To be honest with you, I'm not reading this so much for the sexual tension, rather, I find the story quite interresting. I can't wait to read the rest.

At 1/18/07 10:25 AM, GraveForkast wrote: To be honest with you, I'm not reading this so much for the sexual tension, rather, I find the story quite interresting. I can't wait to read the rest.

I kind of meant that "writing" fiction was good for sexual tension, lol. Anyway, thanks for the compliment. ;)

I know what you meant, but the sexual tension of the story itself is what seems to keep most other people reading. While it adds an interresting spin to the whole thing, the story progression on its own takes some classic Japanese hentai concepts and applies them in a different fashion.

Wow, I must say that you have an interesting fantasy, as in not just regular tentacle rape, but this whole new idea. With this start, you can put anything in it that you want, in stead of just standard hero stories. Also your writhing style is very good. I can't wait to read more..

At 1/18/07 04:50 AM, twist-tie wrote: and not a single girl has even commented on what i'm positive what they would label as "gross," "twisted," and quite possibly "immature."

Maybe a lot girls, but not all of them. But we all should agree that Shuko is special for coming up with a story just like that. I'm sure even the guys wouldn't write such a story with such vocabulary, just like that.

This story is incredibly awesome.

You`ve Got Bookmark`d!!!

You're a good writer, i too am reading this not for it's sexual detail, but beacuse it's just an interesting story lol. And what a death for that "sexbeast" straight after climaxing lol. I'd like to konw more about the sex beasts description though, atm i've got an image of that squid Pokemon lol XD

Lol at the people who is getting horny.

Nice story, by the way.

At 1/16/07 01:13 PM, ArmouredDeath wrote: Pics please? And yea.. japanese girls with mini skirts are sexy :)

HELL YEAH

At 1/18/07 12:43 PM, Mai wrote:

I'm sure even the guys wouldn't write such a story with such vocabulary, just like that.

I could write a story like that, just not with that vocabulary. I r teh suxorz at writing stories.

When is the next chapter coming?

At 1/18/07 04:50 AM, twist-tie wrote: and not a single girl has even commented on what i'm positive what they would label as "gross," "twisted," and quite possibly "immature."

...I commented!

At 1/19/07 11:59 AM, Hiniberus wrote: When is the next chapter coming?

Hopefully later on this evening. I've neglected this because the muse hasn't touched me, lol. I'll try and devote more time to it. ;)

Here we go. Not as much action in this chapter, but the next one will be better. :) I hope. (I'm going to start linking all of the chapters every time I write one).

Chapter 2
Chapter 3

At 1/16/07 04:35 PM, hatedbymost wrote: Dude this so needs to be a flash movie.

OMFG THATS JUST WHAT I WAS THINKING.If this mase amovie i wouldliterallypay 200bucksforatape.Cuz its sooo frigin awsome .Its not a sleazy pono. And its got awsome adventure and a kool plot. It has awsome charactors and ownage aliens. But with awsome sexual overtones.Butyou should try to be more descriptive with the "attacks."

At 1/17/07 02:32 PM, Shuko wrote: Well, the chapters are so long I've decided to not post the text in here. Rather, I've created their own HTML pages. This story is never going to leave Newgrounds, lol. But I see no reason for double and triple posting when I can just as easily do this. ;)

Chapter 2

I'd suggest right-clicking and opening it in a new window. ;)

Man this sux. It needs the black background. Thats what makes it dark. Putting a dark creepy sexy sotrie in black txt on white background totally gay. PLEASE BUT IT BACK ON THE BBS!

At 1/19/07 02:22 PM, TheManBehindTheFlash wrote: Man this sux. It needs the black background. Thats what makes it dark. Putting a dark creepy sexy sotrie in black txt on white background totally gay. PLEASE BUT IT BACK ON THE BBS!

k.

:omg charlimits!

Oh man, this story is great.

You're like that No-oneSpecial guy, except possibly better.

waht zee fahk, I like hentais but i dont like tentacle ones, but waht zee fahk? A girl is writing this stuffs? Waht Zee Fahk

At 1/19/07 02:43 PM, Platinum wrote: Oh man, this story is great.

You're like that No-oneSpecial guy, except possibly better.

thats not a compliment

umm im kinda new how do i add this to my fav list for things on the bbs.

At 1/19/07 06:20 PM, TheManBehindTheFlash wrote: umm im kinda new how do i add this to my fav list for things on the bbs.

now thats a compliment.

At 1/19/07 06:29 PM, shohaib wrote:

At 1/19/07 06:20 PM, TheManBehindTheFlash wrote: umm im kinda new how do i add this to my fav list for things on the bbs.

now thats a compliment.

seriosly im lost i have no idea how and if i lose this adn never see it again i will be left with two options. Sift through thousands of forums. Or blow my ****in brains out with a shotgun. You choose America.

At 1/19/07 06:39 PM, TheManBehindTheFlash wrote:

At 1/19/07 06:29 PM, shohaib wrote:

At 1/19/07 06:20 PM, TheManBehindTheFlash wrote: umm im kinda new how do i add this to my fav list for things on the bbs.

now thats a compliment.

seriosly im lost i have no idea how and if i lose this adn never see it again i will be left with two options. Sift through thousands of forums. Or blow my ****in brains out with a shotgun. You choose America.

errr....well you could insert a link into your signature, just go to account options, forum signature, click the small link button, and copy+paste the topic's internet I.D.

This should totally be a flash. It would own. It would put the yuyu to shame.

OMFG im gonna go crazy if i dont see the next chapter.I will go on a murderous rampage!

At 1/19/07 10:33 PM, TheManBehindTheFlash wrote: OMFG im gonna go crazy if i dont see the next chapter.I will go on a murderous rampage!

Lol. if you just type "Japanese Schoolgirl" Into the search bar, you'll find it easily enough. xD

You can also look for my posts. I have the story linked in my sig. ;)

And you can PM me. I've had four or five requests already for me to alert certain people when I post new chapters. o_0

weirdos, lol.

i saw sex and...Boingggg! lol jk

Holy shit. I just realized that I had a dream about this the other night. It just never clicked in my head that it was caused by this, then I re-read it and realized that it was the same as my dream.

It was a weird dream, all I remember is a huge purple monster kind of thingy raping a girl violently and then pulling out an enormous penis.

It was not a good dream. I woke up feeling depressed, and now I remember why.

Er... thank you and come again?