Newgrounds.com — Everything, By Everyone.

---

At 2/28/05 11:57 PM, -Emo wrote: Okay, I had written this gigantic response that was about 10 words off from being past the post size limit, but when I clicked post, my fucking mozilla CRASHED!

Ouch, damn, i would have liked to hear what you wanted to say. Not much can be done though.

So anyway, I'm greatly appreciative that you took the time to read, and respond to my poem dude. I always enjoy reading what people have to say about my writings, may it be good, or bad.

And just to note one more time. My comments were good, i really liked your piece. Please don't get the wrong idea... i am just articulate... ^_^

I'm just going to ask that if you can, whenever I post a song/poem, which isn't TOO often, that you could simply give me a response and/or critique on what you thought of it.

Will do. Done deal.

---

Myst, with your light aura and all, shouldn't your profile pic be blue?

---

At 3/1/05 03:46 PM, ImmortalDarkness wrote: Myst, with your light aura and all, shouldn't your profile pic be blue?

Hmm, when i click 'View Your Profile' it is blue, weird. When i treid to upload my red sig, i didnt think it worked, but it seems it works for everyone else but me. I will fix that, i hope. Thanks for pointing that out though. ^_^

---

Ladies and gentlemen wlecome to manic street preachers one minute wonder poetyr corner.

Believe?

Do you believe in angels?
Do you believe in death?
Do you believe in illness?
Do you believe in stress?
Do you think the world is ending?
Do you think the end is near?
Is there anything to live for?
Is everything to fear?

Am I just a stranger?
Am I just a man?
Am I another person that’s,
part of the holy scam?

I see the world for what it is.
I see the taints and lies.
I see the Weavers web,
That corrupts the pure and free,
I feel the pain and suffering,
Of men and women like me.

I believed miracles
And I believe in fate.
But these days there I nothing left!
The apocalypse has a set date!

---

At 3/1/05 04:47 PM, Manic_streetpreacher wrote: Believe?

Maybe, let me read.

Do you believe in angels?

I'd like to.

Do you believe in death?

Obviously.

Do you believe in illness?

Um... maybe a metaphor i am not catching, but yes.

Do you believe in stress?

lol, i feel it all the time. :P Not really, im pretty stress free to be honest.

Do you think the world is ending?

Yes, humanity is on a downward spiral.

Do you think the end is near?

No, not my lifetime, but near as in not too many generatiosn after my own. Give it a few hundred years.

Is there anything to live for?

Everything is to live for.

Is everything to fear?

No, nothing is to be feared, foe fear is as figment as reality.

Am I just a stranger?

Kinda sort... i know you via internet.

Am I just a man?

Not sure? Hermaphrodite?

Am I another person that’s,
part of the holy scam?

Everyone is. Religion is whack...

I see the world for what it is.

I doubt it. You... enlightened? Oh, you meant in the negative sense. ; )

I see the taints and lies.

As do i.

I see the Weavers web,
That corrupts the pure and free,
I feel the pain and suffering,
Of men and women like me.

Women like you?

I believed miracles

Meh, i believe we make our miracles. Thus not making them miracles per say.

And I believe in fate.

We create our fate too...

But these days there I nothing left!

Love, Passion, Expression, Wisdom... shall i go on? ^_^

The apocalypse has a set date!

I doubt it... but probably subconciously in our minds, we know it is true.

Anyway, sorry for joking around with it, i was bored and thought that'd be fun. Anyway, on a serious note: I liked the poem. It was interesting and deep. Really did make me think even though my answers were scarce at times and even sarcastic, but it had a lot of meaning and i enjoyed the poem. Keep'em coming. ^_^

---

At 3/1/05 05:11 PM, Myst_Williams wrote:

Am I just a man?

Not sure? Hermaphrodite?

I see the Weavers web,
That corrupts the pure and free,
I feel the pain and suffering,
Of men and women like me.

Women like you?

Myst, that review was hilarious. Lol. You're a bad man, but damn its funny.

---

I'm in one of my...not-so-good/love song moods....BLAH

only

knockin on your door
im waiting for an answer
I hope I didn't miss you
The world rests on my shoulders
with all the hearts that break
I need to see you

only we can find
what we're looking for
only we can see
what we need to see
and only we
can find the cure
for our loneliness

now look away
dont forget about me
i'll be standing there
waiting for the day
that you come to me

only we can find
what we're looking for
only we can see
what we need to see
and only we
can find the cure
for our loneliness

you give me a reason to believe...

