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At 3/2/05 04:03 PM, Myst_Williams wrote: review

Thanks for the review dude :) I really appreciate them. I didn't really like I don't belong much anyway, I thought it was kinda cheesy too >_<

At 3/1/05 09:43 PM, deathtuna wrote: Not Afriad
Oh how come I slept
And while I wept
Let her go.

This it annoyed me for some reason not sure why but it did............................. :-\

Part from that nice job ^_^

And now ladies and gentlemen my take on the song that tigger from Winie the pooh sings.

The wonderful thing about wizards
is that wizards are always in trend.
The hats are really pointy!
And their staffs have knobs on the end!
Their lizards toads ravens and snakes,
are fun fun fun fun fun!
but the wonderful thing about wizards
is that there is more than one!

yes I am that bored! Enjoy ^_^

At 3/2/05 04:51 PM, Myst_Williams wrote: I am a frequent there if it help you any i nyour decision. Coop seems to have joined in lately as well. ^_^

Well, there was all this 'This happened in Level up' on the Tolkien Club. Eventually, I decided to drop in and say hi and Congrats.

At 3/3/05 03:00 PM, Coop83 wrote: Well, there was all this 'This happened in Level up' on the Tolkien Club. Eventually, I decided to drop in and say hi and Congrats.

Ahh, i see why you joined. I am not a fan of the LUL so much. I am more interested in helping people out and finding out my stats etc. I jump in there every once and a while though. Did you see my massive catch-up from last weekend?

why has my little take on the tigger song from winnie the pooh been ignored :-( I was quite proud of that.....obviously its crap.

<turns emo and cuts throat>

At 3/3/05 03:47 PM, -Manic- wrote: why has my little take on the tigger song from winnie the pooh been ignored :-( I was quite proud of that.....obviously its crap.

<turns emo and cuts throat>

That poem was really good and funny. What chu talkin' 'bout, foo'!

At 3/3/05 03:47 PM, -Manic- wrote: <turns emo and cuts throat>

I love how fucking ignorant you are. You obviously don't know shit about emo, so don't fucking stereotype.

At 3/3/05 06:41 PM, -Emo wrote: I love how fucking ignorant you are. You obviously don't know shit about emo, so don't fucking stereotype.

It is a joke Kirk, nah bother. I dont want any fighting in here so lets forget it and post/read lit. Anyone reading any good books lately by chance?

myst I got your4 story but I kinda got inspiration from the "Crow" its going to be like that type of story and I'm going to post it chapter by chapter I only have to first chapter right now it will probably take me awhile to finish it I may never finish it but I will post the first chapter tommorow I'm not done yet just a few more things I have to do

UPDATE
The story I've been working on's Prologue is finished. Since I wrote it in school by hand, I'm going to transfer it onto my computer, then uploading it to the WG for reviews.
From your favorite friend,
WithoutCease
(I've decided not to change back to ImmortalDarkness after a while. WithoutCease sounds better and ImmortalDarkness makes me sound like a goth. Which I'm not.)

At 3/3/05 12:13 PM, -Manic- wrote:

At 3/1/05 09:43 PM, deathtuna wrote: Not Afriad
Oh how come I slept
And while I wept
Let her go.

This it annoyed me for some reason not sure why but it did............................. :-\

Part from that nice job ^_^

Thankyou for taking the time to respond. IM not sure, but the way you quoted my post, it looks like you think Not Afraid is part of the stanza, it isnt. Or maybe its just how the quote came out. Thanks anyway

Here's my story. Please read and review!

prologue

___The only thing I heard were the echoes of my footsteps in the empty school. My last steps inside. I had just gotten out of the principal’s office. I was flunking out of high school.
___While I was in there he told me what I feared would come. I first received the omen when I found out no matter how hard I tried, I couldn’t even get a D.
___I was waiting in his office. Sitting down on the cushioned seat, looking at the hardwood 70’s wall. An orange shag rug was on the floor. The secretary said, “He’ll be seeing you, now.” She was being blunt with me. I hate it when people are blunt with me.
___The principal’s office was more 70’s than the waiting room. This guy is a friggin’ It had the same wall and rug as the previous room, but instead of chairs there were bean bags. All of his things were on a low, Japanese-style table. A typewriter, jumbled up papers, and a coffee cup.
___The walls were unusually clean, like he sprayed them with Pine Sol or something. He had pictures of Tie-Die peace signs on it, too. I wouldn’t be at all surprised if he pulled out a bong and said, “Wanna hit, man?”
___The man was tall and bulk, with a big brown afro and a bushy brown moustache. Unfortunately, he wasn’t the “shaggadelic” carefree guy I thought he would be. “Ah, Mr. Sanders, come in,” he said in his low, stern, voice. “Now to address the matter at hand,” he said. He reached into his suitcase. Here comes the bong, I thought with a grin. But the grin was quickly washed away when he instead pulled out reading glasses. I’m screwed, I thought grimly.
___He opened his filing cabinet, which just seemed to appear out of nowhere, and fingered through the files until he found a certain one. He picked it up and put it on his table. He put his reading glasses on before going any farther. Opening the folder, I saw a picture of myself, goofing off at Photo Day. I wondered if he thought I shouldn’t be laughing now.
___“Glenn Sanders,” he said, “I see that it has been quite a task for you to maintain passing grades.”
___I nodded my head in shame. It was the worst kind of shame. The kind that you knew you ruined your life.
___He started again, “But it seems for your last three Sophomore years, you could not obtain them.”
___I knew what was coming.
___“You have nothing else to amount to in High School. Your life will lead you nowhere, and there’s no way you can make up for it. The only other time I would like to see you in this school is if you are working as a janitor, or proved me wrong. Both of which,” he had to add on, “I doubt you will even get close to being.”
___I rose, fighting back my tears, and mumbled my farewell. I now knew I’d never amount to anything, period. My live was on a downward slope before, but shit.

