Poetry... Is Art!!!

[FatherAnderson]

Ok, some of you guys still don't get it. You still cant comprehend the insignificance of the entire spectrum. YOU ALL SUCK! Your poetry sucks, and your minds are just filled with irrelevant dribble. Listen to yourselves. You make me sick. It's like watching little children at Sunday school fighting over apple juice. Your poems are whiny, snotty, and profane. "F**k that b***h" and "all the world is, is death...". Yeah, this crap SUCK!!! Enough of this immature garbage that these little, emo 12 year old spew like some unreadable nonsense they pulled out their ass. So... in order to show you all what true emotional hate can do to a person, i drudged up some old poetry from my earlier days. Back when i was dealing with the loss of my family, and my sanity. So show the people that I can talk the talk, and walk the walk. Here is my sad, demented poetry. Enjoy you bloodsucking heathens.

--- --- ---
Cry, because no one's watching.

The three dimensional projection are of spectral light.
Connections are made with decisions that were air tight.
Only isolated this decisive victory's stimulated.
It's not simulated, movements of fright anticipated.
But it's a carnival on a tour of duty,
As they pull dark medal jackets to establish cruelty.
Black magic voodoo attack through the monitor.
Destruction of assumption, one thing I can promise you.

It's scratched out, cold, sharp as glass.
Ritualistic annihilators murdering your past.
The future's only masked, the last, the feeling,
The seven seal broken in half, memories are reeling.
I've become obsolete, but I'm strong in this heat,
Destroying single minded individuals delivering the feat.
Blood is in the streets, the soul flowing or in retreat.
Deep omens keep my mind overflowing with the thought, like a leach
while my mouth is still silenced with the words of my speech.

Your opening the doors to the corridors full of the stench of death,
The rain's in my eyes, but the truth is in my chest.
I'm just a man who wants some vengeance, and I confess
I am full of rage and sin, locked inside this cage again,
Where evil rains and people like to sin.
Makes you fear sleep but you won't like to end,
So we shine brightly from the dark within.

Dark secrets play corruption with the conscience, now
I'm the lone wolf, forever cursed to cry this howl.
I keep myself locked, to have the ending quickly,
Face is healed but the hurt sticks with me.
Death's chased me wherever i go,
Insanity now just starts to show.
I appreciate the chance to heal,
but I'll kill you, knock you out with the hurt i feel.
Ice pick straight through to your neck,
Turning you into another subconscious wreck.

I will do anything.
Talk to you like I don't care, anything.
To keep you safe from the darkness in here,
But it's reveled by the nightmare.
Stay away from the darkness inside of me.
It grows behind the soul, armed with artillery.
Cannon fodder full of my humanity,
Thrown for the heights like some loss of sanity.

Cant help that the dark roads are filling me,
Cant stop the demons that are howling withing me.
Cant stop the dark voice inside of me,
Cant stop from falling into infinity.

Why try and stop the darkness of reality,
When all around is the sound of insanity.
When all the world is dripping in blood,
Why try and stop the flood.

Cant catch what cant be seen,
Cant make the light wash me clean.
Cant kill what isn't living,
Cant take away that which hasn't been given.
Cant stop this things from feeding,
Cant stop the wound from bleeding.
Cant stop the horror inside of me,
Wont let you take that from me.
Cant stop the pain or sorrow,
Burns in my soul, yesterday and tomorrow.

Cry for help, muffled by the black,
Cant stop it from taking my soul back.
Dont try and stop the unending howl,
Hear the demons deep in my soul growl.
My vision is blurred with shadows of pain,
standing naked in the falling rain.

Crying.
Because everyone around me is dieing.
And lives are passing by, just like their flying,
But I'm crying.
Because inside me, me life is dieing,
Feeling so low, all i can do is keep crying.

Cant stop crying.
Then i guess I'll keep crying.

--- --- ---

So... what do you little pee-brained misfits think of my old self. Pretty good huh? WELL IT'S BETTER THEN YOUR CRAP!!!

So... how do you rate this crap? Please, be FULLY open. We don't need you all to go to hell just becuase you lied to yourself. Or do we?

By the way. To all of those who will start whining and complaining, and giving me shit. I have but one thing to say. "The Lord knows where you live", and so do I...

So Sayeth; FATHER ANDERSON!!!

SMITE HEATHENS!!!

[MiddleFingerRings]

Poetry is art. So is dance, story-writing, and pretty much everything else, however, it is NOT VISUAL ART. This forum is for visual art. Go to general, chum.

[FatherAnderson]

At 9/9/07 12:51 AM, MiddleFingerRings wrote:

Go to general, chum.

Point is noted, and taken into consideration. Next time I'll do that. BUT DID YOU READ IT ALL!?!?!

[Sexylegs]

At 9/9/07 12:52 AM, FatherAnderson wrote:

At 9/9/07 12:51 AM, MiddleFingerRings wrote:

Go to general, chum.

