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Meh. 8/10 it was pretty good.

At 9/7/06 06:28 AM, DarkNati0nX wrote: Intresting plot and storyline, And D-Lucks THERES 500 TERRORIST HIJACKED PLANES COMING TOWARDS YOU!!

*hires Bruce Willis to fight terrorists for me* *hides* *gets found by Samuel L. Jackson, who is now equipped with a pump-action shotgun* *flees (again)*

another good chapter btw ghanden.

At 9/7/06 06:35 AM, Zen444 wrote: I didn't ask for a sequel.

>: (

Tough donkey nuggets. I wasn't planning on making a sequel, but I recieved a lot of PMs asking for one.

D-Lucks stop avoiding the planes. They're more afraid of you than you are of them.

Be patient while I write this next chapter.

At 9/7/06 04:58 PM, ghandenhanden wrote: D-Lucks stop avoiding the planes. They're more afraid of you than you are of them.

You're right. It's time to face this menace and defeat it once and for all. I may be some time.... *unsheathes katanas*

Be patient while I write this next chapter.

Aye Aye Captain.

Newgrounds: Under Fire 2
Chapter 6

Skwisgaar led Silent Ruler, Suntime, and CrippleFight through the dense jungle. The portal was incredible. At one minute, you were in an icy wasteland and the next you were in an vast desert. The old man called out to them.
"You three all right back there?"
"Yes.", they responded. "But how much longer will it be before we reach the city?"
"Oh, no more than an hour..."
The old man stopped. He looked all around.
"Is something wrong?", asked CrippleFight.
"DUCK!!!", he yelled.
They did so just as a large tree flew past them. It slammed into the ground.
"What the hell?! Who's throwin trees?!"
They looked in the direction it was thrown. To their horror, they saw Spikeman Smiley glaring at them through his heavily bandaged face. He was holding another tree.

Brown lept into the crowd of stick men. They cowared before his might. His sword was large, but he swung it with ease. He chopped through the enemies like they were wet timber. Strawberry wasn't about to be made a fool of. He smashed the head of the nearest stick man and stole his bazooka.
"DIE YOU BASTARDS!!!", he screamed as he fired it.
The blast decimated the group in front of him. The others prepared to fire, but he stopped them by throwing the bazookas onto them.
"HAHAHAHA!!! I AM THE KING!!!", he yelled as he jumped into the fray.

Suntime and CrippleFight jumped to the side. They had been caught off guard last time, but now they were ready to show their stuff.
"Quick!! Flaming javelin move!!", yelled Suntime.
"Right!!", said CrippleFight as he uprooted the nearest tree.
He tossed it at Suntime, who set it aflame and deflected it at Spikeman Smiley.
"Ha!! We've been working on our teamwork!! No way you'll-"
Smiley smacked it aside with his tree before it could hit him. Then he threw it at them.
"Oh shit!!", they yelled, as they narrowly dodged it.
He was quick to grab another tree. He had yet to say a word. Skwisgaar addressed his comrades.
"Don't go from the front!! Attack from the back!!"
He ran circles around the big man and fired his rifle. Smiley jumped into the air and threw the tree down toward him.
"Blast!", as he rolled to the side. "He's fast for his size!"
Silent Ruler had an idea. He called out to Suntime.
"Hey!! Light this tree on fire!!", he said, pointing it out.
"Er...all right!"
The tree erupted into flame. Those around it did as well. Silent Ruler spoke again.
"CrippleFight!! Get rid of those two trees!!"
"Whatever you say!"
Spikeman Smiley realized what they were doing, but it was too late. All of the trees around him were lit aflame. The fire didn't spread any further since the two trees were gone. He was trapped behind a wall of flame.
"Well done, my boy!", yelled Skwisgaar. "Now then..."
He fired the rifle. Smiley jumped high into the sky, above the flames. A hint of relief crossed his eyes. Suntime called out to him.
"Good. Now you're in the perfect place!!", he yelled as his palms hit the ground.
A giant pillar of flame erupted from the ground in front of him. It hit him square in the chest. He didn't scream as he fell down to the ground.
"Phew! We did it!", said Silent Ruler.
"Excellent show of teamwork, my lads.", said Skwisgaar.
Suntime walked over to the fallen enemy. He was dead.
"Now let's see this pretty face of yours. How did you live...?", he said as he undid the bandages around his face.
Silent Ruler vomitted.
"Blargh! W-WHAT THE HELL?!!", he screamed.
Much of Smiley's face was burnt off from his last battle. He hadn't said a word because the bottom half of his face was practically non-existant.
"What?! How could he have lived?!", yelled Suntime.
Then he noticed something. There was a small microchip attached to his forehead.

