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Critque please. 2007-07-11 23:33:04 Reply

I would highly appreciate critique on my work, i am REALLY looking to get better and critique is VERY helpful.

My Deviant Art.
This is where i put my newest art, PLEASE view and critique on this thread or Deviant Art. This may not be the formal way to ask for critique, i apologize... if that is needed.

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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 00:00:50 Reply

Hey SN,

Rules

- If you are starting a new topic, you MUST start with a piece of your own original art. If you are looking for advice, please share your work as an example of what you are trying to accomplish.

So if you could post something, that would be fantastic.


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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 00:08:53 Reply

At 7/12/07 12:00 AM, BlackmarketKraig wrote: Hey SN,

Rules

- If you are starting a new topic, you MUST start with a piece of your own original art. If you are looking for advice, please share your work as an example of what you are trying to accomplish.

So if you could post something, that would be fantastic.

D: This is very embarrassing, i seem to be blind... tried to look for the rules before hand but i guess i couldn't find them. Sorry :x

Okay this is one of my recent works and it is my attempt at a new style...

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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 07:04:55 Reply

At 7/12/07 12:08 AM, Slippery-Nipple wrote:
D: This is very embarrassing, i seem to be blind... tried to look for the rules before hand but i guess i couldn't find them. Sorry :x

Okay this is one of my recent works and it is my attempt at a new style...

At least this wasn't instantly locked. :) Lucky man.

That's not bad. The face is demented, but maybe that's what you wanted, like Picasso.

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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 07:54:47 Reply

Yea, i like the picasso look, 7/10


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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 12:44:59 Reply

thats pretty good :).

can we see more? i like it?


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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 13:08:22 Reply

At 7/12/07 12:44 PM, crazerfish50 wrote: thats pretty good :).

can we see more? i like it?

Thank you all for the comments :D

As for more... no more of the "Picasso" pieces but this is my newest...

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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 13:17:40 Reply

simple, but excellent :)


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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 13:28:10 Reply

First one 8/10 second one 7.5/10 very good work


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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 16:50:06 Reply

Thank you all for the comments ;3

For this piece i am looking for constructive criticism on the lighting, anatomy and shading. Please i am really trying to get better.

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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 18:01:06 Reply

At 7/12/07 04:50 PM, Slippery-Nipple wrote: For this piece i am looking for constructive criticism on the lighting, anatomy and shading. Please i am really trying to get better.

His ear looks kinda strange, they shouldn't be so... triangular.

Good work though.

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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 18:33:12 Reply

At 7/12/07 06:01 PM, HeRetiK wrote:
At 7/12/07 04:50 PM, Slippery-Nipple wrote: For this piece i am looking for constructive criticism on the lighting, anatomy and shading. Please i am really trying to get better.
His ear looks kinda strange, they shouldn't be so... triangular.

Good work though.

Thank you so much for the tip, so the lighting isn't bad or you don't know anyway to improve it to your knowledge? :o

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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 18:55:19 Reply


Thank you so much for the tip, so the lighting isn't bad or you don't know anyway to improve it to your knowledge? :o

actually, the shading, you might wanna put it under the cheekebone. thats all the qritique i can offer :P


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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 19:32:36 Reply

Thank you, here is the update :o

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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 20:07:32 Reply

At 7/12/07 07:32 PM, Slippery-Nipple wrote: Thank you, here is the update :o

Great work, but put the shading on the right side of his face under his mouth, and make it curve, just slightly over it. Would make it look much better.

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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 20:31:45 Reply

At 7/12/07 07:32 PM, Slippery-Nipple wrote: Thank you, here is the update :o

that minut change made it even better :)


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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 20:49:29 Reply

Okay :D

Keep the emo eye things or not? I thought that it looks better without.

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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 20:55:17 Reply

Aww... I liked the black tear sacs.
But it's just a matter of taste I guess :)

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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 21:10:05 Reply

At 7/12/07 08:49 PM, Slippery-Nipple wrote: Okay :D

Keep the emo eye things or not? I thought that it looks better without.

YOU MUST KEEP teh EMO EYES!!


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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 21:31:47 Reply

The purple one's my fav.... I'd buy it if it were a poster, no joke.


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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-12 22:19:35 Reply

At 7/12/07 09:31 PM, Sovereign0nion wrote: The purple one's my fav.... I'd buy it if it were a poster, no joke.

I'll seriously try and work something out if you are sincere :O, thank you for the self esteem boost :D i love your work.

Final update, i don't think i need to improve on this guy any more :O!

Added a poopy background and the emo eyes.

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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-13 00:55:28 Reply

I like how you did the outlines, very clean

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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-13 12:24:37 Reply

At 7/12/07 08:49 PM, Slippery-Nipple wrote: Okay :D

Keep the emo eye things or not? I thought that it looks better without.

keep them...definitley.


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Response to Critque please. 2007-07-13 12:47:18 Reply

Not bad. Not bad at all. You've earned a kudos from BitmapPirate.


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Response to Critque please. 2007-10-06 16:07:22 Reply

I'm back. I have since topped using flash and have been using paper and pen.

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Bigger, better, and on DA.

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Response to Critque please. 2007-10-06 21:30:10 Reply

At 7/12/07 10:19 PM, Slippery-Nipple wrote: Final update, i don't think i need to improve on this guy any more :O!
Added a poopy background and the emo eyes.

The moment an artist feels he is satisfied with their art is the moment they become lazy. Always strive for better.

But, if you arn't going to improve on it, I'd say for future works with lighting, try imagining the point at which the light is comming from. Think about how the light path is interupted by the objects it hits. If light hits an object, chances are, if it's not transparent, that the object behind it will not recieve any light.

Another thing is that light does not change the color into a solid new color. It seems you went with a blue light, so there should be blue added the base color, not just blue. I love the tutorial that Dile shared with us a while back, it helps a lot. Below is the pic from it to help you with lighing color.

Hope that helps for future reference.

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Response to Critque please. 2007-10-07 15:06:58 Reply

At 10/6/07 09:30 PM, Tianaman wrote: Another thing is that light does not change the color into a solid new color. I love the tutorial that Dile shared with us a while back, it helps a lot. Below is the pic from it to help you with lighing color.

Hope that helps for future reference.

Wow! Thank you. This really helps.

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Response to Critque please. 2008-04-13 22:33:59 Reply

More stuff from class, all semi-blind. It was VERY annoying to resize and reduce the quality of the image so i could put it up here.

Here are the links to them...

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Semi-blind classroom
Self-portrait semi-blind

Criticism please >:(

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Response to Critque please. 2008-04-13 22:41:48 Reply

I like this. while it is nice the outline overlaps make it a little hard to see the images until you look at it for a while. the other pieces on DA are good as well.


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Response to Critque please. 2008-04-13 22:44:56 Reply

At 4/13/08 10:41 PM, SirSeraphdeFallen wrote: I like this. while it is nice the outline overlaps make it a little hard to see the images until you look at it for a while. the other pieces on DA are good as well.

Thank you, i want a bigger scanner :\