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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! Feb. 23rd, 2013 @ 08:11 AM Reply

  • Brainburn(demonlover)_raw
    Brainburn(demonlover)_raw by Jonicorn

    A song about someone raped by a demon

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Trying to flesh out somekind of "new sound" but I know this isnt it, just a step in the right direction.
The song is made out of 2 pieces of music with different layers of stuff on top. Think I need more or less of something? The drums are a bit sloppy, but mapping drums arnt very fun, i blame my boredom.


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! Feb. 23rd, 2013 @ 08:53 AM Reply

At 2/23/13 08:11 AM, Jonicorn wrote: Trying to flesh out somekind of "new sound" but I know this isnt it, just a step in the right direction.
The song is made out of 2 pieces of music with different layers of stuff on top. Think I need more or less of something? The drums are a bit sloppy, but mapping drums arnt very fun, i blame my boredom.

Listen here instead
https://soundcloud.com/captain-bloodbath/brainburn-demonlove r-raw


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! Feb. 24th, 2013 @ 01:44 AM Reply

I REALLLLLYyyyy like this thread. lol.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! Feb. 25th, 2013 @ 08:50 PM Reply

Here is some dubstep / metal influenced stuff I have been working on lately. Any advice is greatly appreciated! ^^

Beyond Belief

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! Feb. 28th, 2013 @ 02:27 PM Reply

Anyone have any idea on how to lower the individual tempo on arepeggiator samples (for instance like the ones in Sytrus) even if the overall tempo of the track is high? The tempo for a track I'm making is pretty high right now and so the arpegg samples are way faster than I would like.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! Mar. 4th, 2013 @ 01:24 AM Reply

Here's a new verse I wrote. I really haven't rapped lately much so I am abit rusty to say the least. But if any of you hip-hop heads want to give me some input i'd really love it. Thanks <iframe width="560" height="315" src="http://www.youtube.com/embed/jd45t1EV79o" frameborder="0" allowfullscreen></iframe>

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! Mar. 4th, 2013 @ 01:28 AM Reply

Oops, forgot you can't embed, my bad guys.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! Mar. 10th, 2013 @ 07:33 PM Reply

Here's something that me and Josh Hunsaker are working on.

Tell us what you think so far?

  • Analog Dissention WIP
    Analog Dissention WIP by BrokenDeck

    Collab between BrokenDeck & joshhunsaker WIP

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! Mar. 11th, 2013 @ 11:23 PM Reply

Alright, so since forever I've had trouble mixing songs with vocals, so please give this a listen, if anyone has any advice or comments that would mean the absolute world to me. I still need to rewrite some of the lyrics/write more lyrics, get the guitar slightly more on tempo.

https://soundcloud.com/michaelflaherty/zbg/s-dt9Zx

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! Mar. 19th, 2013 @ 07:11 PM Reply

  • bit eight
    bit eight by CzeryWassierSwizier

    rarrararar

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Some attempt at making chip.
Advice appreciated.


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! Mar. 24th, 2013 @ 08:43 PM Reply

  • Lightmare On Panda Street
    Lightmare On Panda Street by emptywindow

    An updated version of lightmare

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I want to say this one is pretty close to complete, but looking for reviews and advice. if you write a review, I wouldn't mind reviewing one if you pm me!

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! Mar. 29th, 2013 @ 04:10 PM Reply

So like since I love this site so much I wanted advice on this song I'm working on

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! Mar. 31st, 2013 @ 07:29 PM Reply

Just got back from a long day at the recording studio to record a cue for a film I'm composing music for!

So here's a rough mix from today:

  • Conversing with Saul WIP
    Conversing with Saul WIP by deadlyfishes

    WIP

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Here's the score/sheet music if anyone is interested:
tinyurl.com/btseolo

I've got a long mix and mastering session tomorrow morning so any advice would help a lot!
Thanks guys, have a great Easter, or what's left of it.


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Check out something I did for NATA 2013! Hikarian's winning NATA 2013 Entry

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! May. 9th, 2013 @ 06:48 AM Reply

  • Azrei XL - Virtual Slap
    Azrei XL - Virtual Slap by Axel7

    (NOT DnB...just got the drums like it) Sometimes you think you're awake...turns out NOT!!

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I tried to make it DnB, it's got the drums alright. But I can't seem to stick to the structure, ever, I end up kinda making my own little thing, sounds a bit jumbled up but, it is getting more coherent.

the high frequency at the beginning, I'm aware of em.

But I ANYWHO, at the moment, whatever drumstyle I make, I wanna input more audio into it to sorta tell a story (not like I could get someone to sing over it)...I'll upgrade the song later.

I'd like some feedback when it comes to what I could do precisely to help structure this piece (but NOT to be exactly like dnb or drumstep ... just, as it is on its own)

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! May. 12th, 2013 @ 08:58 PM Reply

Check out my tune!

  • H2O
    H2O by WilsonMcLeish

    A modern approach to electronic composition.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! May. 12th, 2013 @ 10:00 PM Reply

At 5/12/13 08:58 PM, WilsonMcLeish wrote: Check out my tune!
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/534837

First off, I think you've defined your genre very well. The electro-jazz sound is very identifiable, and your instrumentation reflects that. Your rhythmic section is steady, and the bass sound is nice. The sweeping pad has a really clear, open sound too, and it definitely captures that "lakeshore" theme you were going for.

My main issues are with the lead guitar. The sound itself is just too thin for me. There's no real depth to it; that could probably be fixed with a little EQ and reverb, but I might suggest layering another sound behind it, even just to get a little more oomph on the attack. Your melodic line is jazzy, but almost too random, especially rhythmically. I'd suggest going back through what you've got and finding a few bars that you think sound really good and developing those as a main theme that you can play with; what you've got just meanders around too much. Eliminate some of the useless passing tones and establish a firmer rhythm; don't be afraid to play around with note lengths or rhythms.