Strawberry shot the last stick man. It had been a fierce battle, no matter how utterly boring. He walked across the corpse strewn field to Brown and his flying unicorn.
"Anyway, like I was saying earlier...I AM THE KING!!!"
Brown didn't respond.
"Er...are you alright?"
Brown fainted. He had a deep gash down his side.
To be continued...

really good sequal

oh yeah! that was a kick ass chapter! way to go my friend!

A 10/10 I almost expected Suntime to utterly die lol :P

Oh and D-Lucks
LOOK OUT FOR T3H CHUCK NORR!S AND
T3H 700000000000000000000000 HEAVY HUMPBACK WHALES COMING TOWARDS YOU FROM THE SKY!

Feel the EMO FORCE! D-LUCKS! FEEEEL IT!

OMG ITS THE BIG BAD WOLF!

At 9/8/06 05:17 AM, DarkNati0nX wrote: Oh and D-Lucks
LOOK OUT FOR T3H CHUCK NORR!S AND
T3H 700000000000000000000000 HEAVY HUMPBACK WHALES COMING TOWARDS YOU FROM THE SKY!

Feel the EMO FORCE! D-LUCKS! FEEEEL IT!

OMG ITS THE BIG BAD WOLF!

*Fails to connect with force* *Redialling....* *Decides just to hold katana in air above head and hope for the best* *whimpers slightly as the shadows grow bigger...*

nice chapter btw

I can't believe I almost missed it!!!!!!

Thank you!

My fate....huzzah bitches.

At 9/8/06 05:20 PM, The_D-Lucks_Edition wrote: *Fails to connect with force* *Redialling....* *Decides just to hold katana in air above head and hope for the best* *whimpers slightly as the shadows grow bigger...*

Erm...Good luck with that.

At 9/8/06 05:39 PM, Brownie_210 wrote: I can't believe I almost missed it!!!!!!

Thank you!

My fate....huzzah bitches.

I had to put you in. Your character description was so...amazing.

At 9/8/06 05:48 PM, ghandenhanden wrote:

At 9/8/06 05:20 PM, The_D-Lucks_Edition wrote: *Fails to connect with force* *Redialling....* *Decides just to hold katana in air above head and hope for the best* *whimpers slightly as the shadows grow bigger...*

Erm...Good luck with that.

Thank you.

Sorry about having no chapter yesterday.
Newgrounds: Under Fire 2
Chapter 7

Silent Ruler, Suntime, and CrippleFight walked into the city Skwisgaar spoke of. It was made up of a large concentration of primitive, straw houses. In the center was a large fountain with many people gathered around it.
"Wow...I had no idea there were so many banned users...", said Silent Ruler.
"Hmph. It must be nice living in ignorance.", replied Skwisgaar.
A man walked up to them.
"Can it be...? Sir Skwisgaar? You've come back?!"
Skwisgaar shushed him.
"Shhh. Don't make a big ordeal about it."
"But-"
"No buts!", he said as he walked away.
Suntime walked beside him.
"What was that about? Are you famous?"
"No. Just an old man with a lot of history."

