Hello again, 2nd submission

[Gameslave87]

Hey everybody, this is my 2nd anime style character, i think its a big improvement over my last one. Plz leave feedback

To compare to my 1st, go here http://gameslave87.deviantart.com/art/Fi ghter-s-Stance-65466018

[xMaVx]

Someone's been doin his homework. Keep practicing. ^_^

[Pauly]

it looks pretty good, a very nice improvement from your first attempt.Keep at it!

[SapphireLight]

Very cute. Try adding some crevices in the clothing next time. =)

[xMaVx]

I like the hair a lot too. You're gonna be pro at this before you know it at this rate! Now lets see the next one!

[Gameslave87]

At 9/24/07 02:12 AM, SapphireLight wrote: Very cute. Try adding some crevices in the clothing next time. =)

thx for the tip!

[Pauly]

Also try and make the lines on her body curvier, they look too straight at some places.

[Gameslave87]

At 9/24/07 03:26 AM, ShirtTurtle wrote:

At 9/24/07 02:51 AM, Pauly wrote: Also try and make the lines on her body curvier, they look too straight at some places.

Actually, i'd be confident in saying that almost every line is straight.
I'm not sure if that's good or not. Looks interesting though.

Ur right, every line is straight, i made the whole drawing using lines, thats the syle in the picture, the only problem is, I didnt use quite enuff lines, I need to make more lines to make it look smoother

[McJesus]

Lose the straightness. Looks good.

[BlackmarketKraig]

Her upper half looks alright but from the hips down it's a bit weird, like a couple of different angles are happening at once. Cover up her top half with your hand if you're having trouble seeing it.

It is loads better than your first one, so keep that up.

[Gameslave87]

At 9/24/07 11:24 AM, BlackmarketKraig wrote: Her upper half looks alright but from the hips down it's a bit weird, like a couple of different angles are happening at once. Cover up her top half with your hand if you're having trouble seeing it.

It is loads better than your first one, so keep that up.

that helps alot, thx

[Gameslave87]

thx for all the great feedback every1, i think i'll start a new drawin sumtime this week

[Pauly]

Good luck and don't give up.This piece is pretty nice but as others have said try and make your next drawing smoother and less straight.But if that's the style you were going for then it is pretty interesting.

[Neonyx]

Very nice, great improvement from the first.

[crazerfish50]

you sir, win. this is a great improvement :3

[Black-Chaos]

Impressive amount of improvement, congratulations.

Under any circumstances I am NOT an artist, but just a piece of advise. Try to make the figure more curvaceous. It's a bit too polygonic.

Quick Example:

[Gameslave87]

At 9/24/07 07:28 PM, Black-Chaos wrote: Impressive amount of improvement, congratulations.

Under any circumstances I am NOT an artist, but just a piece of advise. Try to make the figure more curvaceous. It's a bit too polygonic.

Quick Example:

ty for the pic, the visual aid helps

[Superior7]

Alright bro, not really that great, but don't let that discourage you. You need to try out making her more shapely. Add curves to her body, because the sharp/square look isn't working. Maybe try looking up some hentai; a lot of those guys know what they are doing as for as art goes.

[wiid]

I think her hips and legs are too big, but you're improving a lot.

Fuck shit piss.