---

here's another:

I don't belong

you're so fucking mean
so cold
why do you treat us so wrong
everything is going wrong
there's nowhere left for me to run
I am so scared to turn around
to see what I've left behind
The past could come back to haunt me
I don't want to see it now

you're tears fall on me
all the fear
i think we need to stop this
need to stop hiding

something is wrong
we can't hide anymore
we're taking to long
to stand up for what is right

I'm sick of all my fear
I'm tired of every night
I spend alone
without anyone to help

something is wrong
we can't hide anymore
we're taking to long
to stand up for what is right

I don't belong.

---

Not Afriad

I made a lanaguage to describe her
Undying beauty and grace
Tale told, now its over
And I try to forget her face.
How soft, and kind it is,
Stirring in me these feelings.
My attempts fail and miss,
Now hesitant for healing.

Oh how come I slept
And while I wept
Let her go.
I long to have kept her,
But now I'll never know
What could have been,
and when I get another chance,
I won't be afraid.

For I worship my flower
With undying devotion
Ne'er will I tremble and cower
For such a notion
Is ludicrous, as this,
This is true love.
And whom I have dreamt of
Shall be raised to the stars,
Whom shine from afar,
and whos beauty is pure.
_________________________________________________________________
A poem.

---

At 3/1/05 05:27 PM, ImmortalDarkness wrote: Myst, that review was hilarious. Lol. You're a bad man, but damn its funny.

Lol I agotta agree that was actually funny lol.

Thanks for the review though :P

Might try and post another one later tpday if I cna be bothered.

Your favourite street preacher

Manic.

---

At 3/2/05 12:39 PM, CMOT_Dibbler wrote: Manic.

Tell me, Manic, is the name change a temporary thing, or do you want us to start calling you 'Throat'?

---

At 3/2/05 03:23 PM, Coop83 wrote: Tell me, Manic, is the name change a temporary thing, or do you want us to start calling you 'Throat'?

Meh I dunno. i may keep it at this but that would involve getting a new sig and I can't be bothrered to make one so it will probably only be a temporary thing but meh this is me so if I don';t change it back by the end of the month then im keeping it :P

Now we have that sorted. Care for a sausage in a bun Coop?

---

What do you guys think of my name change?

---

At 3/2/05 03:57 PM, WithoutCease wrote: What do you guys think of my name change?

Not as cool as mine <insert shades Msn Emitcom here> Nothign ebats the power of the dibbler :P

---

At 3/1/05 06:22 PM, -Emo wrote: only

Only what? As much as it is awkward and i don't like it... don't change it, because it already has be intrigued. ^_^

knockin on your door
im waiting for an answer
I hope I didn't miss you
The world rests on my shoulders
with all the hearts that break
I need to see you

Great start, but last line seems awkward.

2 stanza

Great stanza!

stanze 3

Nice flow, best stanza so far...

you give me a reason to believe...

Another nice one liner ending... i think i told you this before, but i do the same. I feel it is the perfect way (at most times [exceot sonnets]) to clean up an ending and restate your poetic 'thesis' as one could say. Good poem.

At 3/1/05 06:30 PM, -Emo wrote: I don't belong

Cheesy title.

Opening stanza

Very good, but the last two lines dont flow with the rest of the stanza in my mind. Very, very good though.

After Note: Best stanza of the whole poem... well written while some of the rest of the poem is not.

Stanza 2

Cheesy...

Stanza 3

Good, nothing special, but good.

I'm sick of all my fear
I'm tired of every night
I spend alone
without anyone to help

Damn, this would have been the perfect time to throw in a metaphor and intrigue me, but it just keeps going bleh and cheey-ish. It is not bad at all, by all means, it is averagly written, but this poem (ballad), thus far, is far below some of you others and really is quite monotone.

I don't belong.

Clean ending though, just this poem was all too cheesy and what really eats me, is that it was not expressed originally. If you are going to write about cliche topics, you have to be original or they turn from cliche to cheesy. Get what i mean? One of your worse, but still decent. I liked it at times, but at other times i just wanted to finish reading. Sorry, just giving you my honesty.

***************************************************************************
****************************

At 3/2/05 03:23 PM, Coop83 wrote: Tell me, Manic, is the name change a temporary thing, or do you want us to start calling you 'Throat'?

Manic is going through that Identity versus Confusion stage of Erikson's stages of moral development. Either way Manic, you need to pick a name and stick with it or i am gonna call you Fox no matter what your name is. If i were you, just put i as 'Manic' - it just sounds cool. ^_^

---

At 3/2/05 04:03 PM, Myst_Williams wrote: Manic is going through that Identity versus Confusion stage of Erikson's stages of moral development. Either way Manic, you need to pick a name and stick with it or i am gonna call you Fox no matter what your name is. If i were you, just put i as 'Manic' - it just sounds cool. ^_^

Me in an idnetity crisis? What ever gave you that idea?

