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Posted at: 10/10/07 07:22 AM

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I used to write fantasy, but I moved more towards real-life. People say I have the imagination for fantasy and sci-fi. -shrug- I just dunno. I found this beauty in my virtual archives. What do ya'll think?

The forest was quiet and peaceful during the times of winter. Snow rested in the boughs of the trees and on the forest floor. The snow was a pure white, when the sun hit it the snow would blind one that saw it.

Past the muffled forest was a castle. This castle was tall and the largest in the land. Not even the King knew all of the secret passages. The King was young, only 32. His wife was a prize indeed. The Queen was a year younger at thirty-one. However, she looked in her mid-twenties, perhaps younger. Her hair was a light brown and her eyes a lovely caramel. She was curved in all of the right places and she demanded perfection. She was tall, making her all the more beautiful. She was at least three-fourths of a head taller than her husband.

Queen Joanne was never cruel. She was always kind to everyone, be they the lowliest slave or the highest bishop. This kindness made her very popular in the kingdom.

That winter she was pregnant, almost full term. According to the midwife Joanne was to have a baby girl. Joanne and King Rupert Avrilian still hadn't figured out a name for their daughter. There was only two days until their daughter would enter the world.

In the late afternoon a guard entered the room with news of a visitor. "Let him in," Rupert said. Joanne was lying in the bed, her enlarged stomach prominent. Rupert sat beside his wife on the bed as a man entered. He wore a fur coat and a robe of emerald color.

"My Lord, my Lady. It has come to my attention that you are expecting a child," the stranger said. "Yes we are. She shall be born in two days," Rupert said. The stranger held up a hand. "That is where you are wrong my Lord. You are to have a son," the stranger said. Rupert sat up. "Who are you? Why are you here?" Rupert said. "My name is Balthazar. I am a warlock and come from the land across the ocean," the man said.

"It has come to our attention that your son carries a disease within him. This disease is deadly and is highly contagious. If he isn't treated quickly after he is born, he will die and the disease will spread throughout the kingdom like wildfire. I must ask of you to allow me to take him to my home to treat him. If not, I will have to take him by force," Balthazar said. His emerald eyes sparkled as he watched the expectant parents. Everything he said was a lie.

He had come because the child in Joanne's womb was a sorcerer. His job was whenever a sorcerer was identified, he was to find him or her and take them to the land of Kilian. "Is that a threat sir?" asked Rupert. "I am merely saying that the disease your son carries could wipe out your entire kingdom in less than two weeks," Balthazar replied. "Why has it not affected my wife?" asked Rupert. "She is immune to it because she houses the boy. Her immunity nullifies its affects and keeps it from spreading to others," replied Balthazar, clasping his hands before him.

"Very well. You may stay in the castle until my wife gives birth. You may take our son to your homeland to heal him and rid him of this horrid disease," Rupert said, scratching his light brown beard.

Balthazar's eyes flicked to the books on the bed and hid a smile. "If I may, may I suggest a name for your son?" Balthazar said, his gaze going back to the couple. "Of course," Joanne spoke for the first time. "Renar Asrilo," Balthazar said. "Very well, Renar Asrilo it is," Joanne said. Balthazar bowed and slid out of the room quickly, hiding a smile.

Balthazar took Renar Asrilo Avrilian away two days later. Balthazar fed the boy with cow's milk as he traveled with the child. Renar was a quiet child, sleeping most of the trip. Balthazar brought him before the Kilian council after a couple months of traveling. The council was in meeting for over three hours while Balthazar waited with the child. As he waited he watched as a child of a mere three years of age walked past, literally walking on air. Balthazar had learned levitation at two years of age. He scoffed to himself as he continued to watch the child walk along. The youth was still wobbly as he walked, meaning he was the same on the ground.

Balthazar looked up as the child's caretaker came over and picked the child up, reprimanding him with a harsh slap on the thigh. The child began to bawl and the two walked off. Balthazar shook his head and glanced at the sleeping child in his arms. Renar was sleeping peacefully wrapped up in his blanket.

