A New Idea

[pkrbarmovie]

Two guys were best friends. Sadly, they begun beating the shit out of each other with hammers. One of them died. That's what happens when you beat the shit out of someone with a hammer.

Johnny was feeling captive in the boot camp. He could always feel another bite taken out of his soul. One night he had the idea. He made sure the rest of the potential soldiers were deep in slumber. They were. He subtly made his way towards the television. The television is the only television present in the whole boot camp. It is the only way to exit the boot camp and face the rest of the world. Johnny took a shit in his hand and applied the disgusting substance upon the screen of the television. Next morning, the potential soldiers were all awake and, as they yawned, made their way towards the television. They were all anxious to see Peter and Carl, their favorite show. They turned the television on. At that moment, they all realized the screen was covered in shit. Who has covered our television in shit? The fact begged the question. Johnny, dancing naked, sang the answer. It was him. The potential soldiers proceeded to take away Johnny's sight by ripping his eyes out and broke most of his bones. Then, all sad because the television was covered in shit, the soldiers took off towards their respective duties. The soldiers left Johnny to die alone.

As Johnny died he stared at the television. He didn't stare at the shit. He stared beyond it. There, he saw Peter and Carl beating the shit out of each other with hammers.

[Coop]

At 3/24/13 02:14 AM, pkrbarmovie wrote: As Johnny died he stared at the television. He didn't stare at the shit. He stared beyond it. There, he saw Peter and Carl beating the shit out of each other with hammers.

So, this is a new idea. That much I understand, yet that's about as far as my understanding goes - what is it a new idea for? As a short story goes, it's too short. As a script for an animation goes, it's awful, with lack of description and stage direction and as a creative work in progress goes, it needs a lot of work.