Strawberry flew through the sky on the back of the winged unicorn (who told Strawberry his name was Reggy) with the injured Brown behind him.
"We've got to get him to a doctor soon!!", yelled Strawberry.
"I know! There's one just up ahead!", responded the horse. "He'll know how to deal with him."
"You know him?"
"Oh yes. He and Brown go way back."
Reggy descended from the clouds. The only building Strawberry saw was a small shack in the middle of nowhere.
"What?! That can't be it!!", he yelled out.
"Don't be skeptical until you meet him."
They landed just in front of the small building. Strawberry knocked on the door, which had a sign that read: "DarkNationX: Doctor"
The door opened. A tall, young man walked out.
"Hello. May I help you?", he asked.
"What do you think?! Can't you tell that he's injured?"
"Sir, if you can't already tell, I am blind."
Strawberry noticed that his eyes were glazed, staring off into space.
"Oh, sorry...Hey wait!! A blind doctor?!"
"Shush!", said Reggy. "He is the best doctor you'll find!"
The man flinched.
"What? Reggy? Dear god...Brown's been injured hasn't he? Is he still conscious?"
"I'm afraid not."
"Damn...Quick, take him down into tmy office."
He disapeared down a pair of steps in front of the door. Strawberry followed. At the bottom was a large hallway with five doors on each side.
"Ah, I see.", he said. " Most of the structure is underground!"
Dark opened the last door on the left side, revealing a small, brick room.
"Quick, put him inside."
"What?! How are you supposed to operate in there?"
"I'm not. Now put him in there unless you want to die!"
"Are you threatening me?!"
"No!! Brown doesn't need treatment! He's able to heal himself! But he needs to be restrained before his other side awakens!! NOW PUT HIM IN!!!"
Strawberry reluctantly did so, although he had no idea about what he was talking about. The doctor let out a deep sigh.
"Come.", he said. "I'll explain everything."

Skwisgaar led the trio through the densely populated city.
"By the way...", said CrippleFight. "What's this city's name?"
"Doesn't have one."
"What?"
"The city has no name. We simply call it 'The city'."
Suddenly, the man that confronted them earlier ran up to them.
"Dammit!", yelled Skwisgaar. "What do you want?!"
"I-I'm sorry Sir Skwisgaar, I know you didn't want to be bothered, but-"
"No buts!", he said as he began to walk away again.
"Wait!! We need you to come check out an unusual visitor!"
The old man stopped.
"An unusual visitor? What about them?"
"Well, he appears to be a normal user, but there's something strange about him...We were hoping you could help us out, with you being so experienced and all."
"Very well, if it gets you off my case. What did he say his name was."
"Ah, I believe he said it was XIN."
To be continued...

I'm glad you thought so.

:....his other side awakens........

Bwa-ha-ha-ha....

This plot is more twisted than John Wayne Gacy and tom Cruise put together. And thats the way it should be.

Nice chapter, I like the way you vary through different emotions to build suspense in the reader, good story so far.

Newgrounds: Under Fire 2
Chapter 8

Strawberry sat at a small coffee table across from the blind doctor, DarkNationX. He addressed him.
"Now, tell me what the fuck is goin on!!"
"Shhh...", said the doctor as he clutched his sensitive ears. "I'll explain. A few years ago, just after Brown was banned to the portal, he was fatally injured in a battle. Rather than die, he made a pact with the grim reaper. He would never die at the expense of never sleeping again (or in this case lose consciousness)...For if he did..."
"Well? What would happen?"
"...His dark side, Abdhul, would awaken."
Strawberry flinched.
"Abdhul? Are you-"
"I've explained all there is. We should go into the cellar now.", said the doctor as he opened up a door behind him. It led down into a dark room.
"What?! I'm not going down into a damp, old basement!!"
"Suit yourself.", replied the doctor with a sigh, as he closed the door.
Strawberry rolled his eyes. This guy was crazy. Abdhul? Man, what a-
His thoughts were interupted by a blood-curdling scream from Brown's room.
"AAAAAAAAUUUUUUUGGHHHH!!!!"
His ears practically exploded. He swallowed his pride and stepped into the cellar.