"Balthazar, they have made their decision," came the voice of the female warlock at the door. Balthazar nodded and stood. He entered the council chambers and bowed. "The child is to spend the first thirteen years here in the castle. On his fourteenth birthday he is to assigned to you, Balthazar, as your apprentice," the oldest of the warlocks said. "Sir, I already have an apprentice," Balthazar said, surprised. "Johs is dead as far as you're concerned Balthazar. He has turned evil, you no longer have the right to call him your pupil," the Master Warlock said. Balthazar's eyes widened slightly but he nodded. "Of course sir. It shall be done as you request."

The Master Warlock nodded and Balthazar left. "Where is Jolani?" asked Balthazar to the female warlock. Jolani was the caretaker of the students under three years of age. "She's right behind you sir," the warlock replied. Balthazar turned and closed his eyes in shock. He opened them and shook his head. "Don't do that Jolani," Balthazar growled. "I apologize Balthazar. This must be Renar Asrilo Avrilian," Jolani said, taking the boy from Balthazar's arms. "Yes, it is. His time in the castle is the usual time, thirteen years," Balthazar said. Jolani nodded. "Of course. Goodbye Balthazar," Jolani said and walked off with the child.


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Not bad thething. Alright, All writers 13 and up are highly recommended to post anything you have done to that site if your looking for reviews and critism. That way we don't get another 300 posts asking people to review their storys :P.

However, after you've posted there you can post back here anyways. That way you can share your story with the whole newgrounds BBS users. After all, what is a writers club without storys and poems?


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At 10/10/07 03:28 PM, gunground wrote: All writers 13 and up are highly recommended to post anything

I'm 12. :(

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At 10/10/07 01:15 AM, Phantom wrote:
At 10/9/07 08:10 PM, TheThing wrote: Like I said, join critters. You get to read and review a bunch of stories, submit your own to be reviewed, and it's free.
I've only written one Fantasy story, and no Science fiction or horror, though I would like to try making horror once.

Meh, I thought it would be good if you did write stuff like that. Even if you only have 1 story, all you have to do is stay around for a week, get your reviews, and then quit.

At 10/10/07 07:22 AM, 1Housefan wrote: I used to write fantasy, but I moved more towards real-life. People say I have the imagination for fantasy and sci-fi. -shrug- I just dunno.

Try it; I think it's a lot better of an exercise for writing, since you can do whatever you want in those stories.

I found this beauty in my virtual archives. What do ya'll think?

I'll read it in a moment. Speaking of stories,
here's mine. It's fresh, and it's the sequel to the acclaimed and highly controversial The Sword (which I recently edited, and will be up once Zen decides to respond to me.

At 10/10/07 03:28 PM, gunground wrote: /quote

I think the site is more for adults than teenagers. I'm not sure that I'm supposed to be there. Whatever. And I'm sure that if we put a Fantasy, Sci-Fi, or Horror story up there, we'd put it here.

At 10/10/07 04:10 PM, Centurion-Ryan wrote: I'm 12. :(

Sucks to be you!


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Hey Housefan, that was a pretty nice story. And I'd like to say one thing, You need to make a new paragraph whenever someone new is talking. Example:

Bob said, "Let's go to the movies."
(New Paragraph)
"Why not?" replied Bill.

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At 10/10/07 03:28 PM, gunground wrote: Not bad thething. Alright, All writers 13 and up are highly recommended to post anything you have done to that site if your looking for reviews and critism. That way we don't get another 300 posts asking people to review their storys :P.

However, after you've posted there you can post back here anyways. That way you can share your story with the whole newgrounds BBS users. After all, what is a writers club without storys and poems?

i can feel that we are going to be on the subject of sci-fi, horror, and fantasy for a while,

"sigh"
might as well join the site tomorrow...
someone remind me.

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At 10/11/07 11:07 PM, MonkeyV wrote: i can feel that we are going to be on the subject of sci-fi, horror, and fantasy for a while,

Not me, I'm writing another Drama about a self conscience hit-man who is taken on quite a ride on his latest mission. "Killers" Coming to a BBS post near you, sometime soon.

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At 10/11/07 08:16 AM, Zodir wrote: Hey Housefan, that was a pretty nice story. And I'd like to say one thing, You need to make a new paragraph whenever someone new is talking. Example:

Bob said, "Let's go to the movies."
(New Paragraph)
"Why not?" replied Bill.

