Forum Topic: The Few, The Proud.

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Do not think of this as my opinion but rather my story of what will happen in the furture.

I was thinking, if terrorists attacked the U.S.A. Then they would attack Niagra falls, too cut off power for half the country, and then N.Y.C. (Big surprise). Then they would most likely bomb the White House, and then the Pentagon + Texas. Sucks for me, I live in New York. Then I started wondering about why there are terrorists that do such things. I noticed that they are doing it because of their OPINIONS. Isn't that what we, the U.S.A. Support? Freedom of Speech. Freedom of Religon.

If we support it then how will we have a chance too stop it? I have noticed that all of the world is dead. Dead. There will always be terrorists like there will always be poor and rich people. Powerfull and weak people. There will always be these things, so therefor the will always be CORRUPT people. The only chance for us too survive is too make a strong army\navy\marines etc. Also importantly a ultra powerful intelligence agency.

Of course there is always the option of planting a chip in everones head that will make then not be terrorists. Lol. But we the U.S. are against that sorta stuff arent we? After thinking all of this for about a week, I just decided too stop freaking thinking. It is like trying too find out god. (Famous question, "If there is a 'God' Then who made 'God'?).

And yet, there is always the thoughts and the reasoning of the average citizen who becomes a fighter for their country. This does not just include the U.S. anymore. This includes all the brave people who fight for their countrys, who are willing too give their lives for the people they live with.

There is always a fear of dieng in the service. You always have too watch your back. Always try too watch your fellow soldiers back so they can watch yours. You never will know when you will get ambushed. Your friend is dieng in front of you, you can't help him. What do you do? You get back too base. Only 6 of the 15 men that went with you survived.

Congratulations soldier. You made it. Your best friend died in front of you, sadly you live next door too his family. He had a wife and 2 kids. You then wonder... When will it be your turn too die, when will it be your wife or husband, and children, and brothers, sisters, mother, father, friends, all around the people who are close too you's turn too have their heart sink when they learn, you didn't make it.

You finaly get sent home. 2 days later, you go too your friends funeral. You watch as your best friend gets burried. You do not want too let go. He was like a brother too you, you watch as he waife gets handed a flag. Congratz soldier.. You lived another day.

Your ducking under barricades, 4 of your fellow soldiers behind you. You hear shots, you scream , "Get down get the fuck down!" Too late. You hear yelling, you look for the enemy soldiers, not even daring too take time too look back. You fire 4 shots, there was only two soldiers, one head shot too one, 2 chest shots too another, you look too make sure it's clear.

You turn around too check for wounded men, everything around you is slow, you see someone on the ground, it is hard too see because of the sand, your rub your eyes and see 2 soldiers on the ground, 2 checking the bodies. You notice one was still alive, only a bullet too the arm, the other.. Your best friend. He is laying on his back. 1 shot in the chest, he is spurting blood from his mouth.

You run over too him, you grab his hand. He says, "Jim, tell my wife I love her. Tell Jamie and Sara I will always be with them, protecting them. Please.. (Jamie and Sara are his children).
"No, Chris, Your not going too die! I wont let you!"
"Face it Jim, I am gone."
With one final cough of blood, his hand loosens. His eyes are still open. You close them. You watch as a tear of yours falls on his cheek.

13 hours later, you are back at base. You get of the helicopter and do not turn too look at the black body bag behind you. You learn that more then half of the soldiers who left died. You get commended for a good job.

And now you wake up. everything that happened that day was just in your dream. you have had this dream for the 5 days you have been back. You get up and walk down the stairs, and out the door too the mail box. Nothing good, bill, bill, one time offer too win $1mil, walmart catalog, a letter from the U.S. army. Your heart drops. You feel your heart beat for 7 minutes, just looking at the letter. You finnaly open it.

2 weeks. Only 2 weeks until you have too leave.

You wait a week too tell your family. They didn't take it easily. This time you get a life insurance policy. You know, just in case.

