I am a young writer and i love some good criticism and thoughts from other people. Now bear in mind this story is kinda hard to explain.
Backstory (main character)
16 year old Drake finds himself trapped on his own pain through mental distress. While he can operate normally through social occasions and basic operations, his take on his past tragedies has paralyzed him emotionally; thus he slowly dehumanizes himself. A decade after his parents divorced, Drake manages to find a like minded female friend called Diane. The joy and pleasure of her company took away his mental pain, thus he started to feel emotions and true happiness. As she shared his pain and brought warmth into his deep wound they became real close friends. (The analogy of this show is influenced by "House MD") After a year Diane left with her parents to England, thus triggering the pain back to Drake's life.
The UPMW (United Planets of Milky Way) is an organization that unites all solar systems and it's planets. Not all planets and solar systems are a member of the UPMW. So the UPMW reward planets that recruite other planets with technological advancements and assistance. Also, the planet that recruits another planet with a party gets 10% of planets profits. The Earth, considering its limited technology advancements, is not a part of the UPMW...yet.
Knuckles (character in my icon) a citizen the planet Omnious, and is in desparate condition to find a life style and a job after a temporary recovery from his inner demons(much like Drake). So he decides to help Omnious recruite a planet so it can get assistance from the UPMW. Knuckles suggests to recruite planet Earth, seeing potential in the human race. But the congress of Omnious disagrees, as the earth is to expensive to get too. Knuckles, having a stubborn trait, states that he will not recruit any planet unless its planet Earth. Recruiting planets was very risky and very unpopular, so the congress relented and accepted knuckles's proposal with a small funding in the first party to represent planet earth.
Knuckles has enough funding to go to earth and pick a 1 human. The human thats selected will receive basic powers (sort of like super sonic) and become the leader of the party. Knuckles decides to select a human at random. Surprise, surprise Drake got selected, and although he defies the offer at first, he relents and becomes the leader of the first party too represent planet earth in the UPMW.
Drake and Knuckles goes through various adventures within other planets. Drake is again happy but the past comes back to haunt his mind (somehow).
So what do you guys think? I've got all main events for this animated show in my head right now, but i just wanted to give you a brief (lol) summary. I'm open for any criticism, but please make it constructive.
Im looking for voice actors and an animator to animate this show on flash, so if you are interested just message me.