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That was a good new chapter. Not enough action though; oh well, it can't all be rape scenes.

At 1/16/07 01:10 PM, Aceton wrote: My penis is already hard. Please proceed.

lol ur a freak but I should be the last one talkin about a freak

.... put more rapeing and a nude part and....... me banging a chick that would be cool

Chapter 8 had a good twist. When I was reading it I though Zero was going to turn out to be a sex beast. Still doing great with the story can't what for next chapter.

i just have one thing to say to you shuko...you have a more perverted mind then me...i think im kinda turned on by that:P

WANNA KNOW SOMETHING.

we need a part where maus gets raped by some crazy chick.

heres a good idey maus kills another sex beast then she passes out.then befor ozcar or zero

can save her she gets kidnapped by some crazy chick and is raped.wouldnt that be good!

At 2/23/07 06:24 PM, elithakid14 wrote: .... put more rapeing

It can't all be rape, moron.

and a nude part

Done. Read the other cha[pters, moron.

me banging a chick

No. Everyone that wants to be in it will not be in it.

that would be cool

No, it would not.

Have a nice day.^^

hey evryone reads this torey becase of the rape parrts.the rest is ok but man another lesbeian rape part would be kick ass!

At 2/25/07 02:15 PM, Liteice wrote: hey evryone reads this torey becase of the rape parrts.the rest is ok but man another lesbeian rape part would be kick ass!

it wasn't "actually" rape.

Just for the record, Maus' encounter with HAYF's sister would be considered rape if it weren't for the fact that she believes herself that she gave in at the last moment. Believe it or not, it can still be rape even if you make the victim climax, lol - regardless of what hentai leads us to believe. ;) To all you lovable prospective rapists in the audience - don't think for a moment that you can make your victim forgive you if you make her come. xD This is fiction.

I want to take a moment to mention that I appreciate any ideas you guys give me for storyline additions and character additions, but don't count on my using them. ;) I appreciate them all, but I might not reply to them, and I might not like them, lol. I'm a naturally lazy person anyway, and it's much easier for me to do my own thing. ^-^

Also, this story can't just be about rape. Sure, the prevailing theme involves Maus getting humiliated time after time, but it's also about her growing up and coming to terms with her own identity. What kind of person will she become? Will she be desensitized entirely to all things sexual? Will she become some kind of raving sex fiend like the "monsters" she's killing? And what of the monsters, too? Are they all bad, and is this the only answer to resolving her differences with them?

Don't get mad if I never answer all of these questions. :) They're just things I try to keep in mind as I write, lol. It's a habit of mine to set goals when I do garbage fiction like this. ^-^ Don't read too much into it though. I don't take this very seriously, and you shouldn't either. This is just me having fun, and I may drop it without warning just like I do many of my other unfinished fics. :/

At 2/23/07 06:07 PM, LateckS wrote: That was a good new chapter. Not enough action though; oh well, it can't all be rape scenes.

If you look at hentai, you'd realize that most content is just rape/love scenes.

You were a japenese schoolgirl? What are you now, an Egyptian police dective?

YES!

At 2/25/07 10:14 PM, Hellian00 wrote: You were a japenese schoolgirl? What are you now, an Egyptian police dective?

Lol. The main character was. Now that she's abandoned school she's just a "Japanese girl who hunts down sex demons and gets raped by them." But that title wouldn't fit. =3

And KemCab, I'll consider it. If you want a part as a Sex Beast, that might be arranged. :) Can't guarantee you'll be a particularly intelligent one though...

awesome new chapter.

uh.

themanbehindtheflash has a good point. all the activity in this thread resumes only once people have been satiated (shuko allows us another glorius chapter).
but it's still white on black. T.T.

i totally thought she was like gonna fall in love with zero and they were gonna get it on :(.
but more of that later.
just one thing bothers me. why would she restore her maidenhead after each encounter? that would effectively just make it worse cause it would hurt each time instead of just the first.

that and i wanna be in the story too...but not with my SN because that's a little weird. like some random kitsune named HAYF. is kind of odd. i wanna be in the story but i wanna be called..uhh........... ..... ... . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. .. .. . . . . . . . .... ... um...Gabriel. and i wanna be like uryuu from bleach in the sense that i can like destroy the sex beasts but they like respawn or somethin, like it doesn't all work out. then i wanna die in the line of action in some heroic fashion at some point.

