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MarcusRaven

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I came up with a new dark hero. Kind of my thing. His name is Reaper. I'm still unsure as to what his origins or powers should be, but I want him to be sort of Spawn/Constantine-ish. Stuck betwen heaven and hell. I also want a majority of his powers to come from the necklace and bracelet charms he wears. (Both of which are skulls, of course.) He can summon the scythe at will, and so far that's the only power I have him with. (Beside the staples of the undead, including strength and invunerability.) Below is the design I came up with. I'll work out any details on his history and powers, but any ideas are greatly appreciated. Hope ya like him!

(Reaper is the official property of Marcus Raven and Raven Animations.)

New character. What do you think?


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You came up with the "reaper". Sorry but it already has been done.


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I like it. You should put something else on his other arm, it looks kinda bare. Other than that great.

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it's awsome, just one hint....THINK OF A DIFFERENT NAME!!!


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Why is he defying physics by reaching forward to grab the scythe that's behind him? Or is the sxythe just ridiculously designed, so that it bends out to the side?

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His legs are HUUUUUUGEE.

Fix that.

And don't be so ignorant. Reaper is not original, nor is it open for someone to copyright.

Thats like copyrighting 'God".

You can only copyright the drawing.


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At 8/5/06 12:07 AM, Franklin_Moore wrote: You came up with the "reaper". Sorry but it already has been done.

Well, that's why I want him to be Spawn-is or like Constantine. He's stuck between heaven and hell because of a deal with death. The real Grim Reaper will be part of the story, as a sort of misleading guide character. The originality will come from the origin. His call to heroism is what will make him different.


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At 8/5/06 12:09 AM, -Beavis- wrote: His legs are HUUUUUUGEE.

Fix that.

And don't be so ignorant. Reaper is not original, nor is it open for someone to copyright.

Thats like copyrighting 'God".

You can only copyright the drawing.

MY Reaper design is property of me. That's what I meant. The character and design, not THE reaper. That better?


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At 8/5/06 12:05 AM, MarcusRaven wrote: I came up with a new dark hero.

It seems like you tried way too hard.


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Hmmm, maybe he should have a wolverine-type glove, with claws sticking out, (like the ones in .dot hack, if anyone else ever played that horrible game, it was one of the weapons you could get for Kite), also, like others said, change the name, and make him a little different, BTW, good drawing


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So I think I have a story idea. The Grim Reaper is a title, a throne. The current Reaper must choose an heir every 500 years, or one is chosen for them. (This means it could very well be somebody who kills for fun, or somebody who lets people live forever. Basically, it could be screwed up if chosen wrong.) Normally this isn't a problem, since past Reapers only have one child. The current Reaper, however, decided to make his work easier, making four children. They are Death's Right Hand, the team that reaps certain areas so the Reaper isn't so stressed out. One night, the Reaper must reap the soul of a young woman, who is ill due to a failed childbirth. When he arrives, the woman begs for mercy and her life. The Reaper strikes a deal with her. If she will bear and raise a child for him, and fulfill a request for him, he will spare her life. She agrees. This child becomes the half-human "fifth finger" of the Right Hand. The boy is raised by his mother until he is 18. They receive a strange box in the mail that contains a skull talisman necklace and bracelet. A note, addressed to the mother reads that the boy is to join the Right Hand, and be one of his reapers. The boy, after taking all this in (poorly), agrees to travel to the Netherrealm to be trained by his father. One year later, the Reaper tells his children that an heir must be chosen by the end of the year. He creates a game. The five must reap as many souls as they can, from a set (large) list, defeat demons from the depths of Hades, and battle each other to declair a true heir. They only have one year to do it, or the Higher Powers choose the new heir. (Which may not be one of them!) The Reaper will throw a few tricks and surprises into the game as he sees fit. Marcus, the half-human, and the youngest, becomes our main character. (Pictured above.) He must overcome the dark powers of the Reaper and somehow stay alive in this game.

Heh? What do you think? I think it has a sort of Kazahana family feel to it. I'm not trying to rip them off. I just realized that correllation after typing all that.

