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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-02 15:52:49 Reply

At 12/5/12 09:31 PM, ToxInjection wrote:

While I'm here, could you guys also come and leave me some critique on my track? It's my first time trying out trap, so I could use all the help I can get!
http://www.newgrounds.com/projects/view/629983

I don't really listen to trap but I hope I can help.
The kick stands out a bit in the beginning. Maybe use a high pass filter, but @ the strings (14secs) bypass the filter and unleash the full kick.
I like the way the strings come in as well as the transition @ 25secs, but the synth seems a bit weak imo. maybe layer it with another/different synth that plays an octave lower.
High hats sound good, no complaints.
I like the synth @ 53secs. Goes nicely with the strings, but again could use more meat.
Its good overall, but could benefit from a bass (if there's a subbass I can't tell, I'm using small speakers =P)

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-02 16:38:00 Reply

Heres my first piece of music I've attempted, please don't yell at me for being horrible :) Its kind of work in progress, its only 30 some seconds long as of now, but I plan on expanding it. It was mostly just to practice using the features of the DAW.

  • [WIP] Happy Dance
    [WIP] Happy Dance by 8keep

    A work in progress. With improvization by me

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-02 17:05:21 Reply

Here's my WIP.

If you decide to critisize, please mention the transition @ 23secs. I need help there especially.
Thanks

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-03 01:33:25 Reply

At 8keep:


Heres my first piece of music I've attempted. It was mostly just to practice using the features of the DAW.

Could benefit from some compression to make it sound less wishy-washy.

Also your main synth (the one laying down the chords) is a bit muddy. Try EQ'ing it higher or try to make it less complex (as in the actual notes) in the lower range. Maybe use octaves. remember you've got a bass running aswell. Any complexity not in the melody should be to either give (tonal) rhythm or reinforce the melody with a chord.

Pitch-bend is good, but note directly after it is kinda loud/out the mix.

I like the arpeggio @ 30secs and I enjoyed the melody in general as well as the steady chords.

maybe make this a loop instead of a 50 second song. That way you don't have to end with a crash

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-04 02:09:06 Reply

Hi!

I have a work in progress to review. However this is only for experimental concern on me using orchestral soundfonts, so I won't publish it for commercial work (feel free to download and copy and stuff). I publish it so that anyone can review the progress.

Its a combination of Skyrim, Final Fantasy 8 & 13, and Chrono Cross, so you might hear some of those notes and feelings in it if you play the games. Then again, I need to know how this orchestra piece works out on any of you and how you feel about it, and for that I thank you!

Note that this is only the intro of the music, like 1/4 of it.

And since I read at the first post AP only for finished work, in which this one is only less than half of the work, so I put in on SoundCloud if you don't mind: https://soundcloud.com/mychiilist/ready-for-battle-wip

Thanks again. :D


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-04 16:44:37 Reply

Hey everyone, any advice for how to improve the transitions in this?

  • Hardly the Sound
    Hardly the Sound by GershBeats

    Harmonic Dance track

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Thanks for any advice!

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-05 13:34:09 Reply

Hey guys,

So I'm pretty much done with this track at the composition stage, but I'd really like some feedback about the mixing/mastering. If somebody could tell me a little about that, I'd greatly appreciate it. Prease and thanx?

  • The Showstopper
    The Showstopper by no-ma-designs

    Flug.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-14 09:07:23 Reply

Hey Guys! It is cinematic genertracks of combitation dubstep, orchestral y etc. If you like and can me give advice just tell or ask me!

  • Transformers Arrival
    Transformers Arrival by TellentStudio

    trailer soundtrack

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  • Soldate Arrival
    Soldate Arrival by TellentStudio

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  • Desert Warrior
    Desert Warrior by TellentStudio

    Middle Soundtrack

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-16 18:20:43 Reply

At 1/14/13 09:07 AM, TellentStudio wrote: Hey Guys! It is cinematic genertracks of combitation dubstep, orchestral y etc. If you like and can me give advice just tell or ask me!

