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Axpirine 2012-12-04 16:17:25 Reply

Hi, my name is Joey, i'm from switzerland (That's why my english is so bad).
I create this topic to have some critics and your opinon.

That's my last illustration. I drew on paper and colorate with photoshop.

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Response to Axpirine 2012-12-04 17:27:00 Reply

At 12/4/12 04:17 PM, Axpirine wrote: Hi, my name is Joey, i'm from switzerland (That's why my english is so bad).
I create this topic to have some critics and your opinon.

That's my last illustration. I drew on paper and colorate with photoshop.

its oke I guess, a bit minimalistic though, all the hard parts are skipped. Try giving her a duck-face, assuming she is taking her own photograph. its difficult to criticize something that lacks show of skill. what is there is oke though


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Response to Axpirine 2012-12-05 07:12:12 Reply

At 12/4/12 05:27 PM, Tomsan wrote:
At 12/4/12 04:17 PM, Axpirine wrote: Hi, my name is Joey, i'm from switzerland (That's why my english is so bad).
I create this topic to have some critics and your opinon.

That's my last illustration. I drew on paper and colorate with photoshop.
its oke I guess, a bit minimalistic though, all the hard parts are skipped. Try giving her a duck-face, assuming she is taking her own photograph. its difficult to criticize something that lacks show of skill. what is there is oke though

Thanks you, you right I need to add more détails, your tips is very usefull. I'm going to do another version.
Bye

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Response to Axpirine 2012-12-05 15:25:54 Reply

At 12/4/12 04:17 PM, Axpirine wrote: Hi, my name is Joey, i'm from switzerland (That's why my english is so bad).
I create this topic to have some critics and your opinon.

That's my last illustration. I drew on paper and colorate with photoshop.

Such a trippy drawing. D: Great work.

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Response to Axpirine 2012-12-05 15:27:50 Reply

At 12/4/12 04:17 PM, Axpirine wrote: Hi, my name is Joey, i'm from switzerland (That's why my english is so bad).
I create this topic to have some critics and your opinon.

That's my last illustration. I drew on paper and colorate with photoshop.

this needs bigger boobs


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Response to Axpirine 2012-12-05 15:35:02 Reply

At 12/5/12 03:27 PM, Flowers10 wrote:
At 12/4/12 04:17 PM, Axpirine wrote: Hi, my name is Joey, i'm from switzerland (That's why my english is so bad).
I create this topic to have some critics and your opinon.

That's my last illustration. I drew on paper and colorate with photoshop.
this needs bigger boobs

For all we know, though, those could be balloons under there. : O

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Response to Axpirine 2012-12-05 17:29:58 Reply

I notice your comments and try to work about that. That's still minimalistic but I don't want to draw a background if I don't know how to do my character design.
(Sorry again for terrible english, and sorry for smaller boobs)

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Response to Axpirine 2012-12-05 17:45:56 Reply

At 12/5/12 05:29 PM, Axpirine wrote: I notice your comments and try to work about that. That's still minimalistic but I don't want to draw a background if I don't know how to do my character design.
(Sorry again for terrible english, and sorry for smaller boobs)

What's this.
What am I looking at here.
What's happening.
Who am I.

I'm so confused.

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Response to Axpirine 2012-12-28 18:58:54 Reply

Here is a new drawing :D

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Response to Axpirine 2012-12-28 19:53:51 Reply

At 12/5/12 05:45 PM, Lintire wrote: What's this.
What am I looking at here.
What's happening.
Who am I.

I'm so confused.
I prefer the golden rule of "don't be such a fucking asshole, you self-involved little shit".

idunno, maybe try to follow your own advice and don't post stupid, nonconstructive stuff

At 12/4/12 05:27 PM, Tomsan wrote: Try giving her a duck-face

I sincerely hope this is an attempt at being funny

Anyways I think you should sit down and really practice your proportions a bit more; they're very off, even for a cartoon. While your current skill will only permit so much, there is a few things I can suggest to help you right now.