Point is noted, and taken into consideration. Next time I'll do that. BUT DID YOU READ IT ALL!?!?!

Haha, you asked MFR if he read it all...hahaha....

Listen, dude, MFR is an artist. I really don't think he understands the "read" concept of life.

[FatherAnderson]

OH DEAR LORD!!! What? Too ...LOOOONG for you? Come on. Ok, just ignore the insults, and get to the poem.

[AnAndersonsAngel]

... this is... too deep. Urghh, i think i just puked again.

[Shpowzurry]

At 9/9/07 01:32 AM, ShirtTurtle wrote:

At 9/9/07 12:58 AM, Searp3nt wrote: Listen, dude, MFR is an artist. I really don't think he understands the "read" concept of life.

yea dood artits dont need 2 lern how too reed.

Yeah man, exactly. My point.

[Sexylegs]

At 9/9/07 01:56 AM, Shpowzurry wrote:

At 9/9/07 01:32 AM, ShirtTurtle wrote:

At 9/9/07 12:58 AM, Searp3nt wrote: Listen, dude, MFR is an artist. I really don't think he understands the "read" concept of life.

yea dood artits dont need 2 lern how too reed.

Yeah man, exactly. My point.

Can you...like...not back MY points up? Please?

[alicetheDroog]

I'm gonna make a thread about dancing, and theater.

[G-Banger]

Haha, art forum is as good as general.

[squeakytoad]

At 9/9/07 12:49 AM, FatherAnderson wrote: Yeah, this crap SUCK!!!

For a "writer", your grammar certainly is suck.

[squeakytoad]

Thought I'd address the content of the poem (and your attitude) rather than just your grammatical shortcomings.

You're rather arrogant, as is quite obvious. Even more obvious is that you love italicizing, bolding, underlining, and caps locking your text. This is kind of annoying, and makes you seem a little over-dramatic considering this is just a post on Newground's BBS.

You also need to stop thinking your opinions are more important than the collective. Perhaps you might say the collective is less intelligent, but your opinions differ from the more intelligent within and outside the collective as well, so I doubt you'd like to compare yourself to them.
You may call your "poetry" art if you wish, but it doesn't fall under the guidelines for the kind of content everyone else wants in the Art Forum.

Most poetry is like abstract paintings. Nobody gives a crap except the artists and the ones who pretend there's so much deeper content involved.
It's usually the more humorous and light hearted poems, and perhaps the more satirical, that people enjoy. The "darker" and more "emotional" work that attempts to make up for its lack of entertainment by wrapping itself in layers of "depth" is usually quite boring, and doesn't make for a good read. Usually it's either remarkably cheesy or just plain lame.

The latter case is your "poem". I found it very shallow, despite the attempted death. I'm really sorry about your family, man, and would usually sympathize even further, and retain my comments about your sentimental work, if it were not for the attitude in which your presented it and your reasons for presenting it.
Most of your expressions are trite and cliche. There's nothing here we haven't read before. No metaphors or similes that cause the imagination to bound.
There's no emotion displayed here that causes the reader to feel it themselves. It feels so cheap, really, as if the poem were written for the sake of writing it, rather than expressing feeling.
Your poem is remarkably cheesy as well. You try to hard at points to make it "demented". It ends up sounding like one of the punk emo kids you insult quite thoroughly in your opening statements.

Basically, you're a bad "poet" with a bad attitude who can't actually produce "art", so therefore insults anyone who might say this before they even have a chance to express their opinions.

I pity you.

[insipidmortal]

At 9/9/07 12:58 AM, Searp3nt wrote: Listen, dude, MFR is an artist. I really don't think he understands the "read" concept of life.

so, im not an artist because i have read dante alighiri (spelling?), william blake, hp lovecraft etc.?

[test-object]

To prevent these kind of threads...
Only visual art in this forum. Don't start arguing.

[ZekeySpaceyLizard]

What a train wreck of a thread.

Vastly entertaining.

[FatherAnderson]

IS THIS ALL YOU HAVE TO WHINE ABOUT?!?!?! Look, I know that you feel that you all can cut down those who spell incorrectly, but my computer is SLOW!!! and but the time i am done writing this, it will have only shown about 1/4 of the text.

Yeah, so don't complain. Oh, and yes i am arrogant. But thats only becuase you all don't understand that i don't care what you think. And i only put this stuff out here in order to see your immature reactions o things you don't understand. Because you all "shoot first, and ask questions later" ... "I don't understand it, KILL IT!" ...or the americans, "kill it. what was it?"

FATHER ANDERSON...

I laugh at you!

[FatherAnderson]

At 9/9/07 03:55 AM, squeakytoad wrote: Basically, you're a bad "poet" with a bad attitude who can't actually produce "art", so therefore insults anyone who might say this before they even have a chance to express their opinions.