I've always written like how I did with that. And that story is from years ago. I suppose if I made a new paragraph everytime someone new spoke, my pages would be a lot longer. XD

anywho...yeah...


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At 10/10/07 04:10 PM, Centurion-Ryan wrote:
At 10/10/07 03:28 PM, gunground wrote: All writers 13 and up are highly recommended to post anything
I'm 12. :(

Close enough :P. Go ahead and post anyways.


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Yaay! I like that attitude gunground! One time I was banned from an online forum forever just because I was younger that 14! I was 12 at the time, and it made me quite wary of online forums. But that is a thing of the past now.

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At 10/12/07 05:19 PM, GOTHCLAWZ wrote: Hey is it cool if I join you guys?
I'm into journalism.

Well, journalist or not, you should have read our rules which are explained on the first post. You need to post some details about yourself before we'll let you in, and you should also rarely if ever make such a short post, with HTML...

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At 10/11/07 11:07 PM, MonkeyV wrote: i can feel that we are going to be on the subject of sci-fi, horror, and fantasy for a while,

I don't think so.

might as well join the site tomorrow...

It's not just to post stories; you can just review them. So Phantom, if you read this, tell everyone to join so they can practice reviewing, and read a couple good stories a week.

Also, no comments on meh story? I thought this was a give and take relationship? I review your stories, you review my occasional monster length of a story (had to go into the comments section to fit it all in).


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At 10/12/07 05:19 PM, GOTHCLAWZ wrote: Hey is it cool if I join you guys?
I'm into journalism.

Journalism, thats new. How come I never thought of that? We should see if we can somehow conjoin together with the newgrounds newspaper crew.

O, and yes you can join, just as long as you put your stats.


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How many years have you been writing: 1 year as a hobby
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How many real life story's you have written: Real life as in fiction? 0. Stories for the hell of it? 6
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Hello, I wish to join the writers club here on Newgrounds. I wish to do so to improve my writing and maybe get some reviews on my work too.

I have been writing for a long time, on/off from writers blocks and such. I think I started my first story 4 years ago. That doesn't mean I have written non-stop since then. Studying and such have had me tied. I have written and "published" my first chapter of a writing I hope will become a trilogy. I have written and "published" 1 short story to get through my writers block. I have never had the pleasure of writing a flash script. I have recently started a side project, to get my creativity going for my main project.

I am a Science Fiction/Fantasy writer, mainly because I hate our national Danish literature that is composed of tales about life as it is. They somehow always end up being stories about people going through a depression and end up insane (not the H.P Lovecraft insane we all love) and they commit suicide. I prefer the Sci Fi/Fantasy realm because that is as far away from Danish literature as I can possibly get.

I hope you will consider including me in your club. Thanks for reading.

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At 10/12/07 08:11 PM, gunground wrote:
At 10/12/07 05:19 PM, GOTHCLAWZ wrote: Hey is it cool if I join you guys?
I'm into journalism.
Journalism, thats new. How come I never thought of that? We should see if we can somehow conjoin together with the newgrounds newspaper crew.

O, and yes you can join, just as long as you put your stats.

k...

How many years have you been writing:

5 (only small poetic stuff from time to time).

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0

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I tend to use poetical speech like when a kid in my class is acting imaturely & I say to him "Ben, You tarnish the maturity or year 9" course I'm year 10 now & starting to write songs & poetry, But the songs are going better.

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TheThing, I read your story, very good. I liked a lot. I espicially liked the fight scene between Steve and the other guy.

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At 10/13/07 10:27 AM, GOTHCLAWZ wrote: Sign-Up Date:

Wow, you make me laugh, first you come to the club I lead, the NGDD and act like an asshole and then you come here, a club in which I participate and you post ALL of this USELESS crap about yourself, get it Barbie, no one cares about you, no one wants to hear your sad fucking life about tranny fathers and fat-ass mothers. so do me a favor, act like a fucking human being and not a twitching, ass scratching monkey, and maybe I'll be alright with you being here.

