Forum Topic: Improving this monkey cartoon

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JKR

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Posted at: 8/12/06 11:33 PM

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Hey all,

Any suggestions for improving this cartoon:
http://newgrounds.com/portal/view/330996

I'm always looking for how to make them even better. Thanks for any help!


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Dusty-Gorilla

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Posted at: 8/12/06 11:39 PM

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Syntrus

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Posted at: 8/12/06 11:39 PM

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hey man the humor was kinda dry i have just the track your looking forif u want some nifty audio click here Other then that this was pretty solid but yah u need some more audio.


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JKR

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Posted at: 8/12/06 11:47 PM

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At 8/12/06 11:39 PM, Dusty_Gorilla wrote: Yes, don't ever suck.

Ever? Or just not all the time?

So are you saying this cartoon sucks or what? I'm confused...


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cheshirepus

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Posted at: 8/12/06 11:57 PM

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The humor was really dry and that did make it hard to follow unfortunately. I could tell that many of the voices were done by the same person as well, and that also detracted from the dialogue too. Not to say that I think is was poorly done, just not done well enough to look over is all. Lastly, the script sounded forced a bit, like you (or whoever else was doing the voices) were overacting a little, but I think that's pretty common for most any freelance Flash cartoon involving voices.
Animation wise, I thought it worked well and couldn't find any obvious flaws. Smooth, nice framerate, decent lipsyncing... only, it was just kind of difficult to sit through is all.


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ZekeySpaceyLizard

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Posted at: 8/13/06 12:00 AM

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It was nice like most of your cartoons space chicken.

Although this one was missing that happy "spark" your others had.

I dunno.

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