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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-07 17:17:27 Reply

Wait, these are dogs?


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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-07 20:26:28 Reply

Perhaps your dialogue could be a little more conversational. I can guess the diamond came from a diamond store and that possession of said diamond, without a receipt, would get one "hauled off" to jail. Less talk and more illustrations to.. illustrate a point seems more comic appropriate.

I've included what I had in mind:

At 1/2/14 11:13 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote:
At 1/2/14 11:08 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote: Page 3 is up! Did some changes with the text and stuff.
My fucking mistake, I wrote bank instead of jewlery store, here's the revise text version.

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-07 21:43:02 Reply

At 1/7/14 08:26 PM, maficmelody wrote: Perhaps your dialogue could be a little more conversational. I can guess the diamond came from a diamond store and that possession of said diamond, without a receipt, would get one "hauled off" to jail. Less talk and more illustrations to.. illustrate a point seems more comic appropriate.

I've included what I had in mind:

All I can say about this is that at least you tried to help me on some points of the comic. So yeah, thanks.

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-08 21:54:44 Reply

Page five is finally here! And it seems omega dog has been revealed....sort of.
Enjoy!

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-09 16:19:49 Reply

It's already posted, page five!

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-09 18:18:28 Reply

At 1/9/14 04:19 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote: It's already posted, page five!

Why is the cat happy and the dog erm shocked?


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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-09 18:20:41 Reply

Nope second check... cat shocked dog happy? I dont really understand why a cat is helping a dog now that I think of it.

Thanks,

- Zane.


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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-09 18:23:07 Reply

At 1/9/14 06:20 PM, ZaneKade wrote: I dont really understand why a cat is helping a dog now that I think of it.

In the future the dog/cat apartheid has been dissolved.

Nelson Mandela's legacy lives on.


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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-09 18:45:26 Reply

At 1/9/14 06:20 PM, ZaneKade wrote: Nope second check... cat shocked dog happy? I dont really understand why a cat is helping a dog now that I think of it.

Thanks,

- Zane.

The dog isn't supposed to be smiling, he's shocked. Sorry if it looks happy to you.

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-09 18:49:52 Reply

At 1/9/14 06:45 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote:
At 1/9/14 06:20 PM, ZaneKade wrote: Nope second check... cat shocked dog happy? I dont really understand why a cat is helping a dog now that I think of it.

Thanks,

- Zane.
The dog isn't supposed to be smiling, he's shocked. Sorry if it looks happy to you.

Oh ok. I wasnt having a go I just thought he looked happy. Because well if that dog isnt wagging his tail in excitement from that picture then ill give you a biscuit lol. But on the other hand that would of made a great twist to the story... Why IS the dog happy? hmm collusion amongst thieves!

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- Zane.


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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-10 02:38:13 Reply

At 1/8/14 09:54 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote: Page five is finally here! And it seems omega dog has been revealed....sort of.
Enjoy!

black guy dog?

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-10 18:30:24 Reply

At 1/10/14 02:38 AM, cuteboy99 wrote:
At 1/8/14 09:54 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote: Page five is finally here! And it seems omega dog has been revealed....sort of.
Enjoy!
black guy dog?

Which one?

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-10 22:49:36 Reply

At 1/10/14 06:30 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote:
At 1/10/14 02:38 AM, cuteboy99 wrote:
At 1/8/14 09:54 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote: Page five is finally here! And it seems omega dog has been revealed....sort of.
Enjoy!
black guy dog?
Which one?

black one in page 5

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-10 22:58:32 Reply

At 1/8/14 09:54 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote: Page five is finally here! And it seems omega dog has been revealed....sort of.
Enjoy!

this guy!

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-10 23:52:19 Reply

At 1/10/14 10:58 PM, cuteboy99 wrote:
At 1/8/14 09:54 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote: Page five is finally here! And it seems omega dog has been revealed....sort of.
Enjoy!
this guy!

Awww, yes, It's supposed to be a sihloutte.

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-12 22:37:54 Reply

Sorry for the wait, page six is finally up! Is omega dog about to be shot?

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-12 22:42:56 Reply

Sorry if it looks dark, that was the PNG version, here's the JPEG version.