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At 10/13/07 01:16 PM, Phantom wrote: no one wants to hear your sad fucking life about tranny fathers and fat-ass mothers. so do me a favor, act like a fucking human being and not a twitching, ass scratching monkey, and maybe I'll be alright with you being here.

Phantom, you are perhaps the biggest e-asshole I have ever met.

Though that was also the best insult I have ever heard on or off the intertubes.

...I'm torn.

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At 10/13/07 01:59 PM, GOTHCLAWZ wrote: What don't you like about me?

I'll tell you exactly what I don't like about you, you are a sloth, you make no effort to read the rules of a club before you join it, you are disrespectful to other people and you are so unable to take any criticism, like earlier today with your dumb-ass attempt to steal my signature. Rings a bell?

At 10/13/07 02:29 PM, Centurion-Ryan wrote: Phantom, you are perhaps the biggest e-asshole I have ever met.

What do you mean by perhaps you sheep pushing puberty struck man-child? I am the biggest.

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At 10/13/07 03:05 PM, Phantom wrote:
At 10/13/07 01:59 PM, GOTHCLAWZ wrote: What don't you like about me?
I'll tell you exactly what I don't like about you, you are a sloth,

An exotic animal?

you make no effort to read the rules of a club before you join it

True, ok, Sorry, though I've already read them now.

you are disrespectful to other people and you are so unable to take any criticism

I've just asked you for criticism

like earlier today with your dumb-ass attempt to steal my signature. Rings a bell?

I wasen't attempting to steal your sig, I was being funny. One of the things it said in the BBs is "If you diden't visit the BBS to have fun then don't post"

I still don't understand what you mean by being disrespectful to others users.

Anything else?


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At 10/13/07 06:40 AM, SenIsteR wrote: I hope you will consider including me in your club. Thanks for reading.

welcome aboard.

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hey guys, it been awile since I last posted, but anyway:

I got another essay assignment, which I followed up with a short story, hope you enjoy! Also comment about it in my story in my page please.

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ASSIGNMENT:
Imagine living in a society where kids do not have to attend school. Instead, they are expected to teach themselves. Write an essay comparing and contrasting teaching yourself with attending school. Explain how you would teach yourself. What resources would you use? Describe several ways your life would be different if you did not have to attend school and several ways it would stay the same. Give specific examples.

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MY ESSAY:

October, 8th, 2007.
4 days after Arrival day (A-day).

Its nuts, they have assumed full control over the city, or whatever left of it. Yet surprisingly, most of the city is still intact. I don't know about other places. Any way of communication that I can think of is jammed. Any building that did not suffer great damage was left alone, but for the ones that did fall, the erected structure of their own in its place. I don't like the feel of them...

October, 9th, 2007.
5 days after A-day.

Our "Space Buddies" have made announcements today. First off, any sort of activity like a club, even school for that matter, is to be stopped. Thank god, I hate school, and to me it works like this. "If you are able to do something productive in life or entertain yourself, School shalt come and get in the way, and thou shall be bored again!" or that's how I have written it in my bible anyways... BUT BACK ON TOPIC. That also gives me reason to worry. I am not entertaining myself, and I am not being productive according to the fact there is no school. So in the end, I got nothing they would want.

Now, second on our friend's agendas, everyone must report to the new structures on a certain day at a certain time to be "Upgraded." Now, what upgraded means? Please... DON'T ASK. You will get the same answer from me if you ask what 124231432.354 times 96956908.245 is, I don't know!

I picked up a math book to try to soften my boredom, and when school starts up again, I am going to be ahead. I hope it makes things easier for me. It's nice to try to teach yourself because your schedule can be more flexible, but the fact that I can't look at a textbook for very long without burning my eyes out my sockets is still there.

For example, Y - 2 < 6 + R/3.

Gah! What?!?!?!

So instead of me doing the problem,
I think up a sarcastic counter-equation:
Me loving math homework = Time paradox.

But then again, trying to just learn everything out of a textbook isn't the really easy to do. That's why they hire teachers.

I did not study L.A., I feel pretty good in those areas. Also, science I feel like I know A lot. In social studies, I just wonder what the use will be in a time like this. It just feels unnecessary because we have problems to worry about now, so why worry about ones in the past?