It's a solid 5/10 for me right now. Some mixing work and a clearer melodic line will do wonders for this.

Cheers,
Chando

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! May. 13th, 2013 @ 01:45 PM Reply

At 5/12/13 10:00 PM, Chando wrote:
At 5/12/13 08:58 PM, WilsonMcLeish wrote: Check out my tune!
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/534837
First off, I think you've defined your genre very well. The electro-jazz sound is very identifiable, and your instrumentation reflects that. Your rhythmic section is steady, and the bass sound is nice. The sweeping pad has a really clear, open sound too, and it definitely captures that "lakeshore" theme you were going for.

My main issues are with the lead guitar. The sound itself is just too thin for me. There's no real depth to it; that could probably be fixed with a little EQ and reverb, but I might suggest layering another sound behind it, even just to get a little more oomph on the attack. Your melodic line is jazzy, but almost too random, especially rhythmically. I'd suggest going back through what you've got and finding a few bars that you think sound really good and developing those as a main theme that you can play with; what you've got just meanders around too much. Eliminate some of the useless passing tones and establish a firmer rhythm; don't be afraid to play around with note lengths or rhythms.

It's a solid 5/10 for me right now. Some mixing work and a clearer melodic line will do wonders for this.

Cheers,
Chando

Thanks for your critique! I am definitely not totally happy with the sound of the guitar either, I did this using garage band and i inputted the solo note for note and that was the coolest of the guitar sounds. I now have Protools and more sounds to play with so an update is a good idea. My album is still in the works, so I will consider your advice. Maybe I can make some stronger themes in the solo too, I just have so many ideas coming out of my head, it's hard to be simple sometimes.

Thanks,
Wilson


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! May. 13th, 2013 @ 06:19 PM Reply

My work in progress, and before you listen, and comment or critique, I know it isn't done. I know the ending is way too abrupt, and it misses more...I don't know, body? But I'm stuck on production where I am now. Enough to release a w.i.p. listenable, but lacking. If it helps anyone who might have a suggestion, I do make all of my music in FL studio.

Anyways, here is the link

  • -W.I.P- 8Bit boogy
    -W.I.P- 8Bit boogy by LeviaNeo

    Go 8bit go! My latest w.i.p. tell me what you think.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! May. 14th, 2013 @ 07:25 PM Reply

Working with a dance track; have no idea where to go with it...

  • Windsonde (Intro)
    Windsonde (Intro) by Spl4sh

    Feedback wanted.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! May. 15th, 2013 @ 01:58 AM Reply

Here is a new one

  • Electron Circuit
    Electron Circuit by WilsonMcLeish

    Electron Circuit

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! May. 15th, 2013 @ 01:51 PM Reply

I don't think I've posted here yet -- comments on Soundcloud will be appreciated!
In response to Peter Satera's setting up of the FB group for the Audio Portal, I posted this: a 35-minute reel of rejects and unfinished works.

http://soundcloud.com/troisnyx/wip-and-reject-reel


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! May. 15th, 2013 @ 04:52 PM Reply

http://picosong.com/FjCa/

Skyfall by Adele - Ruined Edition.

I slapped a modulated flanger, reverb, delay and a bass boost and this is what happened? Messed around with it a bit, xD Knobs, so funny.

Maybe I should expand it? Do an actual remix? Make all the instruments 80s style synths and do FX sweep ins and outs?

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! May. 16th, 2013 @ 08:21 AM Reply

https://soundcloud.com/silverpoyozo/asfasgjglkjas23-wip

Hey guys, I started working on this a few hours ago and...for some reason I don't like it very much, but I feel like I should keep working on it.
I'd really appreciate if someone gave me some feedback.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! May. 16th, 2013 @ 05:54 PM Reply

At 5/16/13 08:21 AM, SilverPoyozo wrote: https://soundcloud.com/silverpoyozo/asfasgjglkjas23-wip

add rhytm section and woman singing the names of various mexican meals

https://soundcloud.com/bbbllleeehhh/tumbling-and-bumbling


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! May. 19th, 2013 @ 04:16 PM Reply

I started this song a few days ago, but it went through a lot of different stages where I would rewrite or completely delete large sections. I uploaded it in its current (unfinished) state in the hopes that people will give me some helpful criticism.

Please let me know what parts you like, what parts you didn't, or anything else you think would be helpful for me to know as I attempt to finish this song.

Thanks!

  • Electronic WIP
    Electronic WIP by conorstrejcek

    Something I just started working on

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! May. 19th, 2013 @ 07:04 PM Reply

So I'm working on it, but other than the intro I don't know what else to do with the song. What do you guys think? Should this be a legitimate song, or should it be a video game loop?

http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/536015

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-brody-1/into-darkness-wip

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! May. 20th, 2013 @ 02:31 PM Reply

At 5/15/13 04:52 PM, Grandvision wrote: http://picosong.com/FjCa/

Skyfall by Adele - Ruined Edition.

I slapped a modulated flanger, reverb, delay and a bass boost and this is what happened? Messed around with it a bit, xD Knobs, so funny.

Maybe I should expand it? Do an actual remix? Make all the instruments 80s style synths and do FX sweep ins and outs?

After listening to it, I do think you could remix it with some 80s-like synths. I say go for it! Her voice and the strings in the song are strangely hypnotizing lol. Try listening to some Mitch Murder for some ideas (if you want to go the 80s route).

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! Jul. 4th, 2013 @ 06:31 PM Reply

  • The Beginning Loop 1
    The Beginning Loop 1 by Djeezus1

    Can't fit the whole thing; part 1.

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HELLO please let me know what you think


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