At 2/3/13 11:25 PM, omega88x wrote:
Thanks for constructive criticism, I'll try everything you said I can improve on. I already got the 2nd page drawn, after that I'll try to do better.
I should probably wait for your third to do this, but whatever, no harm in saying this now.
Gonna put it in list format so you don't gotta go through a wall of text.
Point Ein, ja?
Your comic is fugly. No, that's not a jab at your art...well, it sort of is, but even a comic with badly drawn art can look fairly presentable. An important thing to do to make your comic look better is to-
It's fairly obvious that you make the word boxes first and then type in the letters. The right way to do this is to type the words first, then make the box to fit. Also, align to the center instead of to the default left.
It prevents crap like this from happening.
Point Dos, amigo
This is sort of running on the fugly point, and also on the borders point, but let me have my multiple points on the same topic.
Your borders are basically lines. These are the worst sorts of borders imaginable, especially considering that variation of space/panel size can make your comic look pretty cool and interesting.
Hell, let's look at the nuzlocke comic. The guy doing that, as far as I can remember reading, hasn't tried anything far out as far as panel variation goes but look how much better this looks compared to this. Yes, there's color, but the main thing is the solid panel borders. Can you imagine the former example with 1 pixel width line boxes? God, that would look hideous.
The best way to think of it in my opinion is to, instead of thinking of splitting the page into panels, think of the page as a blank background that you put tangrams on.
TretÊ¹ya Tochka, Tovarisch
I strongly suggest putting more time into your linework. Colors mean next to nothing if they're just flat and pasted on cruddy linework.
Ok that was a short point so here's a summary of everything out of order.
Make your panel borders thicker because thin borders are fugly and mess with reading.
Type your dialogue before making the word box for it.
Put more effort into making the lines look good.
I suggest you download a free art program such as Gimp if you're planning to put effort into this. Paint is incredibly limited and it's better to be limited by your ability than by your tools. Is it impossible to make good comics in paint? Well, fuck no, but it'll be a pain in the ass to make a good comic without a layers function at least.
Bonus two panel in case you're a visual learner.