Well, I'm not the right guy to talk to when it comes to dubstep but your last submission I think is awesome! I thoroughly enjoy Ambient, and the title of this song fits it very well. Nicely done! No advice to give other than keep it up.

Here is a metal song I'm working on. I'm trying to get a little more creative when it comes to programming drums and be a little less repetitive when it comes to my guitars!

  • Extreme Defecation
    Extreme Defecation by AJtheRipper

    WIP

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-17 18:47:17 Reply

Hey all,

I wouldn't consider this a WIP, but certainly need your advice. I've noticed that this track of mine has a score of less than 3, and I was just curious as to why. Could anyone give me some pointers, please?

  • ---[Battery Acid]---
    ---[Battery Acid]--- by Juicebomb

    Loopable acid-house inspired track, straight from the rusty tunnels

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-18 12:10:48 Reply

I wouldn't consider this a WIP, but certainly need your advice. I've noticed that this track of mine has a score of less than 3, and I was just curious as to why. Could anyone give me some pointers, please?

I'm not a dance expert but some of the voices you used in this seemed a little harsh to the ear. Your structure is very professional sounding if this makes sense but the sounds were pretty stern. Maybe that's just Acid Dance and I'm not hearing it the way I should.

On another note I'm trying to be more technical with guitars. It's apparent that I suck at the instrument and am working endlessly to get better. This is my attempt at a more technical sound I guess:

  • Is this less boring?
    Is this less boring? by AJtheRipper

    More Technical?

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Is it less boring than my previous crap?

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-19 02:24:00 Reply

Hey I have this WIP for a contest on the Audio Forums. I don't know the genre but I want to say electronic/techno.

  • Demon Child
    Demon Child by RobMGy

    Angry Techno/Dance song

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Please either pm, comment here or review the song. I will gladly comment and/or review a piece of yours in exchange. I work for a studio produciing pop and rap tracks but this is the kind of music I write for me, and eventually want to release an album. I feel like I could have some female vocals in place of the main synth sound but not sure.

Thanks!

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-19 17:24:41 Reply

At 1/17/13 06:47 PM, Juicebomb wrote: Hey all,

I wouldn't consider this a WIP, but certainly need your advice. I've noticed that this track of mine has a score of less than 3, and I was just curious as to why. Could anyone give me some pointers, please?
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/519486

Personally, I like it, so it could be either zero-bombing or people just don't like it. Also, experiment with cutting the strings out automatically, and not letting the reverb tail affect it.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-21 13:45:38 Reply

Hello I have two that need help developing, there rough atm, thanks.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-21 18:39:24 Reply

  • DVEEM
    DVEEM by CzeryWassierSwizier

    Nothing interesting here

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This was (and is still being) written for DREAM SPLENDOR. yah.
Any feedback would be highly appreciated.

In fact, I might even give you a cookie. :P


I'm a nub.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-21 22:45:36 Reply

I'm going to post this here in the hopes that people actually browse these topics, but other than that this remix is basically done. Just need to improve on some of the transitions and maybe change a synth. So in the mean time, there is this preview.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-22 21:31:07 Reply

At 1/21/13 10:45 PM, StaticLF wrote: I'm going to post this here in the hopes that people actually browse these topics, but other than that this remix is basically done. Just need to improve on some of the transitions and maybe change a synth. So in the mean time, there is this preview.
http://www.newgrounds.com/projects/view/643527

Sounding good but I'd work on EQing and compressing those drums. This track could really benefit from a super solid kick/snare. The original song is a drum and bass track. DNB always focuses on those super shiny polished heavy ass drums. Sidechain them to the front, then layer a few more kick/snare drums in there that hit different areas of the spectrum. EQ, compress, rinse and repeat. Feed that drum kit until it's nice and fat <3


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-22 21:35:42 Reply

At 1/21/13 06:39 PM, CzeryWassierSwizier wrote: http://www.newgrounds.com/projects/view/643442
This was (and is still being) written for DREAM SPLENDOR. yah.
Any feedback would be highly appreciated.

