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I'm still waiting for the part where I slice some fools >: (

Will I end up staying at the house making coffee? That's no fun.

ripoff idea from me and Puzzled.

NG war story is ours and it was up before yours.

At 10/30/05 07:22 PM, SadicSchoolgirl wrote: I'm still waiting for the part where I slice some fools >: (

Will I end up staying at the house making coffee? That's no fun.

Part 13 or 14 :)

You got an appearance in 10.1, too.

At 10/30/05 07:23 PM, Zen-Zinxe wrote: ripoff idea from me and Puzzled.

NG war story is ours and it was up before yours.

lies, you can't compete with this!

Almost finished par 11.1. By the way, for any morons who come on the BBS to spam, I suggest you stay far from this thread.

At 10/31/05 02:07 AM, mofomojo wrote: BORING

Sad you didn't die.

At 10/31/05 02:02 AM, Sarai wrote: lies, you can't compete with this!

Meh it is what I think, Mind you FBI is a great writer so im not angy at him.

At 10/31/05 12:39 PM, Zen-Zinxe wrote:

At 10/31/05 02:02 AM, Sarai wrote: lies, you can't compete with this!

Meh it is what I think, Mind you FBI is a great writer so im not angy at him.

Oh well, thanks :)

I'm not making a "NG Members war story", too. It's mostly a story based on Stephen King's writing style, suspense and action. Sad my first thead got deleted :(

Am I too late to be put in?

damn....

Oh I see. Well anyway if you want to check out our thread you know what it's called.

At 10/31/05 12:46 PM, Zen-Zinxe wrote: Oh I see. Well anyway if you want to check out our thread you know what it's called.

I just realized something... Your thread has been made on 29th september.

My original one had been made on 24th september :P

*sits awaiting more writing*

At 10/31/05 12:48 PM, FBIpolux wrote:
I just realized something... Your thread has been made on 29th september.

My original one had been made on 24th september :P

8|

I see.... Lol im wrong again oh well c yah I have to check if Puzzled is on.

At 10/31/05 12:53 PM, Zen-Zinxe wrote: I see.... Lol im wrong again oh well c yah I have to check if Puzzled is on.

Me too... :( Yours was in October. Mine was in September :o

Anyway, who cares? Let's just write and put some litterature in the General Section.

Yup, this place could always use more literature!

A New Ground’s Story – Part 11.1

Jumping by a window was harder than Lidov had thought. Trying to make a front flip while doing his stunt, he had fallen on his back and now was hurrying to come back on his feet. He felt someone pulled him and saw DancingTurkeyGod, frightened, telling him to “Hurry the fuck up”. She grabbed his hand and led him in the marsh. Lidov heard a door smacking coming from Lokken’s shack – The girl in the black dress had probably seen them jump by the window. They ran even faster, in an unknown direction. It’s only when the marsh ended and that Lokken’s foot knocked a rock that he realized where they were going.
He stopped. DTG turned to him, still holding his hand.
-What are you doing? she asked quickly, out of breath. We gotta move, follow me!
But Lidov didn’t move.
-Why are we going back in the Mountain??
-Because this women following us, the assassin Jade will not think we are stupid enough to return in the mountain. She’ll probably head to the Village.
Lidov stood still.
-How you know her name? he asked suspiciously.
DTG sighed.
-It’s not the time! I’ll tell you when we’ll be safe. Now run!
After running for almost fifteen minutes, they were totally exhausted. They had climbed a small cliff and they were finally on some little hidden plateau. There they found a cave where they would probably stay for the night.
After having run day and night, they were so tired that they immediately fallen asleep when they entered the cave. The morning, when DTG woke up, she realized she was comfortably installed into Lidov’s arms. She felt in security in this embrace, but she had to wake up. She slowly raised on her feet, making sure Lidov stay asleep. DTG looked in her backpack. Sadly, they had only saved one of them. They had enough food for a couple of days but no weapons. Luckily, she had planned to leave this cave before the next night. She looked into the cave’s deepness. It was really dark and she had no flashlight, but she’ll be able to see if there’s something interesting in that cave, even without light. She closed her eyes and projected her mind on the rock faces. She finally sensed something .There was metal crates in somewhere in the cave. She used her senses to find them. When her hands finally touched the aluminum, she pulled the box to the light. It wasn’t too heavy, so she managed to pull it even without her powers. The metal container finally appeared in her vision. She wasn’t really surprised to see a tank on it, the Asylum’s logo. She tried to open the box but it was locked from the inside. She put her hands on the box to feel the lock mechanic. She couldn’t sense any. It meant Shrapnel had probably locked it. Recently. Again, she used her mind to open the box. Shrapnel’s powers were really great, but she was able to counter them. She concentrated on the box and five minutes later, it opened. Quickly, like a child opening a candy bag, she opened the box. It was empty. Well, almost empty.
A small brown notebook was lying in the box. The Tank logo was on it again.
“Bingo” thought DancingTurkeyGod before opening the book.
New Ground – The Asylum

liljim

-Oh crap, said DancingTurkeyGod, awaking Lidov.

