I'm not sure what to do with it.


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