Hey Myst, I finally got myself to enter your writer's realm. I myself want to get into screenplay proffesionally after college. Maybe ill share some of my work here. i need to work on my grammhare though. :)

At 3/3/05 07:41 PM, Myst_Williams wrote:

At 3/3/05 06:41 PM, -Emo wrote: I love how fucking ignorant you are. You obviously don't know shit about emo, so don't fucking stereotype.

It is a joke Kirk, nah bother. I dont want any fighting in here so lets forget it and post/read lit. Anyone reading any good books lately by chance?

Sorry, I just don't like it when people do shit like that, I hate stereotypes.

At 3/3/05 08:51 PM, WithoutCease wrote: Here's my story. Please read and review!

I liked it, but it definitly needs to be re-read and edited more. There were some grammar issues, word choice problems. I say, get someone, a friend, and have them read it aloud to you, or read it aloud to yourself, and see if it flows.

At 3/3/05 09:39 PM, deathtuna wrote: I liked it, but it definitly needs to be re-read and edited more. There were some grammar issues, word choice problems. I say, get someone, a friend, and have them read it aloud to you, or read it aloud to yourself, and see if it flows.

Thank you for the review. And I thought I used a couple of repetitive words, but that's it. Nonetheless I'll get someone to read it.

At 3/3/05 07:57 PM, repent_i_will_not wrote: myst I got your4 story but I kinda got inspiration from the "Crow" ...

I look forward to reading it. ^_^

At 3/3/05 09:00 PM, -noir- wrote: Hey Myst, I finally got myself to enter your writer's realm. I myself want to get into screenplay proffesionally after college. Maybe ill share some of my work here. i need to work on my grammhare though. :)

Hey man, i too want to write professionally and i hope you do post some of your stuff. I used to have a hard time with grammar also, but if i can find the time to sit down and spend an hour editing... i usually can demolish all my grammar mistakes to few or even none.

At 3/3/05 09:25 PM, -Emo wrote: Sorry, I just don't like it when people do shit like that, I hate stereotypes.

Understandable, i just don't want any flame wars in here. It is a positive enviroment and Manic is a good guy with a sarcastic humour; i am sure he meant nothing by it, but as a joke.

Could I join this place? I have some stories, and poems. Maybe I could help with others stories too. Just wondering if I can join up.

At 3/3/05 06:41 PM, -Emo wrote:

At 3/3/05 03:47 PM, -Manic- wrote: <turns emo and cuts throat>

I love how fucking ignorant you are. You obviously don't know shit about emo, so don't fucking stereotype.

shit sorry man! Didn't mean to cause any offence by it. It was just a joke. If I knew I was gonna piss you off by doing it I wouldn't have done it. Sory again.

At 3/3/05 08:33 PM, deathtuna wrote:
Thankyou for taking the time to respond. IM not sure, but the way you quoted my post, it looks like you think Not Afraid is part of the stanza, it isnt. Or maybe its just how the quote came out. Thanks anyway

Its just the way the quote came out. I know that the not afraid bit wasn't part of that stanza.

At 3/4/05 03:24 AM, Quisty wrote: Could I join this place? I have some stories, and poems. Maybe I could help with others stories too. Just wondering if I can join up.

welcome aboard. Please feel free to psot anything you happen to have handy if you wnat it reviewed and if you wnat their are a few bits an dpieces on the last page that you're wleocme tor eview aswell.

At 3/3/05 09:00 PM, -noir- wrote: Maybe ill share some of my work here. i need to work on my grammhare though. :)

And your spelling could use a little work, also. j/k

Welcome to you and Quisty, -noir-

As you said about writing pro, I'm looking to that avenue as well, so that makes three of us (at least) If you feel like passing comment on my work, it starts around page 20 (From Little Acorns, a fantasy tale about a group of friends...)

At 3/4/05 05:17 AM, Coop83 wrote: Welcome to you and Quisty, -noir-

Thanks for letting me into this group. I needed a new place to write my stories.

I would be honored if I could join you guys in the Writer's Guild.