I also thought of something to add to his right arm. It looks like a tattoo of a chain running down his arm, with a throwing knife (think Naruto) and tattooed in his palm. At will, the tattoo can become a real chain, and the knife end can open like a mouth, revealing demonic teeth. (Think Scorpion's spear from the MK movie.) The chain is what absorbs the souls the reapers reap, and can also let out an inhuman scream. I call is a Wailing Chain.

So, my idea developed more quickly than I thought. Here are the siblings, oldest to youngest.

Darius - Male - Largest Scythe, Medium Length Chain, Average Volume Wail, Fast Speed
Altrea - Female - Average Scythe, Long Chain, Average Volume Wail, Average Speed
Nicolai - Male - Average Scythe, Longest Chain, Quiet Wail, Slow Speed (Largest muscles)
Morgana - Female - Small Scythe (Fast attacks), Shortest Chain, Average Volume Wail, Fastest Speed
Marcus - Male (Human) - Large Scythe, Long Chain, LOUDEST Wail, Average Speed

So, how is it coming? Do you like the story? Does it work well? What do you think could use improvement? What do you think needs no improvement? I'd love feedback! I might turn this into a new series!


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THAT'S SO HARD CORE!!!!

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the jeans and shoes take away from it.


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At 8/5/06 09:03 PM, KaleFlame wrote: the jeans and shoes take away from it.

He's half human, so he prefers them. When I design the four siblings, I'll think of something a little more fitting.


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you definitely need to make him unique. spawn is the only person with his funky suit, batman has the batmobile, ect. 'Reaper' needs not to look like a holloween costume and more like a badass


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heres my new super hereo

New character. What do you think?


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He looks alright except hes got weird ass check bones


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At 8/5/06 09:07 PM, Alternate_Earth wrote: you definitely need to make him unique. spawn is the only person with his funky suit, batman has the batmobile, ect. 'Reaper' needs not to look like a holloween costume and more like a badass

That's where the Wailing Chain helps, I believe. Also, when like this, his skin is a light/pale blue. The skull on his face is, of course, white. I think that helps.


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Any more opinions? I'm looking for some good feedback here.


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At 8/5/06 12:07 AM, Franklin_Moore wrote: You came up with the "reaper". Sorry but it already has been done.

But its his own style of it i mean it has that Sub-Zero original mask on which is cool and then the Seyeth(the sword thing cant spell it) But its kinda dull to me.


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he's pretty cool, except his shoes look kinda retarted and out of place.


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kinda looks like the punisher w/ the skull

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At 8/6/06 10:59 PM, Dogget wrote: he's pretty cool, except his shoes look kinda retarted and out of place.

I'm not very good at drawing the lower body. Still practicing. Feet are the most difficult thing on the entire body to draw, in my opinion.


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Looks SOOOOOOOOOO original.


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The scythe is messed up...it's good but it doesn't connect right after it gos through him it's like dislodged wrong.

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At 8/6/06 11:00 PM, Slinging-Blood wrote: Looks SOOOOOOOOOO original.

Is anybody bothering to read the story I posted with it? The look has changed slightly since this post. I'll update when I get the chance. Everything is pretty much the same except for this:

*The bracelet skull has been scrapped.
*The necklace charm is a red orb with a small skull inside, instead of a flat medallion.
* The Wailing Chain (Not pictured) is no longer a "magic tattoo," but is now an actual chain wrapped around his arm. It is firms anchored in the left side of his chest, limiting how far he can extend the chain without hurting himself. The end of the chain is still a living creature.


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At 8/6/06 11:00 PM, MarcusRaven wrote: I'm not very good at drawing the lower body.

'Nuff said.


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Latest design. I think the hugging of the tombstone works well.

Also, I'm changing the origin a bit, again. The Reaper still spares the life of the young woman, and she still bears his child, but instead of just becoming a reaper, the boy dies at the age of 20. His father then reawakens him as a reaper, with his memory lost. As he realizes what he is, what he was, and what his father is trying to do, he gets pissed and tries to fight back. Sort of a cross between Spawn and The Crow in terms of method. It'll get good.

Here's the sketch! Enjoy!

New character. What do you think?


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Meh...nothing that great..Its decent

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*Yawn*

Original.

I did it for the lulz:

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