You know, since schools been out, I really don't know how my friends are doing and how they're handling this time. I hope they are OK.

Wow, I got off topic Big time. So anyway, I am going to check out that tower tomorrow, but right now, I am beat.

October, 10th, 2007
6 days after A-day

Oh god... The tower. I saw people go in, and they came out different, they were in blue jumpsuits when they came out with overlying metal plates going down the front of their left leg, and the top of their right arm. That was not the worst still. Their eyes, they were just so... Lifeless.

One thing I saw that there was a wall that everyone's hand was on. I figure that it held your hand in place so you could not run. I think that would explain why no one ran when a scream came from a girl in the tower...

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At 10/13/07 04:07 PM, MonkeyV wrote:
At 10/13/07 06:40 AM, SenIsteR wrote: I hope you will consider including me in your club. Thanks for reading.
welcome aboard.

Thank you MonkeyV

I would then like to take the liberty of posting my writing. It is quite long, 16 pages long (don't worry, about 5 pages are character desciptions and glosseries.) If someone would be so kind to read some of it and leave a review here at Newgrounds, I would be grateful.
It is a fanfiction of Starcraft, but a different kind. It uses the terms and units from Starcraft to better illustrate the setting, but the timeline is something I made up myself. Please enjoy...

Here it is

Something I would like you to note are my conversations in the writing. I find them getting dull in longer conversations. As they go something like this "Get down!" Hank screamed "Yes sir!" Thomas yelled "Get up!" He grunted "Fuck that Im staying down!" He replied. See where Im headed? Any suggestions to making them less dull?

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Linkage to new chapter.

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Patience is a virtue.