AND the sex beasts should be called chikushou seibetsu.
idk if that's conjugated right.......

i ran outta things to say.
mas, por favor.

Your stories have inspired mine. (in my sig)

At 2/24/07 06:32 PM, Liteice wrote: WANNA KNOW SOMETHING.

we need a part where maus gets raped by some crazy chick.

heres a good idey maus kills another sex beast then she passes out.then befor ozcar or zero

can save her she gets kidnapped by some crazy chick and is raped.wouldnt that be good!

here's a good "idey." shut the hell up until you have some quality suggestions that you can spell correctly. and maybe go back to the baby warehouse and get yourself an intelligence module, i think they forgot to install yours.

At 2/25/07 02:15 PM, Liteice wrote: hey evryone reads this torey becase of the rape parrts.the rest is ok but man another lesbeian rape part would be kick ass!

but then it wouldn't be a story anymore, it would be hentai without pictures. that's what google image search is for, use it.

honestly, no chance i could get off to this story cause there's no pictures (that's just how i am), and i read it cause it's good. i'm just as happy with chapter 8 as i am with chapter 7, chapter 6, chapter 5, 4, 3, 2, 1, and even the prologue. it takes some serious motivation and creativity to be able to continue something like this for this long...i mean seriously, could YOU write a story this long? i doubt it cause all you care about is rape. tell you what, write a story using nothing but the word rape, and maybe some names and a little bit of plot as a filler, and see if you can beat shuko's story in terms of...well, anything. readers, followers, idolizers, fans, responses... then i might stop ridiculing you.

but that's never gonna happen, so i ain't gonna stop. ^.^

At 2/25/07 10:45 PM, hypoinsomniac wrote: awesome new chapter.

Thank you. :)

themanbehindtheflash has a good point. all the activity in this thread resumes only once people have been satiated (shuko allows us another glorius chapter).

That's okay. It's to be expected. The BBS is pretty fast-moving, and it'd be presumptuous of me to expect people to keep posting in it without updates. ^-^

but it's still white on black. T.T.

Sorry. :p Tell you what. I'll work on it tomorrow if I get the chance, and I'll do a black-on-white equivalent of each one. If I do, I'll make it so that you only have to change one thing in the url to make it what you want. ;)

i totally thought she was like gonna fall in love with zero and they were gonna get it on :(.
but more of that later.

I liked Zero, but I didn't like the idea of her attaching herself to a guy. Not just yet. Too many complications involved in that that I'm not ready to tackle yet. But I'm not saying it won't ever happen. :p

just one thing bothers me. why would she restore her maidenhead after each encounter? that would effectively just make it worse cause it would hurt each time instead of just the first.

I actually put a lot of thought into that. The way I worked it out, it was all part of her pride. If you were a girl, would you want your first time to be at the tentacles of a sex beast? Probably not. She can't claim to be a virgin anymore, but she can fight against the idea as hard as she wants. At this point, she's not yet ready to completely denounce virginhood. :)

that and i wanna be in the story too...but not with my SN because that's a little weird. like some random kitsune named HAYF. is kind of odd. i wanna be in the story but i wanna be called..uhh........... ..... ... . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. .. .. . . . . . . . .... ... um...Gabriel. and i wanna be like uryuu from bleach in the sense that i can like destroy the sex beasts but they like respawn or somethin, like it doesn't all work out. then i wanna die in the line of action in some heroic fashion at some point.

Won't make any promises. Like I said, I don't take requests on this sort of thing anymore; you really have to strike my fancy for me to agree to that. :P But thanks for the suggestion. I'll consider it.

AND the sex beasts should be called chikushou seibetsu.
idk if that's conjugated right.......

Dammit Gender? o_0 Why would I call them that? Lol.

I think you meant to call them Seikou no Bakemono. :p That would translate to literally "monster of sex," lol.

i ran outta things to say.
mas, por favor.

Eventually. :p

At 2/25/07 10:56 PM, Shuko wrote:

AND the sex beasts should be called chikushou seibetsu.
idk if that's conjugated right.......

Dammit Gender? o_0 Why would I call them that? Lol.