Actualyl i like that die aof just having manic as my name........,.time for a name change ^_^

---

At 3/2/05 03:37 PM, CMOT_Dibbler wrote: Now we have that sorted. Care for a sausage in a bun Coop?

No thanks, Throat. I've just eaten.

BTW, for those of you not in the know, CMOT in Dibbler's name stands for Cut My Own Throat (Hence me calling him 'Throat') See Discworld for more details of this wonderful subject.

---

At 3/2/05 04:06 PM, Coop83 wrote:

At 3/2/05 03:37 PM, CMOT_Dibbler wrote: Now we have that sorted. Care for a sausage in a bun Coop?

No thanks, Throat. I've just eaten.

are you sure? i cna offer you the best prices around. How about a dragon detector then?

It somehow doesn't have the sameaffect now I changed my alias again :-( I think myst is right! I am having an identity crisis!

BTW, for those of you not in the know, CMOT in Dibbler's name stands for Cut My Own Throat (Hence me calling him 'Throat') See Discworld for more details of this wonderful subject.

Greatets characte rin the whole series of books bar one! Gaspode the wonder dog!

---

and wth this post I do cropss the threshhold of the 4000 posts mark....wow..........I cna stop whoring myslef in general now.

---

At 3/2/05 04:06 PM, Coop83 wrote: BTW, for those of you not in the know, CMOT in Dibbler's name stands for Cut My Own Throat (Hence me calling him 'Throat') See Discworld for more details of this wonderful subject.

Thanks tips!

At 3/2/05 04:26 PM, -Manic- wrote: and wth this post I do cropss the threshhold of the 4000 posts mark....wow..........I cna stop whoring myslef in general now.

lol! I havnt posted in general much at all latly. Maybe twice in the last couple weeks. My post count is respectable though. ^_^

---

At 3/2/05 04:30 PM, Myst_Williams wrote: lol! I havnt posted in general much at all latly. Maybe twice in the last couple weeks. My post count is respectable though. ^_^

lol I normally post in general a few time in a day but today IVe posted like 10 tiems in it O_o Im a total post whore at the moment............and I'm still in the middle of an identity crisis lmao.

---

At 3/2/05 04:26 PM, -Manic- wrote: and wth this post I do cropss the threshhold of the 4000 posts mark....wow..........I cna stop whoring myslef in general now.

Tell it to the Level up lounge in Wi/Ht.
I'll congratulate you on it, tomorrow.

---

At 3/2/05 04:36 PM, Coop83 wrote: Tell it to the Level up lounge in Wi/Ht.
I'll congratulate you on it, tomorrow.

I could do but....................that involves going into Wi/ht and that palce scares me :S full of strange people that are higher level than me and know sutff I don't :S

Im in such a weird mood right now..............bah i need some sleep!

---

At 3/2/05 04:44 PM, -Manic- wrote: I could do but....................that involves going into Wi/ht and that palce scares me :S full of strange people that are higher level than me and know sutff I don't :S

Wrong. The people there are very nice.

---

At 3/2/05 04:45 PM, WithoutCease wrote: Wrong. The people there are very nice.

oh...well maybe I will pop in.....................

---

I am a frequent there if it help you any i nyour decision. Coop seems to have joined in lately as well. ^_^

---

At 3/2/05 04:51 PM, Myst_Williams wrote: I am a frequent there if it help you any i nyour decision. Coop seems to have joined in lately as well. ^_^

I think I would be in there, if I weren't much n00bish.

So, does anybody have the time for the WOR anymore? I tried signing up for the Immortal's RP, but it's much too confusing for me.

---

At 3/2/05 04:57 PM, WithoutCease wrote: So, does anybody have the time for the WOR anymore?

I barely have enough time to keep up with posts in here and the other clubs i am in. So not me anyway, this summer i hope to start it anew with a new world etc. Before then, if you can get 4 or so others to keep it going, i am willing to be a re-occuring character and just pop into the action when i can as a bad guy to keep things interesteing.

I tried signing up for the Immortal's RP, but it's much too confusing for me.

I was apart of that for a few months, but it became hard to keep up once i started getting busyer and what not. They are so deep into it, you will probably never catch up... : P

Time to go work on my essay again. : P

---

Oh yeah, I was deciding my high school courses today. When I hit sophomore year I will be able to enroll for a class called "Writer's Workshop." I'll do that for that year and then for my senior year again.
I also decided that I was going to continue off of a novel I started a couple months ago.
Aaah, that Jack Gantos inspires me.

---

What does anyone think of my poem on the last page?