The trio was led back to the gate by Skwisgaar. It was inconvenience to them, but they understood. He had a duty to his people. CrippleFight was anxious.
"I sense a great chi around here...", he said nervously.
"Do you think it's-"
"No. It's not strong enough to be his. But still..."
Silent Ruler was puzzled by their conversation. They reached the gate. Skwisgaar walked up to one of the guards.
"You there! Where is the man named XIN?"
"Ah! Sir Skwisgaar! It's true, you are back! The man is right over there, waiting for your verdict", said the man, pointing to a figure leaning against a tree.
The man wore a dark blue jacket. He had light blue hair and a face filled with anger.
Skwisgaar walked over to him.
"You there! You are XIN?"
The man walked toward the old man.
"Yes. I presume you are the famous Skwisgaar?"
"The very same...Tell me, what is a humanoid type doing here? You should be all the way on the other side of the portal."
The man was silent. Silent Ruler turned to the other two.
"Humanoid type? What's that?"
"I don't know...", responded CrippleFight. "But he's the source of the chi."
Skwisgaar addressed the man again. He was angry now.
"I asked you a question! What is a flash character doing here?!"
With those words, the guards leaped toward the man, spears at the ready. He jumped out of the way.
"Users of Newgrounds...you're all the same.", he said as he leapt at them.
He rolled under their legs, avoiding the spears. Before they could turn around, He roundhouse kicked them all, instantly knocking them out.
"W-wow!! He's strong!!", said Silent Ruler.
Skwisgaar was unimpressed. He began to take out his rifle, but he was interupted by CrippleFight.
"Wait old man. You should never bring a gun into a fistfight." , he said turning toward the enemy. "I've been looking for a good brawl."
"I don't pleasure myself on pain like you, but I'll gladly oblige.", said XIN.

Dark lit a candle. It was hardly enough to light the whole room, but it was enough that he and Strawberry could see each other. The screaming continued upstairs.
"W-What is that?!"
"Shhhh...It's vital that you're quiet down here. That screaming is the transformation process taking place in Brown. He's told me it's somewhat like having 8'000 root canals at the same time."
"Ouch...", said Strawberry.
He heard a slight cough.
"What was that? Is there someone else in here?"
The doctor was silent for a moment. Then he walked over to the end of the room and said, "I'm afraid so."
He shined the light on a woman lying down on a small bed. Her face was nearly entirely covered by bandages and cloth. Only her long black hair, nostrils, and mouth were visible. She spoke to him in a soft voice.
"So...you don't remember me?"
She began coughing heavily.
"Please, don't speak. It's too hard on your lungs."
Strawberry was in shock. He remembered that voice.
"What is this Dark? That's Sarai!!"
To be continued...

And the moral is.... don't fear the reaper, fear the dentist....

Root canal-o-death

It reminds me of the Justice Friends. There should be a big booming voice over guy going..Meanwhile! Back in the Portal!

two words for this story, kick.ass.

Wow this time the chapters aren't coming in half as fast... Still it's a good story though.

keep going, this story is pretty good

At 9/10/06 09:50 PM, SkweakyMuffin wrote: Wow this time the chapters aren't coming in half as fast... Still it's a good story though.

School's started. :'( Only one chapter per day.

I had no chapter yesterday. This one feels to me like it's got no soul in it. I guess business just has that effect on people.

I'll try harder next time. T_T

Newgrounds: Under Fire 2
Chapter 9

CrippleFight threw his fist forward, missing the humanoid flash character, XIN, by an inch. He was met with a flurry of punches, all hitting him square in the chest.
"Umph...", he grunted as he backed away. "Not bad."
"Don't talk while you're fighting.", said XIN as he rushed toward him.
CrippleFight jumped out of the way and kicked him in the ribs. The hit was a success. XIN slowed down a bit.
"This technique...I've seen it before."
"What?!"
"You broke two of my ribs. But that won't mean anything."
To CrippleFight's shock, he heard a snapping noise. XIN speed came back and he landed a hook on his chin, followed by a kick to the back of his knee.
"AAAAUGH!!!", he screamed as he yelled to the ground.
XIN kicked him in the gut, causing him to fly into the air. He hit a tree.
This was bad. This man could see through his technique and somehow heal broken bones. Scary.

