You are totally right, the pose is the main thing why i kinda hate that drawing, and i really like that pose you did there, but i was trying to get a pose that looked that was in movement. I removed the linework because at that point i was trying to get a "painterly" feel, i was doing it all wrong tho, but my latest two artworks are more close to that style, i think.
Yeah the face is bad too, she was originally trying to catch something with her left hand, or casting a spell, but at the end i removed it because the reflective light looked wrong
True, my aproach making that piece was a disaster, i did the characters, then added that shading that looks cool, the problem is that while i was doing the shading i had in mind making them look like the models you see in magazines, with the ironic feel of the skulls in their head, and with the background i came up with the idea that they were some kinda demons of death or something, and put them in that background, i didn't realize it didn't fit until it was too late, i didn't want to change it back again.
Thanks for the reviews guys, you are awesome.