The Mythical Murder

[Tribal]

Welcome to 'The Mythical Murder' story topic. Please do not flame or insult in this topic for the story to keep intact and fun to read.

Note: The following story was written by me completely and none of the following storyline facts have been stolen from another story's idea(s).

Also, this story is completely based on my imagination, if this story might offend you in any way, please contact me by an inbox message, and do not post your rants here. Thank you, Tribalfusion-X

Chapter 1: The dissapearance.

It's sure to be a beautiful evening... Let's check if i've sent my daily 5 votes on portal submission entries today... 'You need to vote on 1 more entry to submit your experience points for today.' Great! almost there. "honey, i'm almost ready for the party! Just some eyeliner... some parfume... oh! my hair is a total mess!... oh no..." That's my girlfriend Daisy BeauMont, she's really nice, and adorable! Though like every female person, she spends hours and hours in the bathroom, and still thinks she looks ridiculous afterwards... I just don't get women. Oh well! That gives me just some more time to use the computer; let's check on my e-mails... Outlook express... Mail... Ah there! but... huh?! "27 unread e-mail messages since yesterday." weird! I should have sworn to have 0 a couple of hours ago, Probably some over-spammer that doesn't know when to stop overspamming peoples inboxes...

Even weirder! All 27 e-mail messages seemed to come from the same sender: 'Mystery27'.
What an odd name... Though it kind of... seems so... familiar?... No! That must be a quincidence... I've never heard of that person in my life before... Although... Ah, never mind!
"Dear? are you ready?" I shouted.
"Almost honey! Just the eye-liner!" Was the reply.
"ok".
Slightly freightened, though highly curious i opened the e-mails... one... by one...
They all mentioned the same message: ",tsohgamai"
All but the last one, That one said: "uoyeraosdna".
Fortunately, i cannot understand any chinese... or japanese... or whatever language it is, because reading these messages didn't make me more curious; they freightened me more! overloaded me with fear! That much that i couldn't resist clicking 'X'.

It was bound to be a beautiful evening... Though as it came out of nowhere... It started to rain.
Storm was to be heard closely... yet, in the same time far...
It gave me hope; as i pushed my right hand tightly on the window, staring out it with my face... Rain drops were hitting the window, and then, defeatedly, they dripped off down to the cold and hard stone window bank. Somehow i didn't feal lost, sad or hopeless... And then, my mind came back to the real life, back from wandering off deeply into my thoughts...
It has been a couple of minutes by now, since i last heard Daisy's voice... Actually, i don't hear anything comming from the bathroom now, it's unusual... too quiet... suspiciously quiet... Until,
A loud scream, one that could cut through marrow and bone, came out of the bathroom! Now i'm definately sure that my mind is awake! As im running as fast as i can, heading to the bathroom, i can hear my heart pounding... boom... boom... boom.

[Yoyodog76]

It was good. But I didnt really get the point of it. Post more.

10 more to go

[XD0042006]

I know this has something to do with a rape.

[Tribal]

To comment 1: Thanx alot, and i will post more!
To comment 2: There we go again! i'm sorry i have to say this but maliculous/porn/hardcore or rape suggestions are not on it's place here. Please stop.

[XD0042006]

At 2/10/07 01:50 PM, tribalfusion-X wrote: To comment 1: Thanx alot, and i will post more!
To comment 2: There we go again! i'm sorry i have to say this but maliculous/porn/hardcore or rape suggestions are not on it's place here. Please stop.

Oh....well good job then :)

[Tribal]

Commencing the storyline now, Please have fun and do not suggest any porn / rape about the story! thats very stupid.

Chapter II : The Party.

I can feal my heart beating... boom... boom... boom...
But suddenly it stops as i open the door of the bathroom and find only the open bathroom window leaving a view of a dark evening with no clouds on the sky, and Daisy's eye-liner on the round floor carpet. My heart stops beating; i start fealing really weak, and my legs start shaking. "I... I've... never fealt something like this before... this weakness... It's astonishing!
I can barely breath... It's like if all the air and CO² has been drained out of this room, as is Daisy, becouse i cannot see her around here anymore... This is really creeping me out, how should i look now? I look at myself in the mirror and see that my face has gotten really blank.
I take the eyeliner from the floor and put it back in it's small beauty-case casket, into the mirror closet. I close the mirror closet door and look in the mirror again... It's kind of foggy now, so i breath on it and wipe my sleeve over it. Weirdly... the foggyness on the mirror seems to only increase this way! Wiping more and more... even makes a message become clearer to view... 'tsohgamai'.