In fact, I might even give you a cookie. :P

Sounding really bassy and round. I might try brightening things up with a new clap layer/ EQing what you got. Also; sidechain sidechain sidechain. I'd put more emphasis on them drumz. Compress, EQ, distort, filter. Play :)


Giants are too tall. We'll have to stand on top of each others shoulders to survive.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-25 14:58:47 Reply

Could anyone tell me what exactly is this missing? It's supposed to be a soundtrack for one of my games(that don't exist yet). It seems to ber missing something, and I'm completely stuck.

https://soundcloud.com/marian-ivanov-3/rootsoftwo2

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-25 16:55:45 Reply

At 1/22/13 09:35 PM, Quarl wrote:
Sounding really bassy and round. I might try brightening things up with a new clap layer/ EQing what you got. Also; sidechain sidechain sidechain. I'd put more emphasis on them drumz. Compress, EQ, distort, filter. Play :)

Thanks! This was exactly what I looking for.


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-26 12:05:54 Reply

Hi, I have a WIP under heat of apocalyptic inspiration, and I would like constructive criticism on my project:

  • Humanity Is Dying DEMO
    Humanity Is Dying DEMO by TheAntiMatter

    Apocalyptic technotic precision.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-26 13:22:03 Reply

I have this and im working on it right now, do you guys have any suggestions?:

https://soundcloud.com/fs_tone/indigo-preview

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-01-26 14:47:08 Reply

Sorry everyone. I made a mistake with my old song. The harsh sounds caused a lot of ear PMS'ing. I was broken-hearted by the amount of brave ears that were left only injured, muddled and angry. To redeem myself, I made a small piano piece as a WIP and an apology aswell as a gateway to a great start in my musical adventures.

  • No More Bloody Ears
    No More Bloody Ears by TheAntiMatter

    I made a mistake. I am going to resolve it.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-02-16 21:38:12 Reply

I've been messing around in FL Studio. Tell me what you think if you guys like it i'll post download links.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mpGjXjGIyU4&list=PLeNh4AFwFRX 0aPWyVIFFyIINcWsUBbjiM

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-02-16 21:40:27 Reply

Full EP on YouTube what do you guys think?

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mpGjXjGIyU4&list=PLeNh4AFwFRX 0aPWyVIFFyIINcWsUBbjiM

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-02-19 19:30:20 Reply

I recently released a preview for my new track entitled "Eternity".

  • DJSS - Eternity (Preview)
    DJSS - Eternity (Preview) by steelside

    Original trance song with vocals.

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Looking for some good feedback.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-02-23 08:11:54 Reply

  • Brainburn(demonlover)_raw
    Brainburn(demonlover)_raw by Jonicorn

    A song about someone raped by a demon

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Trying to flesh out somekind of "new sound" but I know this isnt it, just a step in the right direction.
The song is made out of 2 pieces of music with different layers of stuff on top. Think I need more or less of something? The drums are a bit sloppy, but mapping drums arnt very fun, i blame my boredom.


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-02-23 08:53:36 Reply

At 2/23/13 08:11 AM, Jonicorn wrote: Trying to flesh out somekind of "new sound" but I know this isnt it, just a step in the right direction.
The song is made out of 2 pieces of music with different layers of stuff on top. Think I need more or less of something? The drums are a bit sloppy, but mapping drums arnt very fun, i blame my boredom.

Listen here instead
https://soundcloud.com/captain-bloodbath/brainburn-demonlove r-raw


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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-02-24 01:44:29 Reply

I REALLLLLYyyyy like this thread. lol.

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Response to Works In Progress Advice Thread! 2013-02-25 20:50:00 Reply

Here is some dubstep / metal influenced stuff I have been working on lately. Any advice is greatly appreciated! ^^

Beyond Belief

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