Hey NG Writers,
I'm working on a project right now that I'll be animating. I have a rough draft script made up but it is lacking good comedy. I'd like to work with some of the writers here on NG to help bring a bit of life to the comedy in my story. Here is what I have so far for the opening episode.
Episode 1 (episode title)
(View of deep space fades in seeing a planet not too far away)
The outer reaches of space hold great mystery to many, I canâEUTMt help but wonder what great things are out among the stars. Is there anybody else out there, or are we all alone?
(Escape pod appears on screen and heads towards the planet)
(Scene opens with a guy tied up to a chair in a dark room, heâEUTMs bleeding and looks a bit beat up. A woman is seen with her back to him wiping down her gun. Day )
âEUoeI suggest you take a second to think about just how exactly youâEUTMll be answering my next question Jeff. Cause if I donâEUTMt like your answer, you might just end up like your friends over there.âEU
(Shows a bunch of thugs beat up across the room. )
âEUoeNow tell me Jeff, where is the Jack of DiamondsâEU
âEUoeI canâEUTMt te-âEU
âEUoeUhn uhn uhnnnn, You can and you willâEU
(Alexa sticks her pistol in between JeffâEUTMâEUTMs legs and pulls back the hammerâEU)
âEUoeHeâEUTMs in the City of Creed... âEUoe
(She walks away from him and takes off her dirtied shirt and heads outside to her bike.)
(Outside there is a cat laying on a beat up motorcycle he perks his head up.)
âEUoeWow you really are the worst person in existence arenâEUTMt youâEU
âEUoeHey, I get the job done, thatâEUTMs what matters, right?âEU
(Tosses a grenade in the door she just walked out of. )
âEUoeIs that really necessary? âEUoe
(You hear Jeff yelling in the background then an explosion happens.)
âEUoeWell weâEUTMre off to the City of CreedâEU
âEUoeThat dump, what do we need to go there for? They donâEUTMt have any good foodâEU
âEUoeI know, but once we complete this contract weâEUTMll have enough money to eat for a month... whoa whatâEUTMs that!âEU
(The escape pod breaks through the atmosphere and crashes down in the desert. You see the reflection in her goggles as she puts them on.)
âEUoeLets go check it out MochaâEU
(She kicks back her stand and rides off.)
(Alexa is looking through binoculars and checking out the landing site, there is a jeep parked close by and some thugs are looking at the escape pod.)
âEUoeLooks like somebody beat us to itâEU
âEUoeWell look at that I guess we can go now, no need for a violent bloodbath or anything.âEU
The escape pod opens and a young man falls to his knees coughing and choking.
âEUoeWait somebody just came out of it.. and heâEUTMs pretty cute too.âEU
âEUoeDo you ever think about anything but boys and food?âEU
Her stomach growls
âEUoeI wasnâEUTMt hungry until you said somethingâEU
The thugs see him and raise their weapons to kill the young man whoâEUTMs still gasping for air.
She runs down the hill that they were watching from and shoots the gun out of the hand of the guy that was about to shoot the young man. The other thugs ready their weapons and fire at Alexa, she slides down the hill leaning back ducking under the enemy fire, fires precise shots hitting each man directly with kill shots.
Mocha follows shortly after
âEUoeAlways a bloodbath with you..âEU
Alexa hands the young man a cantin and smiles. She has one for herself and starts taking a drink.
The young man takes a drink and checks out Alexa drinking out of hers
âEUoeSo whatâEUTMs your name?âEU
âEUoeUhhh... I... I donâEUTMt know.. I canâEUTMt remember, I canâEUTMt remember anythingâEU
âEUoewell thatâEUTMs not cliche at allâEU
The young man looks at Mocha with surprise
âEUoeI mean... meowâEU
âEUoeThanks for saving meâEU
âEUoeNo problem, we should probably get going though, you kind of made a grand entrance.
âEUoeOk, thats probably a good idea, where are we going?âEU
âEUoeThe City of Creed, I know somebody there who might be able to tell you some stuff about this spaceship of yours. Grab your stuff and weâEUTMll get going.
âEUoeSpace..ship? oh okay lets goâEU
To Be Continued
If anybody has any ideas, post them here. Or we can also talk on skype
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