FBI's writing is better, if you read the first part and the part done just before you'll realise the writing has became world-class, i honestly didn't like the first few parts but now the story is so damn compelling.

At 10/31/05 02:44 PM, Karakou wrote: FBI's writing is better, if you read the first part and the part done just before you'll realise the writing has became world-class, i honestly didn't like the first few parts but now the story is so damn compelling.

Yeah, thanks. I think I've realized it too. Thanks to Newgrounds for building up my english :)

At 10/31/05 03:32 PM, FBIpolux wrote:

At 10/31/05 02:44 PM, Karakou wrote: FBI's writing is better, if you read the first part and the part done just before you'll realise the writing has became world-class, i honestly didn't like the first few parts but now the story is so damn compelling.

Yeah, thanks. I think I've realized it too. Thanks to Newgrounds for building up my english :)

Everyone renember where this is! If newgrounds ever comes under fire again this is becomes copout.

At 10/31/05 10:52 PM, Vertigo200 wrote: I was wondering when the big guys (the Fulps, Illijim, Shrapnel... no wait, not "the Shrap", he just thinks he all powerful =p ) would begin to show up. Which has, by adding plot twists to plot twists, made things even more confusing / interesting. After this sub-chapter, I'm betting on a huge showdown by chapters 13 and 14 where most are going to die and only the intervention of a greater power will be able to stop the carnage... but then again, Im not really a betting man, so who knows?

Shrapnel has already appeared a couple of times. I guess if Neph told him to read this story, since they know each others. I'm working on part 11.2 now.

Action, blood and soon the Grande Finale.

At 11/1/05 08:53 AM, FBIpolux wrote: Action, blood and soon the Grande Finale.

If you really want to Stephen King it up, you need raunchy sex scenes.

Raunchy sex scenes = stupid.

DON'T SUCCUMB TO YOUR MALE INSTINCTS, FBI!

At 11/1/05 09:13 AM, DancingTurkeyGod wrote: Raunchy sex scenes = stupid.

But that's King's style.
He said he was trying to emulate King's style!

At 11/1/05 09:18 AM, Zerok wrote: But that's King's style.
He said he was trying to emulate King's style!

Doesn't mean he has to copy his style word per word, scene by scene....
What happened to a bit of originality?

Anyways, a raunchy sex scene would just not fit into the storyline.

At 11/1/05 09:21 AM, DancingTurkeyGod wrote: Doesn't mean he has to copy his style word per word, scene by scene....

I never said that.
He said he was trying to be Stephen King-esque, as in action and suspence.
Sexuality is actually a theme that King uses a LOT, and he uses it well.
The book Gerald's Game was 100% based on sexuality.

What happened to a bit of originality?

If sex is unoriginal, shoot me now.

Anyways, a raunchy sex scene would just not fit into the storyline.

If he was a good writer, he could incorporate it flawlessly. Consider it a challenge, FBI.

At 11/1/05 09:24 AM, Zerok wrote: If he was a good writer, he could incorporate it flawlessly. Consider it a challenge, FBI.

I could have inserted it already, in part 11.1.

:)

At 11/1/05 09:28 AM, FBIpolux wrote: I could have inserted it already, in part 11.1.

But I already read that one.
There was, at most, some slight insinuation.
Insinuations aren't scenes. =P

At 11/1/05 09:24 AM, Zerok wrote: If sex is unoriginal, shoot me now.

Because it's so overdone nowadays, I'd say it is. Doesn't mean people don't enjoy it though...

At 11/1/05 09:28 AM, FBIpolux wrote: I could have inserted it already, in part 11.1.

Don't even think about it....
It was a great part WITHOUT the sex. I'd prefer my character not to be practically a pedophile...

At 11/1/05 09:33 AM, DancingTurkeyGod wrote: Because it's so overdone nowadays, I'd say it is. Doesn't mean people don't enjoy it though...

Good ol' porn.

But if the writer uses sex tactfully, it can enhance the plot. Add depth to the characters. That sort of thing. It doesn't have to be strictly jack-off material.

At 11/1/05 09:40 AM, Zerok wrote: But if the writer uses sex tactfully, it can enhance the plot. Add depth to the characters. That sort of thing. It doesn't have to be strictly jack-off material.

Oh come on, we all know that's exactly what you're looking for.