Armageddon(not real events)

[Sykotic-Sword]

(This is mainly to see if the story is any good.Before anyone asks,NO THERE WILL NOT BE ANY PREVIEWS , this will be a hand-drawn, pen-to-paper,comic book.It will be graphic and NOT FOR KIDS)

Set after the rapture has taken place, those left forsaken on earth must defend the remains of the planet after it was ravaged by the army of The Beast.The four horsemen of the apocolypse control thier own private armies of demons with various abilities both possible and not.Man struggles to fight against overwhelming odds as well as stageringly powerful enemies as the last of the human race begins to face annihalation.A small group of survivors has managed to take out one of the horsemen, leaving the other three looking for revenge.Now the survivors will engage in an impossible to win battle against the armies of the remaining three horsemen and must hold out until the apocolypse ends.Only then, will the survivors, truely be safe.

This is the plot to a comic I will be making.Let me know if it's any good.

There will be four comics.One will be called "Disease",two will be called "War", three will be called "Death", and four will be called "The Beast".

[Sykotic-Sword]

COME ON PEOPLE!!Don't just ignore this topic, at least post ONCE!!!!

[Sammeh]

Sounds like a good plot. But, speaking of how realistic it should be. How many humans would there be left. Because you are going to need alot of 'em to fight the four horsemen of the apocolypse and Satan. And what will the scenery be like, is it all going to be about burnt out cities, orange skies, death everywhere, or will we see a change? And what of the enemies? Big? Strong? And what about the characters. Take in to mind that they all need personality.

Those are the things you should take into mind. I don't think people are going to want to be reading somethingf whilst explaining how unrealistic it is

[LordXanthus]

Assuming this rapture business to be true, I would imagine nearly all of Earth's population would remain. Honestly, you couldn't find even half a million people on the planet who truly accept Christ, love God, and all that sort of thing.

[The-evil-bucket]

At 4/7/07 04:08 AM, Sykotic-Sword wrote: COME ON PEOPLE!!Don't just ignore this topic, at least post ONCE!!!!

I hate people who, after they make their topic say something like "What, am I invisble?" or "Where is everybody", "No one likes me." Or like this one I just quoted.

[Sykotic-Sword]

I hate people who, after they make their topic say something like "What, am I invisble?" or "Where is everybody", "No one likes me." Or like this one I just quoted:

That is why you fail.

[Sykotic-Sword]

I also should have mentioned the the vast majority of the world's population left over from the Rapture, were killed by the four horsemen and thier armies.

[Sykotic-Sword]

At 4/7/07 05:02 AM, Dsmano wrote: you are going to need alot of 'em to fight the four horsemen of the apocolypse

As previously stated in my orginal post, one of the four horsemen has been killed.Leaving the other three looking for revenge(on the survivors becuase they were the ones to kill him).

And now, here is an explanation of how the first horseman was killed:

The way the 1st horseman was taken out was when his army was busy ravaging an, occupied at the time, survivor base.While giving orders a soldier surprised him and tried to suicide bomb him but he killed him.Unfortunately for him, that was a distraction.As he killed the would-be suicide bomber another, hidden, soldier silentley planted a C4 charge near the foot of the horseman's steed.As he planted the C4, the horseman noticed him, and dispatched him effortlessly.What he did not know was that the C4 had a time delay charge on it and just before he killed the silent solder, he pressed the detonation button.By the time the Horseman found this out, he was too late.The C4 blew immediately, killing the horseman.Just then, all of his soldiers(demons) were rendered helpless(stunned from the sight of thier dead master).That was when the survivors discovered the weakness of the four horsemen.Then, without the threat of the horseman to pin them down, the remaining surviors stormed the demons.Killing all but one.That one demon barely made it to the other three Horsemen to deliver the message that a fellow horseman was killed by mere humans.The demon was immediately killed by the horseman of "war" due to his lack of usefullness now that his master was dead.

[Trendwhore]

If your drawing is anything like your writing then the comic will fail miserably.

Anyways the premise is good and i can definitely see a comic in there somewhere.

Hope it works out and that you will post it(some drafts) on NG.

[Sykotic-Sword]

Honestly, I only plan on making them in real life on paper and trying to publish them(good luck there).However, I will post the original artwork for you guys when the comics are done.If it bombs, I guess I'll probably post them here as well as myspace and a few other choice places.I think that the latter is more likely.

