At 4/24/13 06:18 PM, LemonCrush wrote:
ABOUT & MAKING OF
Conversation by Purple Flowers
Album review time.
Your voice was cheesier than Rick Astley. I suggest you practice your tonality.. Work on emotion through your voice. Just sounded like a prepubescent kid with a trembly voice going all off key.. If you can't dish vocal complexity, don't try to. Do enough to where you're confident on your sound.. Even if the cost of simplicity... It's better than deficiency.
The Should I Call? Song... I don't know what you were trying to express here.. Because I don't feel it.
Really short songs consecutively after this... I'm not sure why its so short..
Man... You really have to work on your voice... You can't possibly be happy with the way your voice sounds over the songs? Maybe I'm mistaken..
It just feels kinda like your trying to expand your sound and technique past the point of your own perception during "Always Remember"
do the titles mean anything? I'm just curious because I hear no connection(whether it be song to song or title to title...) also why's it called conversation by purple flowers? I'm confused.
I don't know if its the recording software, the effects, or lack of mastering, but the way your voice is used is just upsetting.
"One more miracle" okay.. Stick with a tone... Your voice begs for a happy ish tone while the rest of the song is twisted as hell in tonality.. Like creepy or something.. I mean the guitars sound cool by themselves definitely
..work on your introductions.. If all of your song are going to be random as hell in comparison to the last, have a breather/an opening to get the listener ready for the new tone/structure/etc. "Last December" was a
good song, sounded pretty Christmasy.
By now I can tell why your songs are short.. It's because your structure is freeform.. Just try to add a riff you can circle back to.. I can hear you do this in "Hera" but its really short.. Sounds good(because its more memorable)
Hmm...tasteless synths in my opinion... But whatever you're going for.. Which idk. I can see alot of this music fitting in a kid game or something like that. Why no effort in simulating drums to sound live? Make the volumes/cutoffs random..do something about it pls. It's like having an organic pet puppy.. Except its body is supported by plastic limbs.. That's how it sounds to have a real guitar and faked percussion (just uncomfortable sounding)
Ok. So maybe I'm harsh. But If you want me to consider this as a legitimate album with "us" as your target audience, a few things:
1. Don't make an album with the sole purpose of one thing(losing a gf or w/e) ... Then decide to change direction somewhere in the middle of all that.. And make it for eeeevvveerrryyyboodddyyyy eeeelllsssseeee... Plan your album... Or devote to your initial plan... Or you can just say fuck it and change it.. But make that noticeable inside the album itself
3. Be consistent with a theme/structure/instruments/tonality. It's an album. It's supposed to have an overall feel of similarity
4. Have an intro to the album.
5. Have an outtro to the album.
6. Have an overall idea.
7. Have it catch people's attention..
8. Have an interesting development.
9. Thicken the plot.
10. Do what you can to keep the listener intrigued.
11. simplify the fuck out of your songs/album until everything works together and makes perfect sense.
12. every beat/note should have a purpose.
Albums are the SRS mode of an artists. It's when your at the point where you feel that you are so skilled with the type of music that you make, that you can make a huge collection of sounds to support an overall theme. Flawlessly. Kinda like manga. You can draw 1 cool anime dude sure... But if you wanna make a story.. You better know how to stay fucking consistent with how they look throughout. Otherwise, it'll just be shit cause the artist wasn't skilled enough to embark on such a difficult journey.
Same goes with an album. It's not just a song.. It's a huge display of effort, and overall musical knowledge. It's not something to be taken lightly in any aspect.. Obviously. And I feel this took several shortcuts of effort and time in order to just put this thing together. One song was even under 1:30. Are some of these WIPs? Be honest.
I'd be shamed as hell if my ex heard me sing/compose like that. Who knows my exs may have heard my shittiest tracks but I sure wouldn't be making it for them... If i did it would probably be lyrically similar to BFMV would make.To be fair though, you are learning.. Experience takes time... And lots and lots of effort. Don't give up!
Album score - 6/10
I've heard worse(but amusingly so) originally 5/10, but +1 for effort and feelings put into it
Songs average score- 7/10
Save for one or two songs that upset me, the rest really hold up on their own and I would give them no less of a rating were it on NG (4/5 stars). Far from professional, but lunging away from mediocrity(which is good)
maybe I spent way too much time on this review... time to poop.