The screaming above him had gone away, but Strawberry's attention was otherwise diverted. The woman in front him was actually Sarai.
"Sarai...W-What happened to you?!"
"Shh! Quiet down! Her eardrums have become incredibly sensitive. Too much noise causes her great pain.", scolded the doctor.
The woman rolled over to look at them.
"Straw...Berry...I'll tell you what-"
She broke into another horrible coughing spell.
"Don't speak...!", urged Dark. "I'll explain the whole story. Strawberry, surely you remember when Sarai was demodded, don't you?"
"Yes...I er- I held a party."
They ignored him.
"Well, her trial in front of a jury of her "peers" was a bit one sided. She was unfairly banned along with being demodded. That's when it happened. We lose so many users who just get unlucky. Some come across a herd of stick men, others just meet an angry flash character. For Sarai, it was zombies."
"How did she survive?"
Sarai cut in.
"Dark...he found me and saved me...then brought me here."
"Please, Sarai. I'm asking you, save your strength."
He turned back to Strawberry.
"Well, it looks like the worst part is over. We can go back up now. Please, Sarai needs her rest."
"I understand."
Once Strawberry was out, he turned back to Sarai and stroked her cheek.
"Don't worry. I'll find a way to save you. Just wait."
"Thank you Dark...But it's too late for me. I-"
"Don't say it. It's not too late, it never will be.", he said, as he walked back to the door.
"I'll check on you again later....My love."

Punch, punch, kick. Kick, punch, kick. XIN and CrippleFight's battle continued. He was surprised to find that there was nothing he could do. He had broken XIN's arm, but he had healed it. Same with his leg.
"I've had enough.", said XIN.
He jumped into the air and dove down like a hawk. CrippleFight jumped out of the way.
As soon as he landed, XIN rushed forward and delivered a mighty blow to his chest.
It was followed by kicks to the stomach and head. CrippleFight skidded onto the ground. He tried to get up, but he was badly pummeled. XIN leaned over him, with his fist in the air.
"Die."
A gunshot rang in their ears. A strand of Xin hair flew off.
"Boy, get over here, or I'll aim closer.", called Skwisgaar.
With a look of disgust and anger, he did so.
"Victory is mine. Apparently you all are sore losers."
Skwisgaar said nothing and hit him in the chest with the butt of the gun. It knocked him unconscious.
"Take him to the dungeon."
He looked to CrippleFight.
"Take him too. I have a fun idea."
Silent Ruler and Suntime were shocked and yelled out.
"What?! You can't put him in the dungeon!! He hasn't done anything!!"
"He's proved himself to be weak. That's reason enough. If he wants out, he'll have to win in the colisseum."
To be continued...

I don't know why but I feel like this story is dying... It just seemed abandoned the other day when there wasn't a new chapter. I just don't know...
BTW the last chapter was pretty good. Not your best, but still good.

Stay strong GhandenHanden! You mustn't quit! We believe in you!

Attention
Sadly, I have decided to stop writing this story. Unlike the first one, I'm just not interested in writing this. It's coming out completely different than I want it to be. I know that a few of you are going to be disapointed, but I just no longer have the will to write it. I want to thank all of you for reading so far, and I apologize.

If you want to continue the story yourself or something, whatever. It really doesn't matter to me. This is my final post on this thread. See ya around.

You gotta stay true to yourself man, no problem.

You can have the 499 thanks I owe you, I won't need them. I am a little dissappointed, it was nice to have a cyber ego, but I understand. I would continue, but I probably just make a fool of myself, you write a hell of alot better than me.

Kudos, peace.

Damn! I knew it! Oh well better luck next time. :(

What's with this week? My mom's friend is murdered, there is the shooting in that collage in Canada where SOAS is, and now this?

Alright I lied. I said I wouldn’t but I’ve mulled on it for a few days and decided to give it a go. I just can’t let a story this good die without giving it a puncher’s chance.

Please tell me what you think about it. If you think I should continue let me know and I will take up this story. If you don’t like it, let me now and I’ll stop flogging the dead, winged unicorn.

