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[theGodlyOne]

hey, I did this pretty cool pic, and wanted to see how people thought of it, rate it 1-10 please,a dna y criticism will be greatly appreciated (even if it's negative)

[tommac]

That is a nice sketch. Eyes copuld be further apart though, nice overall though. Work on shading now.

[Maus]

The eyes are totally off. They are way too close together, and the pupils are two different sizes, and just sorta floating. The eyebrows are clunky. The shape is okay, but you ground it in too hard. The bottom part of the nose is also too dark, like you worked really hard at it, and it just ended up darker than the rest.

It's a good start, though! Keep practicing. The full frontal shot (like you did) is one of the hardest.

[theGodlyOne]

At 12/2/06 08:26 PM, tommac wrote: That is a nice sketch. Eyes copuld be further apart though, nice overall though. Work on shading now.

ya i knew someone would say somethin about the eyes, they pissed me off, its hard for me to gett he eyes right, i have another sketch iwth more shading, ill put that up

[Insanical]

At 12/2/06 08:29 PM, theGodlyOne wrote: ya i knew someone would say somethin about the eyes, they pissed me off, its hard for me to gett he eyes right, i have another sketch iwth more shading, ill put that up

Whoah, i'm imagining you're aiming for realism, but i have to say...all of it's so wrong.
Stop using the same pencil for everything, change types, overall the most i use is 4b and i use it very lightly and to get dark tones just constantly go over the one spot...my advice is to never scribe your pencil into the paper, it shows in the final peice that it was rushed and it will look horrible.

Next advice, well i could go over every bit like Maus did, and then give you the rules for portraiture (ie the face should be five eyes in length) but instead i'm just gonna say, stop drawing from mind, take a picture of someone, draw that with the picture infront of you...and do it a lot, it's called practicing. It helps :)

I know i said i wouldn't do this but there's things that were just bugging me in the first image. Your symmetry is terrible. The pupils are WAY bigger than that...look at people, or yourself in the mirror...the pupil tends to touch the bottom eyelid and the top of the pupil is cut off by the top eyelid...well really it depends on where the person is looking, but that's what it's normally like if someone is looking straight like in your picture. Oh and peoples faces are way more curved than that...unless your drawing Kryten.

One more thing...it's called "shading" you should try it.
"But insanical, there is shading!!"
The full face, don't be lazy

[theGodlyOne]

thanks, you ripped into me pretty good there, but thanks it actually helped pretty good, I know all the rules, i just got fed up with the eyes, and the nose actually is much lighter, it came out weird on my scanner...about the eyes, i tried at em for 20 minutes and just couldn't get it right

[Insanical]

At 12/2/06 09:35 PM, theGodlyOne wrote: I know all the rules, i just got fed up with the eyes, and the nose actually is much lighter, it came out weird on my scanner

whether it was light or not, i still think it looks crap. It could be the darkest part of the image and it wouldn't change how wrong it is..

about the eyes, i tried at em for 20 minutes and just couldn't get it right

As i said, don't be lazy. And practice makes perfect. Do what i said about taking pictures of your face, trying to draw something that's real from your imagination is kind of contradictory...if you're imagining, it aint real...therefore, whatever you draw is likely to look wierd.

thanks, you ripped into me pretty good there, but thanks it actually helped pretty good,

Anytime, i'm happy to help...technically my skills in portraiture have gotten worse though, so i've kind of got a cheek to talk ha.

[theGodlyOne]

whether it was light or not, i still think it looks crap. It could be the darkest part of the image and it wouldn't change how wrong it is..

easy there chief!!! I was actually using a book the whole time, i got the nose outta there, and personally i tghink it looks pretty good, a little caraciturish i do admit but not horrible (in my opinion and I'm usually my toughest critic)

As i said, don't be lazy. And practice makes perfect. Do what i said about taking pictures of your face, trying to draw something that's real from your imagination is kind of contradictory...if you're imagining, it aint real...therefore, whatever you draw is likely to look wierd.

well screw you and your non-laziness :-P that top picture porlly took em about an hour in total

Anytime, i'm happy to help...technically my skills in portraiture have gotten worse though, so i've kind of got a cheek to talk ha.

so NANANANANA

:-P thanks for your help, no matter how much of a punch in the balls it is

[Insanical]

At 12/2/06 09:59 PM, theGodlyOne wrote: easy there chief!!! I was actually using a book the whole time, i got the nose outta there, and personally i tghink it looks pretty good, a little caraciturish i do admit but not horrible (in my opinion and I'm usually my toughest critic)

Clearly your not :)
It's not that it looks caricaturist (and i don't think it does) it just looks wierd and far from reality. Too straight. (bend it a bit more....pun very much intended)

well screw you and your non-laziness :-P that top picture porlly took em about an hour in total

Hour aint enough...spend a week on one drawing doing an hour every day. And don't stare at the page "now what?" after an hour, keep cleaning things up.