-Clean up your drawings. In the first picture I noticed several splotches of color outside the lines. If you took the time to clean up these errors it would make a difference.

-Buy a drawing mannequin. Or in general, use more references.

-While the line tool is generally what professionals stick to you might have better luck in the meantime using the brush/pen tool. A lot of your linework irks me because there's no definition.

Keep practicing boss, you'll get better.


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Response to Axpirine 2012-12-29 06:19:49 Reply

Anyways I think you should sit down and really practice your proportions a bit more; they're very off, even for a cartoon. While your current skill will only permit so much, there is a few things I can suggest to help you right now.

-Clean up your drawings. In the first picture I noticed several splotches of color outside the lines. If you took the time to clean up these errors it would make a difference.

-Buy a drawing mannequin. Or in general, use more references.

-While the line tool is generally what professionals stick to you might have better luck in the meantime using the brush/pen tool. A lot of your linework irks me because there's no definition.

Keep practicing boss, you'll get better.

Thank's a lot! It will be very helpful. I have to change a lot of bad things. I notice all your tip and I'll show you better works.

Seeya!

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Response to Axpirine 2012-12-30 18:35:50 Reply

For my new drawing, I try to work about my problems with the proportions.

Show me your critics and your tips.

(Sorry again for horrible english)

Bye

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Response to Axpirine 2012-12-30 20:04:25 Reply

At 12/30/12 06:35 PM, Axpirine wrote: For my new drawing, I try to work about my problems with the proportions.

Show me your critics and your tips.

I like that it's pretty clean, but I still feel as though most of your proportions are off. I'd try drawing some rough figure poses for a while.

Also position of left hand is inverted/impossible


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Response to Axpirine 2012-12-30 22:13:24 Reply

I really like this animated/surreal style. If you decide to make it more realistic, try to keep the weirdness! And he's right about the left hand -- her fingers, not thumb, should be visible. Good luck and you're getting better with every picture.

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Response to Axpirine 2012-12-31 10:20:29 Reply

At 12/30/12 06:35 PM, Axpirine wrote: For my new drawing, I try to work about my problems with the proportions.

Show me your critics and your tips.

(Sorry again for horrible english)

Bye

I agree with the comments of everyone who's posted so far. In this picture, I can tell your anatomy's getting better, though it still has a long way to go. This is a good anatomy tutorial, though in my experience, learning anatomy is done best by drawing from references. Just find pictures of people in various poses--there's thousands on google images and elsewhere--and copy them. Posemaniacs and this helpful tool should help, though what I do mostly is copying images into photoshop and just drawing my sketches beside them.

Your shading could use some work. You may want to read up on some color theory; there's a million tutorials out there. This one may be of some help. Basically, your shading appears flat because the tones you've chosen are all just darker shades of the hue of the area you're shading. Vary the hues in your shading.

Lastly, the drawings you've posted all feel as though they have too much empty space. I recommend either working on the composition of the foreground or adding something to the background.


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Response to Axpirine 2012-12-31 10:22:26 Reply

So do you draw anything else besides social media webcam girls?

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Response to Axpirine 2012-12-31 11:22:20 Reply

WOW! Thank's you! Your critics will be very helpfull and constructiv for me! And these tutorial are very complete.

I'm gonna work about that!

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Response to Axpirine 2013-01-25 17:52:35 Reply

Here is a new drawing, I'm trying to work about your critics.
Show me again your critics and tips, they are realy constructive. BYE

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Response to Axpirine 2013-01-25 19:15:20 Reply

I don't know man I'm just not feeling it. The proportion is way off; the biggest thing I see is that her arm has absolutely no sign of an elbow. I think it's great that you're trying dynamic poses but I really think you should sit down and practice some basic anatomy before you keep pushing for those. If I were you I'd try just scribbling a bunch of front, 3/4s and backwards poses to get some basic shapes down.


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