You are at disney land, trying too enjoy the last days you will have with your family for a while. Hopefully at least... Your daughter and son are laughing on the monster ride, but you can see the pain in their eyes. You know they fear the worse...

Back too reality.

I bet some of you have served . I bet you can make a story that will kick this ones ass. I encourage you too do so. I will make a flash of this if I ever get flash professional. That's a promise.

Back too hell.

Your in you first mission since you got left home. An ambush. You are in a bulding, on the roof sniping. You hear a voice on your radio saying they are coming, 2 minutes until ambush starts, fire on sight.

You see a enemy tank, and several soldiers following it. You hear shots, so you start, 1 head shot. Reload. Reload, Miss. All the soldiers are out of your sight. The tank points at you. You run too the other side of the roof, the tank misses, but you still get whiplashed. Everything is blurry, you didn't notice the soldier walking up the stairs behind you.

You hear a click, everything slows down. Fuck. You jump forward, pulling out your knive, turn around and kick the gun out of the enemys hand, he takes out his knife. YOu both just stare at eachothers eyes, probabaly guessing what the other was thinking. You do not want too die.

You refuse too die now. You jump at him, slaming him too the ground, and reach too stab him, he holds you back, and bites your hand, you keep pushing, bleeding on his face. Your family and friends flash before your eyes. You see your own funeral. You see you getting lowered into your grave. You think, "No.. Not today." You push him up, and off the roof.

The Few, The Proud.

Congratz, Another Day soldier.


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uhh... dude.. there are political forums i guess... go there O.o this is newgrounds


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At 8/12/06 01:55 AM, SlayDay29 wrote: uhh... dude.. there are political forums i guess... go there O.o this is newgrounds

Fuck you. Read the whole mother fucking thing. It is a god damn story.


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Dude you suck. I stopped reading after Texas.

Yeehaw.
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At 8/12/06 01:57 AM, -Frozen- wrote: Dude you suck. I stopped reading after Texas.

Yeehaw.

I fucking hate you dumbasses. Mother fuckers.


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i didnt read the post it had too many words, so im just going to agree, or dissagree, and thats final!


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At 8/12/06 02:00 AM, HunterK wrote: I fucking hate you dumbasses. Mother fuckers.

Watch it, or they won't be the only ones banned here.

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At 8/12/06 02:02 AM, theletterj wrote: i didnt read the post it had too many words, so im just going to agree, or dissagree, and thats final!

Well at least your not an ass like them, thanks for trying though! :) I will try too make my next story I post here (if ever again) shorter!


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At 8/12/06 01:57 AM, HunterK wrote:
At 8/12/06 01:55 AM, SlayDay29 wrote: uhh... dude.. there are political forums i guess... go there O.o this is newgrounds
Fuck you. Read the whole mother fucking thing. It is a god damn story.

Yes, but, you see..it's fucking long. I don't have the attention span nor the patience to read such lengthy pieces of writing.

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At 8/12/06 01:57 AM, -Frozen- wrote: Dude you suck. I stopped reading after Texas.

Yeehaw.

HAHAHAHAHA! Made me laugh out loud!

But yah dude, this is a politics forum topic, and also, America DOES have a strong military force, the STRONGEST in the WORLD. On top of all of this, your spelling needs some help...


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it may be true that we have the strongest military, even though i dont think we do , we just shw off our guns more often,

Ohh yea , i also retract my last post.


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good story


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You spelled every form of "too" and "to" as "too." Good job.


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To Evark: Lol, sorry, I just got a tinsy winsy bit mad, thanks for the warning!

To Phoenix: Wow, lol, you made me laugh so hard I almost pissed my self. It is a story. A S-T-O-R-Y. Okay? And also, didn't you see EVark, a mod post here? I fit belonged in that forums, and not in this one. This thread would be teh loxorz as people say it. :) ABout my spelling, it is pretty good for someone who is in eastren timezone. (it is 2:21AM For fucks sake.)

