At 6/21/06 03:26 PM, Tantalus wrote:
At 6/21/06 03:18 PM, teh_ecks_bawks_hater wrote:
The first few parts of the story were funny; *stuff*
Yeah, you're right. And I've thought about it, and I've already decided the next story will contain no wanking/sex period. Looking back, every single sex/fapping scene I wrote sucked balls and brought down the quality of the story. If my only fanbase is a bunch of fap-happy kids who find wanking hilarious, then sucks to me. I'm not putting any sex or masturbation into the sequel, but that doesn't mean it can't be good.
Well it looks like i stopped reading this. But listen yer going down the wrong path. I know you dont want a bunch of sickos reading this just for the pron. But just have less fapping not no fapping,and use a better word. And dont just have it "LOl my daddy cant rape me any more lets celebrate by fucking". Have it be more passionate. This does need the sex and masturbation and hell maybe even one or two rape scenes. Thats what makes it well rounded and keeps our attention. You have violence, kick ass gunz, a nice plot,and cute girls. But you also need sex rape and fapping,but a smaller amount. And a little more detailed. I envision this story as a story with Violence, Plot,Sex Guns,Deception,Rape,Secret Underground Organizations, Enemies, Friends and fapping. Plz make the dream a reality.