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-17 19:03:10 Reply

Sorry I have you all waiting for me, but I hope to post page seven today or tomorrow, I promise.

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-18 01:31:57 Reply

Sorry for the wait, page seven is up!

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-18 15:02:45 Reply

At 1/18/14 01:31 AM, RayLeeWorld wrote: Sorry for the wait, page seven is up!

I think you might want to treat this like it's not a big deal. So far, this is poorly written, slow, and plain ugly. Maybe take some writing classes?


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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-18 16:26:05 Reply

At 1/18/14 03:02 PM, SicPanNG wrote: I think you might want to treat this like it's not a big deal. So far, this is poorly written, slow, and plain ugly. Maybe take some writing classes?

How about this:

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-18 16:28:22 Reply

Strong silhouette, very nice.

At 1/18/14 01:31 AM, RayLeeWorld wrote: Sorry for the wait, page seven is up!
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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-18 16:44:09 Reply

At 1/18/14 04:26 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote:
At 1/18/14 03:02 PM, SicPanNG wrote: I think you might want to treat this like it's not a big deal. So far, this is poorly written, slow, and plain ugly. Maybe take some writing classes?
How about this:

I feel like if we ignore this, it'll go away- haha. So far, everyone's really given you a chance, and some constructive criticism, and you acknowledge that their points are valid, but completely ignore them, and move on. The art forum is a place to hone your skills, and amend your work, not somewhere to dump your sloppy anthropomorphic animal comic, and pretend that everyone's on the edge of their seats waiting for your next installment. It's a community of people with similar interests, not solely consumers. That's what the art portal is for, publication as personal as you want it to be- bleh- arrogance...


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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-18 17:21:49 Reply

At 1/18/14 04:44 PM, gween123 wrote:

:That's what the art portal is for, publication as personal as you want it to be- bleh- arrogance...

Agreed. :)


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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-18 17:23:55 Reply

At 1/18/14 04:26 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote:
At 1/18/14 03:02 PM, SicPanNG wrote: I think you might want to treat this like it's not a big deal. So far, this is poorly written, slow, and plain ugly. Maybe take some writing classes?
How about this:

Well, I tried. If you don't want to here what we say about your disgrace of a "comic," then don't put it on here.


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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-18 17:31:35 Reply

At 1/18/14 04:44 PM, gween123 wrote:
The art forum is a place to hone your skills, and amend your work, not somewhere to dump your sloppy anthropomorphic animal comic, and pretend that everyone's on the edge of their seats waiting for your next installment. It's a community of people with similar interests, not solely consumers. That's what the art portal is for, publication as personal as you want it to be- bleh- arrogance...

Just shut up and leave me alone, let me do what I want, whether it's crappy or not. So yeah, shut up!

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-18 20:39:30 Reply

At 1/18/14 05:31 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote: Just shut up and leave me alone, let me do what I want, whether it's crappy or not. So yeah, shut up!

I'd advice you to stop showing your comic to the public if you cant take critique, because i agree.


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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-18 22:11:44 Reply

At 1/18/14 08:39 PM, Flowers10 wrote:
At 1/18/14 05:31 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote: Just shut up and leave me alone, let me do what I want, whether it's crappy or not. So yeah, shut up!
I'd advice you to stop showing your comic to the public if you cant take critique, because i agree.

Well, I don't feel like getting critiques, so I might post this somewhere else.

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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-19 05:39:25 Reply

At 1/18/14 10:11 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote: Well, I don't feel like getting critiques, so I might post this somewhere else.

It's not really like you have a choice if you display your work in public places people will have an opinion about it, and will often voice it. Even if the work is good people might say bad things about it.
The art forum however is full of artists who see things from a different point of view, and you might get some more usefull comments. But they might also be harsher to take since they are more often right...
By knowing what you are doing wrong you can improve these things.

So yeah, keep your drawings to yourself if you don't want anyone saying bad things about it.
Or just take it like a man(no homo).


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Response to Omega dog(A short comic) 2014-01-19 07:52:45 Reply

Leave omega dog alone! I love him! Keep posting!

Dunt liston tew da h8t0rz. they jelly cuz dey cant maek shit