-P thanks for your help, no matter how much of a punch in the balls it is

I'm soorrreeeeeeeeeeee <3

[theGodlyOne]

clearly im nto what using a book or my toughest critic

[Insanical]

At 12/2/06 10:21 PM, theGodlyOne wrote: clearly im nto what using a book or my toughest critic

Your toughest critic
I sense hostility here :)

[theGodlyOne]

a smidgen

[Insanical]

At 12/2/06 10:26 PM, theGodlyOne wrote: a smidgen

I love you too :)

[TheAutocrat]

At 12/2/06 08:02 PM, theGodlyOne wrote: hey, I did this pretty cool pic, and wanted to see how people thought of it, rate it 1-10 please,a dna y criticism will be greatly appreciated (even if it's negative)

8. Its cartoony yet realistic. I like it.

[theGodlyOne]

heart

[theGodlyOne]

At 12/2/06 11:08 PM, TheAutocrat wrote:

At 12/2/06 08:02 PM, theGodlyOne wrote: hey, I did this pretty cool pic, and wanted to see how people thought of it, rate it 1-10 please,a dna y criticism will be greatly appreciated (even if it's negative)

8. Its cartoony yet realistic. I like it.

thanks man

[theGodlyOne]

oh and you guys shoulda seen my old stuff *shudder* it was bad...look back in my post history

[AntoArts-Admin]

Well... it will get an 8 out of 10

[glittersticker]

I rate it 8/10.

[Onitholope]

6/10
The eyes, nose and mouth are too small for the actual head size, the eyebrows are too close to the eyes (and are also too thin) the cheek bones are just a tad too high, and you need to make them more then just lines. You actually did a lot better with the nose on the 2nd sketch, though. Lots more detail needed in the hair, and the eye-lids are too thick. And more detail in the neck, please. however I like the ears, although they need to be a little more rounded.Oh, and the forhead needs to be a little smaller. big forheads only work with widow-peaks.
If you fix those things up, and add a little detail, it should be a good picture. Post it when you're done, ok?

[theGodlyOne]

ok I will, thanks for the advice

[Nimhster]

NICE. I have to give it a 7 out of 10. Keep up the very good work! ;)
-Nimhster

[this-boring]

its good i like yet i don't but i'll give it a 7/10

[theGodlyOne]

At 12/3/06 04:06 PM, this-boring wrote: its good i like yet i don't but i'll give it a 7/10

.....thank you? i have no idea if you were saying you liked it or you didn't....but thanks for the 7 outta 10

[TomAzza]

At 12/3/06 04:39 PM, theGodlyOne wrote:

At 12/3/06 04:06 PM, this-boring wrote: its good i like yet i don't but i'll give it a 7/10

.....thank you? i have no idea if you were saying you liked it or you didn't....but thanks for the 7 outta 10

i wouldn really consider his opinion....1post....lv 1....and what the hell is he saying?

anyway i like the drawing, the only problem, as already stated, are the eyes...to close up toghether, and there is a strange emphasis on the nose...figure those out and your right to go!
8.3/10

[Maus]

At 12/2/06 08:29 PM, theGodlyOne wrote: i have another sketch iwth more shading, ill put that up

Nostrils are too narrow. Ears are set too high. I won't get into the eyes, as you already know they are fubar, so keep practising those.

I'd really suggest working on the individual aspects like eyes separately until you get better at them, and then try working on the whole face put together. Use light guidelines so you know where to put things like ears.

This is something I scribbled out in about two minutes. It's how I would (and do) start faces from my head.

[theGodlyOne]

Nostrils are too narrow. Ears are set too high. I won't get into the eyes, as you already know they are fubar, so keep practising those.

I changed the eyes, posting it later, added more shading, didn't change the nostrils or ears though, i personally like the nose, didn't knoew the ears were off

I'd really suggest working on the individual aspects like eyes separately until you get better at them, and then try working on the whole face put together. Use light guidelines so you know where to put things like ears.

workin on eyes today, and nose tomorrow

This is something I scribbled out in about two minutes. It's how I would (and do) start faces from my head.

its cute :-P

[Maus]

Some help with eyes:

I used to have one hell of a time making eyes look right, until my art professor gave me this tip - start with the eyeball, and draw the lids and stuff next. What I see you doing is kind of what's going on in my top example. What SHOULD happen is in the bottom example. Eyeballs should be totally encompassed in the eyelids, and not look like they are about to fall out.

Try practising just drawing the orb of the eyeball, and then fleshing out the lids and eyebrows.

Again, these are just quick sketches.

[theGodlyOne]

ya that helps alot, thanks

[theGodlyOne]

ok here's my first attempt at a female (I'll pout up the revised version of my otehr guy in a minute