Newgrounds: Under Fire 2
Chapter 10

Strawberry Clock climbed the stairs back to the entrance level. Of all the things to complicate matters, Sarai was the last thing he expected. The Doctor would have to explain things a little more thoroughly; all of these secrets and one-sided conversations were beginning to aggravate him.
As Strawberry reached the top of the stairway, he was surprised to see a tail figure standing in the dim light.
“Brown!” said Strawberry, “you had me worried for a second. All this talk about your ‘darker side’, I should have known it was a pile of—“
At that Strawberry froze. Though the figure in front of him resembled Brown, he sensed something different, something dark. Strawberry looked at Brown’s face. The eyes were dark and intense, almost as if they were staring right through him.
Behind Strawberry, Dark stood in fear several steps down. Though blind, he had known what was happening even before Strawberry.
Slowly, Brown’s hand came to his sword. Strawberry could only watch silently as Brown drew his weapon. A thousand thoughts rushed through Strawberry’s head, he knew Brown was a tough fighter, and he didn’t like his odds fighting Brown unarmed.
Almost on cue, Brown’s face twisted into an evil smile, and the cursed one let out a dark laugh. Strawberry took his stance and prepared himself for Brown’s attack. Although he did not know, Strawberry had already made a mistake; he was not dealing with Brown.
He was dealing with Abdhul.

As the guards took the unconscious Xin and the subdued CrippleFight away, Suntime and Silentruler faced Skiwsgaar.
“Just what the Hell do you think you’re doing!?” cried Suntime.
“You boys just don’t quite get it do you?” replied Skiwsgaar, “The only thing that gets me more riled then a troublemaker is an over-confident weakling. If he, and for that matter you, think that your going to save your precious king you’re going to have to be stronger then some pathetic human-type.”
Although angered, Suntime and Silentruler knew he was right. It seemed that everyone they had encountered so far was stronger then them. They had over-estimated themselves, and because of it were stuck in a bad situation.
“Where and what is this Coliseum you’re taking them to?” asked Silentruler.
“It is where we send our criminals and where those seeking to make a name for them as a fighter go. Come with us.” spoke Skiwsgaar.
As the party began to move away, Silentruler turned to Suntime.
“I don’t like this one bit.” said Silentruler.
“Tell me about it, but what other choice do we got? The Blam module is scrapped, King Strawberry is still no where to be found, and now CrippleFight is captured!” shouted Suntime, “This whole thing has went to hell!”
“You mistake yourself!” shouted Skiwsgaar, who was already several yards from them down the road, “This place can be worst than hell!”
Suntime and Silentruler looked at each other, and slowly started to follow. They could not abandon CrippleFight and they had no way to succeed with out a guide. They started down the road with the party, wondering what the Coliseum held for them…

In less than an instant, Brown lunged at Strawberry. Without anything to defend himself with, Strawberry could only duck and hope to dodge the blow. Brown’s sword impacted the wall hard, sending a shudder throughout the building.
Strawberry tried to regain his balance, but Brown was too quick, he had already turned and swung again. Strawberry attempted to dodge, but this time was too slow. The blade of Brown’s sword sliced into his left arm. Strawberry let out sharp cry as the blood started to run from the cut.
Brown swung once more, this time hitting Strawberry’s right shoulder. Strawberry dropped to his knee and tried to cover himself from the onslaught. Brown’s speed was incredible, nothing like before. It seemed Brown had to be at least twice as fast as he was in the previous fights.
Brown began swinging his sword violently, cutting and slicing into Strawberry on every blow. Strawberry could do nothing more than feebly block and dodge what little he could. He was losing blood quickly and all that was around him slowly began to blur.
Brown brought the handle of his sword down hard upon Strawberry’s head. Strawberry had not even had the time to see it coming and crumpled to the floor.
As Strawberry looked up into the eyes of his opponent, he finally had a chance to really see Brown’s face. It was then he saw the truth, what was before him was definitely not Brown. He resembled him, but the sheer power and…and evil that radiated from him could be none other than the demon itself.
Abdhul let out another cackle and slowly raised his sword above his head. The King of Newgrounds could only watch the mighty blow as it came down….

Too be continued?