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At 7/8/07 01:50 PM, hijackreaper wrote:

At 7/8/07 01:41 PM, Sarai wrote: At least I write more than 11 lines per chapter. The author can request his own lock if he wants to limit the damage. *shrug* Not many of us get good story-lines on the BBS that haven't been done before. Kinda like films though, if you can get good actors and lines you can redo a concept time and again.

well, that was a 3-part chapter. plus, it was only a prologue at that. chapter 2 will have 4 parts, each 6-9 paragraphs each. they will take a while, but i'm confident.

Okay. Everyone can improve, me you, even Earfetish over there. I hope that the next ones have good content and depth :)

My guy is sounding badass. I think I need to give Advent Rising some credit for the name. And the story is going well, for an original. Still though, it kind of has a Naruto theme.

And I dont like Naruto

At 7/8/07 01:51 PM, Sarai wrote:

At 7/8/07 01:50 PM, hijackreaper wrote:

At 7/8/07 01:41 PM, Sarai wrote: At least I write more than 11 lines per chapter. The author can request his own lock if he wants to limit the damage. *shrug* Not many of us get good story-lines on the BBS that haven't been done before. Kinda like films though, if you can get good actors and lines you can redo a concept time and again.

well, that was a 3-part chapter. plus, it was only a prologue at that. chapter 2 will have 4 parts, each 6-9 paragraphs each. they will take a while, but i'm confident.

Okay. Everyone can improve, me you, even Earfetish over there. I hope that the next ones have good content and depth :)

thanks.

chapter 2 really gets deep. Jason goes to war, Aiden becomes a dragon, Aiden's birthday comes... it's alot more than that, probably around.. 74 new things.

By any chance is the main theme to this story a secret to living your life so that it becomes better for you by thinking positive thoughts?

Or is this a different "The Secret"?

At 7/7/07 11:10 PM, hijackreaper wrote: I'm going to need a few volunteers to be part of this story, before i start.

Put me in

how come they allow advertisement for this but flashplayer5 doesnt get to advertise or show his story here?!

Name:DVC
Age:15
Wepon: can shoot lazers out of his eyes and has a super form that has not yet been unlocked and has a M16 (hes in the marines and he discovers his lazers further on in the stroy)
Hobbies: bombing alien bastards joking around and driveing (preferbly tanks)
Likes:Guns Killing Video Games
Dislikes: Aliens

sorry for double post but forgett the lazers and super form sence i dint read all posts you said no super wepons aand birth date july 9th 2556
bloodtypeAB there

Can I be in it?

can i join??

Name: Mike Hawk
birthaday: 1/01/1337
Awesomeness
likes: porn
dislikes not porn