To Graeme: Lol, please. Gimme a break (2:21am) But fine, be like that :'(. But do you have a comment on my story? Please? I really, really would like too hear it so my next one (if there will be) WIll be better!

Too all those who do not know, this is my first real story, I really would appreciate constructive criticism!


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So.. No one? No Constructive criticism? Ok.. I will just bump it in the morning when more people are on.


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Um it was a good story only bad part was it was probably to long for most ng users.


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At 8/12/06 02:42 AM, -MARINE- wrote: Um it was a good story only bad part was it was probably to long for most ng users.

Yeah.. Maybe if i make like 1 paragraph per post it might look smaller?


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At 8/12/06 02:25 AM, HunterK wrote: To Phoenix: Wow, lol, you made me laugh so hard I almost pissed my self. It is a story. A S-T-O-R-Y. Okay? And also, didn't you see EVark, a mod post here? I fit belonged in that forums, and not in this one. This thread would be teh loxorz as people say it. :) ABout my spelling, it is pretty good for someone who is in eastren timezone. (it is 2:21AM For fucks sake.)

I am SO sorry for offending you so terribly much. I plan on not doing it again!

;)

HA....HA....HA..........HA!!!!!!

Yah, I pwn, idk, I am in an interesting mood right now...
O.o


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At 8/12/06 02:45 AM, HunterK wrote:
At 8/12/06 02:42 AM, -MARINE- wrote: Um it was a good story only bad part was it was probably to long for most ng users.
Yeah.. Maybe if i make like 1 paragraph per post it might look smaller?

I dunno you might wanna do something different. Probably 80% of everyone who sees how long it is wont read the whole thing.


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To Phoenix: Dunno If thats laced with sarcasm or not, but Ok, thanks for saying sorry.

To -MARINE-: Yeah, next time something shall be changed. Probabaly a 18000 character story, in shortened posts. Lol. This one was only like 6100 characters!


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At 8/12/06 02:51 AM, HunterK wrote: To Phoenix: Dunno If thats laced with sarcasm or not, but Ok, thanks for saying sorry.

No sarcasm! I am a nice little boy.... most often.............
;)


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I can't be bothered to read this sub-par trash, so I skimmed it, reading some paragraphs whole. the least I can say is that this is the most stereotypical, media-spoonfed crap i've ever read. It's the same tired cliche' over and over again, not to mention that it looks as if english is your second or third language. You really never put into account the pigs who actually enist on their own free will, thinking oppresing people under their own mindless regime is good for them and thinking that they are some kind of hero. great, you won even more money and power for the moneygrubbing politicians who work on the fine line of getting as much wealth and might as they can from their people while still staying in their place of power. Thanks for more room-temperature crap essays from the average elitist pig who thinks his ideas are gold.


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I found this rather interesting, though some parts were a bit akward and confusing, it was a good read. Just don't expect the other younger ng users to like this.

Everything I see is just a image of my thoughts "Always looking for a better day..."
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Thanks lost wisdom.

And maybe I didn't talk about the corporate pigs because they have a gun too my head? =P


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terrorists attack the U.S.A., it is called 9/11.


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At 8/12/06 01:54 AM, HunterK wrote: I was thinking, if terrorists attacked the U.S.A. Then they would attack Niagra falls, too cut off power for half the country

Terrorists aren't that smart.

But hey, that was a really good read. Kind of disturbing at the end, but I thoroughly enjoyed it.

We need a few more people like you.


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At 8/12/06 12:32 PM, invaderzig1 wrote: terrorists attack the U.S.A., it is called 9/11.

Dumbass. Please refrain from posting again until you read it all or have something smart too say.


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i read it, it was pretty good.


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My atteintion span wouldnt let me read the whole thing, but from what I read I agree with you. And the story was good. Good job!


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Thanks everyone!


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