[Arturus]

At 4/7/07 03:04 AM, Sykotic-Sword wrote: (This is mainly to see if the story is any good.Before anyone asks,NO THERE WILL NOT BE ANY PREVIEWS , this will be a hand-drawn, pen-to-paper,comic book.It will be graphic and NOT FOR KIDS)

Set after the rapture has taken place, those left forsaken on earth must defend the remains of the planet after it was ravaged by the army of The Beast.The four horsemen of the apocolypse control thier own private armies of demons with various abilities both possible and not.Man struggles to fight against overwhelming odds as well as stageringly powerful enemies as the last of the human race begins to face annihalation.A small group of survivors has managed to take out one of the horsemen, leaving the other three looking for revenge.Now the survivors will engage in an impossible to win battle against the armies of the remaining three horsemen and must hold out until the apocolypse ends.Only then, will the survivors, truely be safe.

This is the plot to a comic I will be making.Let me know if it's any good.

There will be four comics.One will be called "Disease",two will be called "War", three will be called "Death", and four will be called "The Beast".

This could actually be pretty cool....i'm assuming theres about 400,000 people left...thats how many people the the mormons and jehovahs witness's say will be left after the so-called rapture.

I think you should set the storyline a bit further into the future so that the humans can use like orbital laser cannons and photon torpedoes and whatnot to kill those guys on their horses.

Just one question about the storyline...since god has killed all the humans he wanted and taken them to heaven to worship him for all-time without end, does that mean that the humans left on the planet are free? maybe under constant attack and such...but free none the less?

[AlexJS]

<caps>OH NOES! ITZ TEH EDN OF TEH WORLDZ!</caps>

Really, it looks good, but somewhat copied. Good idea nonetheless

[Sykotic-Sword]

What do you mean, copied?I came up with this on my own.I learned about the four horsemen and decided that Armageddon would make a good comic as long as the story and action is good.Also, in reply to the user before you, I will not have orbital lasers or photon whatevers in this comic.That would make this too close to gears of war.I don't want people thinking I'm someone who would commit plagurism.That's just wrong.

[Sykotic-Sword]

I think you should set the storyline a bit further into the future so that the humans can use like orbital laser cannons and photon torpedoes and whatnot to kill those guys on their horses. :

Honestly dude, that's a bad idea.How popular would a comic be if the storyline for that particular one was this: The horseman of war attacked the survivors.They killed him with an orbital laser cannon.That's just horrible.The horsemen are supposed to be feared and extremely powerful individuals.If they can get killed just by firing an orbital laser cannon at them then why whould people fear them?They wouldn't becuase they could be easily killed.They would not be legendary or scary in any matter.That would kill the mood of the story.

[Arturus]

At 4/7/07 02:16 PM, Sykotic-Sword wrote:

I think you should set the storyline a bit further into the future so that the humans can use like orbital laser cannons and photon torpedoes and whatnot to kill those guys on their horses. :

Honestly dude, that's a bad idea.How popular would a comic be if the storyline for that particular one was this: The horseman of war attacked the survivors.They killed him with an orbital laser cannon.That's just horrible.The horsemen are supposed to be feared and extremely powerful individuals.If they can get killed just by firing an orbital laser cannon at them then why whould people fear them?They wouldn't becuase they could be easily killed.They would not be legendary or scary in any matter.That would kill the mood of the story.

If they were that legendary and powerful...then perhaps they SURVIVE the attack from lasers and stuff. The point is to at least give yourself the option of using futuristic technology

[Sykotic-Sword]

I'd rather not.I'm going for a feel to it that would make people think that it could happen now.All of the weapons will be present weapons.Maybe a few ones that will be modified old age weapons.Like a futuristic sword carried by one of the remaining three horsemen.

[Arturus]

At 4/7/07 02:24 PM, Sykotic-Sword wrote: I'd rather not.I'm going for a feel to it that would make people think that it could happen now.All of the weapons will be present weapons.Maybe a few ones that will be modified old age weapons.Like a futuristic sword carried by one of the remaining three horsemen.

a futuristic sword that shoots lasers?

[Maus]

At 4/7/07 02:09 PM, Sykotic-Sword wrote: What do you mean, copied?

I don't think he meant copied, so much as 'done before quite a lot.'

The End of Days is a popular theme for stories. You need to imagine some amazing characters, have incredible artistic talent, or something special to make your particular story stand out. As it is, it's a run-of-the-mill high school Creative Writing project.

I'm not trying to be harsh, I'm just trying to be honest. 95% of the 'literature' posted in this forum is pretty bleak in the area of originality and style.

[Sykotic-Sword]

a futuristic sword that shoots lasers?

It's possible.As long as that isn't the only thing it does and it looks cool.

[Sykotic-Sword]

I'm not trying to be harsh, I'm just trying to be honest. 95% of the 'literature' posted in this forum is pretty bleak in the area of originality and style.

I understand completely.That's pretty sad, man.I have to agree with you though.