'tsohgamai?' where have i seen that before?... Of course! The e-mail message!... hey, another part of the fog unveals in a word... M...2...7...?! M27? what's that supposed to mean? Ahh! oh no! I'm almost too late for the party! Meh... i guesse i should go without Daisy then... I run down the stairs, i' perfectly dressed, but a little white-cheeked though... Ah! i see the lights! There is the cab that's supposed to pick me up. The cab stops, It's door opens, and the driver welcomes me in. Of course i accept that he brings me with the cab, what a luck that i took care of that! I'm too freightened to drive there with my own car now! My expensive Lambourghini is certain to not survive an excessively dangerous adventure as this one, just to be sure. Who knows what could happen if i drived there myself? "Please enter this parking slot" "Please enter this parking slot", "untighten seat belts, and have a fine day" said the very conveinient GPS system in the taxi cab.

'The Paddle'. The favourit huge party pub for people around the age of 17... I step slowly out of the cab, and look to the highly placed windows near the ceiling of the building, and i notice that the spotlights are shining out of them and are surely visible for a couple of blocks far. What does really bother me is the fact that there is no sign any rain or thunder, by the least any little cloud... Well it's kind of fortunate i guesse. Walking to the door of the Paddle Pub building i can see a poster sticked on one of the door windows that shows 3 people sitting in a hot party tub. It's highly decorated, with palm trees next to it and all, looking through the windows, i see a short hall way, that begins with flowerpots and is filled with doors leading to diffrent party rooms. Party room 7 is mine! I enter the hall door and run to the party room door that has a big silver '7' on it. under it is a poster-sign kind of thing that sais: this room has the big hawaiian bar, luxury chairs, men and women rooms AND large marble deco hot tub inclusive! Great news i think! I have one of the few party rooms that contain all possible updates yet available! Slowly i push the door open as the disco music starts to get louder... flickering lights half-blind my eyes... this... is where i belong!

[Tribal]

Thank you very much people of newgrounds, please do know, that all i write here is written from an inspiration source of 0! Everything you read her is purely made up the same moment i write it!

Gigantic enormous props for everyone who likes it! I'm kind of an amature, so thans so much! i really appreciate all the positive comments!

[GiantDouche]

Not that great, tons of spelling and punctuation mistakes. Obvious plot. Too much internet references. Next!

[Tribal]

At 2/10/07 02:53 PM, justlooking9 wrote: Not that great, tons of spelling and punctuation mistakes. Obvious plot.

I said positive remarks, anyways your the first one not to like it! congratulations! bye!

Too much internet references.
Where? ok... blind.

Next!
jerk

[Tribal]

Should i keep writing? i won't write a story on if there's no point to it, if all the people reviewing it are total fags that like nothing more then TW'ing... -_- (TW'ing means Topic wasting if you might not know by yourself.)

[Tribal]

aherm...

keep writing or stop?!

[MasterBlaster500]

I agree with a previous poster about the spelling and punctuation mistakes. Also, as a writer I don't see why you are so against negative reviews of your unfolding piece, negative reviews help a serious writer to improve and identify his/her mistakes and also improve the way you connect with your readers. Negative reviews are not always a bad thing.
In the short burst style that you are writing it in, it remindes me of some sort of old saturday morning serial where the reader gets one bit at a time and is left hanging until next week. It is a good idea to keep people coming back for more and I think your enthusiasm will help that factor.
I say keep writing it and see where it goes.

[Dadog1132]

You start quest as a brave hamster named Hampam, Your father Ham Hammy McHampam 2nd of Hamland was turned into a human by the evil mad scientist Hamler from the trechorus Jamaican Islands AKA Azoroth.
He turns level 78,00million4hundred62 and the GMs start getting worried because they were getting PWNED by... what ever hi name was, oh yes, Hamler.
So they create a create a powerful NPC at the level 2billionmillion22sixtythousand62 that will guard people and make a new race, the hamsters. They can be pallidines, warriors, shammies or WOODCHUCKS.
And thats how World of Warcraft stated... but to many people complained because they could be smooshed by tauran or anything that was bigger than a pea. They could be easily PWNED by fishing poles, mineing picks and spit. So they made a new race called the Beaver, it got its name because it was a beaver... but that didn't work out either. So they started a new race.
The new race was Godzilla, and holly shit did that own everyone. So they decided to make a different race called the Troll. But the troll is so gay and they couldn't offord to delete it so they decided to cover up its crappyness with an expansion called the Burning Crusade.
And had the blood elves, but they dident realize how gay they were because when I was playing a rouge I pick pocketed a male blood elf one time and found a diary and stuff about his boyfriend that was a Dreani was in it and they were like OMG! So they banned that dreani for being to gay and so THE END!