I think you meant to call them Seikou no Bakemono. :p That would translate to literally "monster of sex," lol.

well, damnit gender kinda works... in a different way though. i looked it up on the only decent english to japanese translator i could find and it had several different... uh...pronunciations, i guess...of each word.

i'm trying to teach myself japanese, but it's crazy hard cause i'm essentially just teaching myself the kanji from the kanji dictionary i got. it's fun but hard.

I suppose this shouldnt be full on rape sences but i do think that maus should be kidnapped by a lesbein at least 1 time.

i would work out relly well trust me.

look i know this isnt all sex and stuff but we need 1 lesbian kidnapping thing.i mean common kiddnaping would go good with this storey.

At 2/26/07 07:00 PM, Liteice wrote: I suppose this shouldnt be full on rape sences but i do think that maus should be kidnapped by a lesbein at least 1 time.

i would work out relly well trust me.

look i know this isnt all sex and stuff but we need 1 lesbian kidnapping thing.i mean common kiddnaping would go good with this storey.

i missed the part where this was your story.

go start a new thread and do whatever there. i'm truly sick of your spelling issues.

ok um dose anyone give a crap about spelling misstakes!!

and im just giveing suggestions k!

relly this storey dose need a kidnaaping part.

At 2/27/07 02:50 PM, Liteice wrote: ok um dose anyone give a crap about spelling misstakes!!

and im just giveing suggestions k!

relly this storey dose need a kidnaaping part.

Okay hon, I've tried looking the other way, but apparently it doesn't work, so I'll just be blunt. I will agree to listen if you have suggestions, and I will consider them, but I make NO promises on their inclusion in my story. In the end, I have the final say on what I want to happen, and regardless of how cheesy or worthless this bit of literary drivel is, it's still mine, and I can do what I want with it. That being said, I'd like it very much if you'd refrain from posting garbled bits of fabricated plots in my thread. I'm not an abnormally selfish person, but I'm selfish enough that I'd rather people didn't post their own stuff in here, as I've allocated it for mine. =3

Oh, and lesbian kidnapping isn't really something I think about as often as you do, but if I decide to work it in somewhere, I'll be sure and credit you. Don't count on it happening anytime soon though, lol.

And for the record, I happen to care about spelling and grammar a great deal. I don't really turn on people for random banter in a forum, but when you try to actually WRITE something I expect you to be mostly grammatically correct. I'm no grammatical saint, but at least I take the time to reread what I'm posting and remove all the errors I see before I post it. :(

meh whtever.

i let you deal with the storey without my input.

i just hope you dont screw up.Well so far your storeys grateand stuff.good luck with it and plz
dont screw this up.

also i think you makeing zero a magic fox thing or whatever the fuck it he was was kind of gay shouldnt maus get 1 human friend?

You know what this story needs? More Polend! Like make a character dedicated to me who has like uber strength and stuff. Just kiddin'. Great story though.

you need to put this all together and host it on a site somewhere or something!

Brimming with humor, This story is.

I'm not liking the 'sex beasts' design.
I mean, japan came up with 'Giant Robots' , 'Godzilla', 'More Giant Robots'.
Come up with a name for them.
You have kitsune and other names, I'm sure you could easily come up with one
( I stand to be misproven and answered)

At 2/27/07 05:20 PM, Liteice wrote: meh whtever.

i let you deal with the storey without my input.

i just hope you dont screw up.Well so far your storeys grateand stuff.good luck with it and plz
dont screw this up.

also i think you makeing zero a magic fox thing or whatever the fuck it he was was kind of gay shouldnt maus get 1 human friend?

dude, fucken... didn't you just read what she said? it's her story. let her alone.
i mean really, there is some logic behind zero not being human. as i said before, get an intelligence before you try making suggestions.

At 2/27/07 09:30 PM, Rague wrote: Brimming with humor, This story is.

I'm not liking the 'sex beasts' design.
I mean, japan came up with 'Giant Robots' , 'Godzilla', 'More Giant Robots'.
Come up with a name for them.
You have kitsune and other names, I'm sure you could easily come up with one
( I stand to be misproven and answered)

That's not a bad idea, though... I like the sound of that. =3 I'll find a way to incorporate it into one of the next chapters. She's due for a particularly nasty encounter anyway, and it'll just be icing on the cake. No prob, Bob.