At 5/12/13 08:58 PM, WilsonMcLeish wrote:
Check out my tune!
First off, I think you've defined your genre very well. The electro-jazz sound is very identifiable, and your instrumentation reflects that. Your rhythmic section is steady, and the bass sound is nice. The sweeping pad has a really clear, open sound too, and it definitely captures that "lakeshore" theme you were going for.
My main issues are with the lead guitar. The sound itself is just too thin for me. There's no real depth to it; that could probably be fixed with a little EQ and reverb, but I might suggest layering another sound behind it, even just to get a little more oomph on the attack. Your melodic line is jazzy, but almost too random, especially rhythmically. I'd suggest going back through what you've got and finding a few bars that you think sound really good and developing those as a main theme that you can play with; what you've got just meanders around too much. Eliminate some of the useless passing tones and establish a firmer rhythm; don't be afraid to play around with note lengths or rhythms.
It's a solid 5/10 for me right now. Some mixing work and a clearer melodic line will do wonders for this.