I myself am an experienced writer who did really well in English in High School.

You can check out a sample of some of the work I've done at www.adgbc.com/bbs in the Prose and Poetry section.

I'd like to join so I could further improve my writing technique for creating lengthy, but epic movie-like novels. Though I haven't had the energy to get around to finishing some of my older works, I'm nonetheless determined to better myself and to contribute to the community.

I'm glad to see that there are like-minded writers of fanfiction and I would be honored to join you all. Can I please join?

At 3/4/05 09:24 AM, ShadowBaofu wrote: I'm glad to see that there are like-minded writers of fanfiction and I would be honored to join you all. Can I please join?

God will you stop fallowing me around? Each new writting club I am in you go and join it. Why do you join when I join? GRRR

Just nevermind about being in this club then. It seems to have been a bad idea now.

At 3/4/05 09:37 AM, Quisty wrote:

At 3/4/05 09:24 AM, ShadowBaofu wrote: I'm glad to see that there are like-minded writers of fanfiction and I would be honored to join you all. Can I please join?

God will you stop fallowing me around? Each new writting club I am in you go and join it. Why do you join when I join? GRRR

Just nevermind about being in this club then. It seems to have been a bad idea now.

Hahaha, didn't mean to muscle you out, hon. But I have roughly the same interests with big differences. Besides, this was the biggest writing club close by and it was a coincidence that you actually wanted to join.

Oh well, not my place to decide for you what you wanna do.

At 3/4/05 09:43 AM, ShadowBaofu wrote: Hahaha, didn't mean to muscle you out, hon. But I have roughly the same interests with big differences. Besides, this was the biggest writing club close by and it was a coincidence that you actually wanted to join.

Eww don't call me hon. Just stay in this club, and I will be 1000 miles away from it now. Your gross. You have no right to call me hon. We arn't even friends. Your just my crazy X boyfriend who seems to now be fallowing me around lately. Anyway, this will be my last post here. Too creeped out to stay now. Thanks for letting me be here for 5 seconds, lol.

At 3/4/05 09:47 AM, Quisty wrote:

At 3/4/05 09:43 AM, ShadowBaofu wrote: Hahaha, didn't mean to muscle you out, hon. But I have roughly the same interests with big differences. Besides, this was the biggest writing club close by and it was a coincidence that you actually wanted to join.

Eww don't call me hon. Just stay in this club, and I will be 1000 miles away from it now. Your gross. You have no right to call me hon. We arn't even friends. Your just my crazy X boyfriend who seems to now be fallowing me around lately. Anyway, this will be my last post here. Too creeped out to stay now. Thanks for letting me be here for 5 seconds, lol.

Believe whatever you want to believe, but I'm just minding my own business, which has absolutely nothing to do with you.

As far as I'm concerned, you dont even exist. You're just a myth, a story of fiction that never happened in my life.

Now, don't irritate the thread any further.

Ahem. this palce is for discussing writing and posting stories not for you two to have awhat seems like a lovers tiff. You are both welcome to join and if weitherof you decide to leave just cause theother one is in here then it really is stupid.
This is the inertenet neither of you are actually in contact with each whislt you're in the thread so stop arguing please!

IT may sound harsh ut Im pretty sure that no one in here really cares about what has gone on between you so pelase don't discuss it here. Take it to email,AIM or MSN if you must but pelase kindly drop it in here.

now then. Like I said you are both welcome to join if you wish to. We are never going to turn down members but if you do decide to stay then PLEASE stop the bickering ok?

Now then why don't we alla ct like good little boys and girls and playnicely in the sandbox :P

At 3/4/05 09:24 AM, ShadowBaofu wrote: I would be honored if I could join you guys in the Writer's Guild.

Like butter wouldn't melt in your mouth.

I myself am an experienced writer who did really well in English in High School.

So, most of us have done well at English, otherwise we would not be writers. This is not such a great achievement, when you think about it.

You can check out a sample of some of the work I've done at www.adgbc.com/bbs in the Prose and Poetry section.

I don't like to sound lazy, but post your own work here, so we can see it. I don't like having to trawl through pages of stuff, to find what I'm looking for, plus the people on here tend to read stuff that's posted rather than go clicking links.

I'd like to join so I could further improve my writing technique for creating lengthy, but epic movie-like novels. Though I haven't had the energy to get around to finishing some of my older works, I'm nonetheless determined to better myself and to contribute to the community.

Sounds good, I'd at least like to see some of your work, before I make my mind up (and I'm sure the rest of the Guild has a similar mindset.)

I'm glad to see that there are like-minded writers of fanfiction and I would be honored to join you all. Can I please join?

Well, if you can cut out the fighting with Quisty and post some work once in a while and maybe even review some stuff, welcome aboard.

Quisty, I don't want you to just come in and then Leave because you claim you're being followed. If the worst comes to the worst, ignore him. I'd like to read some of your stories. (Plus maybe offer you a job babysitting my Jedi cousin. She's only 5)