At 3/14/08 01:00 PM, kevs91 wrote:
...and the thing I'm working on:
This is intentionally more sparse, but please let me know if any parts are too sparse or boring. Any suggestions, really, I'd love, because I'm liking how this is shaping up. Thanks.
Pretty nice, here are my thoughts:
1) Try not to play chords in the lower range, limit yourself to one or two notes. It's a lot easier to get clashing notes in the lower ranges, even if they wouldn't normally clash in the middle or higher octaves.
2) Up to the point where the guitar comes in, it's basically variations of the same melody repeated over and over. You need to make it more interesting - I don't hear any dynamics in there, and you could create a second melody to work with as well.
3) Your left and right hand parts are playing at about the same volume. You want your right hand, which is playing the melody, to play louder, and your left hand a bit softer.
4) The electric guitar coming in sounds really quiet, and somewhat random. Make it louder! :D
5) The bass guitar is playing harmony, isn't it? It probably should be quieter, while the piano and electric guitar, playing the melody, should be louder.
Overall, it's nice, but it's pretty boring. Once again, make it interesting - perhaps you could add a structure of some sort to the song? Like, instead of "this part is where the guitar comes in, this part is where it leaves, this part is where the drums play for a while," something like "this part is where the piano slows down and gets quieter, this part is where the guitar becomes louder, this part is where the drummming builds up, this part is where they all play together." Hope that helps! ;)
As for my own WIPs, I've been stuck with this one for quite a while now and could use some suggestions on where to go with it. :\