I pity you.

Ok. Fine. why don't you back up your sarcasm with some of YOUR poetry. HMMmmmmm? Oh, yeah. thats right. You cant.

No... I pity YOU!

[Havayosunu]

you poet guys... why don't you ask Tom for a writers' forum? this forum is for visual art. look, music is art too and it has an audio portal for it. and i think i dont need to mention flash portal. in fact everything in NG is art, yeah.

but this forum is for visual art, not for the others.

so, ask Tom for a writers' forum or a section in NG for literature, with this challenging spirit.

[ImaFreekozoid]

At 9/9/07 01:12 PM, FatherAnderson wrote: IS THIS ALL YOU HAVE TO WHINE ABOUT?!?!?! Look, I know that you feel that you all can cut down those who spell incorrectly, but my computer is SLOW!!! and but the time i am done writing this, it will have only shown about 1/4 of the text.

Yeah, so don't complain. Oh, and yes i am arrogant. But thats only becuase you all don't understand that i don't care what you think. And i only put this stuff out here in order to see your immature reactions o things you don't understand. Because you all "shoot first, and ask questions later" ... "I don't understand it, KILL IT!" ...or the americans, "kill it. what was it?"

FATHER ANDERSON...

I laugh at you!

Lame.

Just because you've gone through rough shit doesn't give you full authority to call everyone else 'immature'. You're the one being a baby about it and obviously you wanted some sorts of opinions/sympathy/argument seeing as you made this topic. We 'don't understand', you say? Well, now you're just making ridiculously condescending assumptions. I can understand things in this poem just fine, it's a long, miserable rambling on how depressed you felt at the time. I understand, I've had shit in my life as well. I'm not saying I've suffered more or less than you, because it's really beside the point. I was planning on letting you know that I found it fairly deep and at points my eyes watered a tad, but now it seems pointless if you're just going to try to shove in others faces how we should bow down to your mighty poetry because we could never comprehend and understand your perceptive writings and deep, spiraling emotions. If you don't respect others first, you'll never be respected, despite however good you are at something.

[Havayosunu]

At 9/9/07 06:10 AM, test-object wrote: To prevent these kind of threads...
Only visual art in this forum. Don't start arguing.

a-ha! here s your sanctuary, you dont need to ask Tom, there s already a place for you.

thanks testy for this solution, u r a real NG member ^^

[novistdores]

Well, "Father Anderson"....are you really a chrsitian? somehow i havea hard time believeing it, and as a fellow brother, im quite ashamed of your gung-ho-iness. Yea, im 16, and yea, i hang out with a bunch of emo kids. But no, you arent the only one with problems,and unfrotunately, you arent the only one who "shoots first and asks questions later" When you try to denounce something, dont do it yourself. Thats like saying "dont drink" while downing a fifth. As well...how can you possibly be arrogent. Your worsd show no glimpse into a life that a fellow chrstian would lead. Your very signature says "despair heathens!" Is not arrogance a quality of said heathens?
Im done. Just think about it, and dont try to shoot me down because my opinions different than yours.
And dont pull that "you dont know what ive been through" bullcrap either
Ive heard that anough
Think of what He went through, for you.

[dodo-man-1]

At 9/9/07 12:49 AM, FatherAnderson wrote: So... what do you little pee-brained misfits think of my old self. Pretty good huh? WELL IT'S BETTER THEN YOUR CRAP!!!

So... how do you rate this crap? Please, be FULLY open. We don't need you all to go to hell just becuase you lied to yourself. Or do we?

By the way. To all of those who will start whining and complaining, and giving me shit. I have but one thing to say. "The Lord knows where you live", and so do I...

So Sayeth; FATHER ANDERSON!!!

SMITE HEATHENS!!!

Wow. You're pleasant. You complain about our emo poetry... what was that, then? You only think you aren't emo because you're too religious. "Smite heathens..." the sadness kills the funny...

[novistdores]

never said i wasnt emo, and especially not saying im not emo cause im religious
im not emo cause its stupid. shit happens, woopity doo
just saying dont jump the gun cause you assume no one else has suffered like you have.

[x-factor11]

ugg..wheres blackmarket when you need him..

[Dookiemaister]

how bout we listen to what the mods and administrators have to say about all this?
:that is, if they come here...

[dodo-man-1]

Lucky for us he has this in his blog, too, so when this thread gets deleted we can flame him there...

[BlackmarketKraig]

At 9/9/07 01:38 PM, x-factor11 wrote: ugg..wheres blackmarket when you need him..

Lol.

The forum is for visual arts. You posted some unoriginal picture trying to smart ass around the 'If you are starting a new topic you MUST start with a piece of your own original art....' rule. So, obviously, you've read the rules you just didn't follow them. The sticky does not explicitly state that the art forum is for visual art only, but that is the consensus.

Go to general or the Poetry Club with this.