The bell tower had struck five times and the streets filled with cars and pedestrians, rather drones, wandering off home after a lifeless day of work. As the plaza of red brick filled with businessmen and women on their way homes a troop of two men could be seen in the middle. They were both Hungarian and one was a short, portly man and the other was stretched out vertically. The short man had a scruffy beard that hung down haphazardly off his chin, obviously not groomed. His white shirt was hardly white and was covered with random colorful stains. The tall man was dressed in a modern western suit and spoke with a booming voice attracting the people to come witness what he called "The Missing Link." He yelped and hollered, anything to attract new payers.
Once a small crowd had formed the show would begin and the tall man would torture and make fun of the short man, who apparently was being marketed as the missing link. People were encouraged to throw scraps of food at the 'beast', sticks, and anything else they could find on the streets. This, the tall man would say, would enrage the beast and he would then show his true, primal nature. Once the people would wander off, after leaving their tips hopefully, the two men would sneak off. They had rented a small, broken down house off on alleyway in which they were living at for the remains of the year. It was easy money, and it paid well. They had been doing this skit for years and it helped pay for the tall man's exponentially increasing bar tabs. The short man would always ask if they could switch positions, maybe he could be the ritzy businessman who trapped the missing link and the tall man could be the beast; he was always shot down. The tall man would explain, "You are short and hairy, that is practically the definition of a beast. Now if you keep asking me this question I will cut your pay and make you beg for it like a beast, now shoo." And so would the man shoo, because he had no self-esteem to stand up for himself to the tall man, who could after years of being a 'beast.'
The short man received almost 200$ a week, from dealing drugs on the street with the measly amount of money he made from the skit. He sent it all back to his family who lived in Hungary still. He had a wife and two sons back home, and he loved them so much he agreed to go to America to make a fool out of himself to give them some extra cash to live on. His family was heavily below the poverty level.
He had been married for twenty-five years, he married at twenty, and his sons were pushing eighteen and twenty-five. They quickly married to save themselves from the criticism of having a child out of wedlock, but everyone new about this and still gave them a hard time. The community scorned this family for such inane things as this. Once they were in complete isolation for a year because the community saw that the young son had caught a cat on fire.
Due to the horrible community and society they were a part of, the father, Henry, could never get a job and that is why he agreed to the demeaning job as "The Missing Link." It is amazing what someone will do just to make sure his family far away can live their lives.
Every night Henry dreamed of his family, running through barley fields lit by the pink setting sun. His sons were young again, and so was he and Helen. He could feel their warm hands touching his, their childish laughter ringing in his ears, the beautiful setting sun so bright they all had to squint. Henry was carrying a basket in his left hand, holding his wife's in his right, and he had a blanket around his neck. His face was cleanly shaven. He was fit back then, rather strong actually, and appeared to in no way be a beast of a man. After running and giggling throughout this field they came across a spot at the edge of a cliff that hung over a crashing ocean, all that could be seen was the setting sun over water that reflected it's beauty. They would sit down near the edge on top of the blanket that scarfed their father and opened up the basket. It was a marvelous dinner, all of their favorite foods, but Henry didn't focus on the food in the dream as much as he focused on the faces of his loved ones. He had no pictures of them, and this was as close as he got to remembering how the looked. If his son were to cross him in the street he would have no idea who he was.
Henry supposed this is what love meant, to leave your family for good just to support them.
Back home in Hungary Henry's family had a turn for the better. They had inherited a large sum of money and were coming to visit Henry, for good. They had been searching for Henry in America for a year now, stopping by his "owners" house every day, but Henry was always out working the streets or as the missing link. After a month the stopping by had turned to letters, which the tall man read and burned before every showing to Henry. The tall man did not want to loose his partner in crime, or rather his slave in crime and took no chance in doing so.
After living in America for about six months Henry's family stopped by again and the tall man answered the door. They asked if they could speak to Henry, but the tall man said that he had committed suicide and broke down into tears. The family did not know what to do, and they came inside and mourned their loss with the tall man over a cup of coffee. They shared stories, and the tall man only spoke positively of Henry. The tall man invited them over again, making sure that Henry was to be out working, and gained quite a bond with the sons and wife.
After a year of these hidden, secret meetings Henry finally came home early and witnessed something that churned his boiling blood. He came back to his shithole life to find his long lost wife kissing the man responsible for his horrible life. A year, apparently, was long enough for his wife to mourn the death of her husband of over a quarter of a century and she and her sons had moved on. As the door swung open in the house, a drunken mad Henry the cause, Helen and the tall man swung their necks towards the noise. Henry would never forget the eyes of his lovely wife, and she had apparently forgotten his. He had caught them kissing, and he looked around and picked up a two-by-four and swung it madly in the air cursing at the tall man and his wife. His sons were not at the house; they had run off to the store to pick up ingredients for dinner.
Helen was struck cold as she witnessed a mad man enter the tall man's house and start swinging this crude weapon. Henry charged the two and made sure to make their deaths painful and harsh. He cried shortly after and held his wife's limp body in his arms. Classic. As his two sons entered the house they were greeted by a bloody, murder scene with a crazed, hairy man groping their mother's dead body. They charged the man and stabbed him all over. Realizing that they had killed their father after looking throughout his wallet they were shocked. They had no idea what to do, knowing that they had killed their father and no family left and nowhere to turn to. Fortunately for them the tall man had a gun, loaded with two bullets.


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Posted at: 10/13/07 09:08 PM

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At 10/13/07 01:16 PM, Phantom wrote:
At 10/13/07 10:27 AM, GOTHCLAWZ wrote: Sign-Up Date:
Wow, you make me laugh, first you come to the club I lead, the NGDD and act like an asshole and then you come here, a club in which I participate and you post ALL of this USELESS crap about yourself, get it Barbie, no one cares about you, no one wants to hear your sad fucking life about tranny fathers and fat-ass mothers. so do me a favor, act like a fucking human being and not a twitching, ass scratching monkey, and maybe I'll be alright with you being here.

No offense Phantom but your attitude is really starting to piss me off. You may be one of the best writers here, but that doesn't mean you can treat all my members like shit. This is a warning!


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Posted at: 10/14/07 03:16 AM

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At 10/13/07 09:08 PM, gunground wrote: No offense Phantom but your attitude is really starting to piss me off. You may be one of the best writers here, but that doesn't mean you can treat all my members like shit. This is a warning!

Warning? I was simply showing what I think about him, and I don't like his jokes, but if he ever acts like an adult then I'll be fine with him, I just don't like these annoying fucking jokes, I don't consider warping my sig into an ugly one, joke.

I'd like to personally ask him to just cut the jokes, at least with me.

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