Help a Brotha out

[Blud-Shot]

I'm working on a new piece, and so far I believe I have finished the gray scale of the image. I would like to know what you guys think I can do to improve the painting.

I'll read all your messages, it is really a great help getting feedback from the NG community (unlike that DeviantArt one) I can't improve without your input.

Let me know anything, like where do I need to work on to give the feeling of depth, what parts appear flat to you, should I increase the highlights or shadows, etc.

I also understand the girl is "beefy" looking but believe me that's the physique I aimed to draw. I'm looking for help on a technical level of the image in terms of painting. Never took lessons in drawing or painting so I look at our feedback as a mean of learning.

You may over paint to illustrate your point
Thanks :)

[Tomsan]

not much wrong as far as I can see.

the light source seems to be coming from the top right. then I would shade the lower shin of the (our) left leg. same for her boob, but maybe youll loose to much depth.

the (our) right boob seems a bit squashed. it just looks a tad uncomfortable.

her pinky? a bit weird

if you look at her lap for longer then a few seconds it seems like there is water between her legs. shading problem I think. I think its because the light moves over the (our) left leg pretty far, but the right one somewhat less. this creates sort of a filing between her legs.

personally I feel that the shoes could use a tad more detail to conform to the rest of the picture.

nice drawing!!

[MrFap]

At 10/30/12 09:23 AM, Blud-Shot wrote: I'm working on a new piece, and so far I believe I have finished the gray scale of the image. I would like to know what you guys think I can do to improve the painting.

I'll read all your messages, it is really a great help getting feedback from the NG community (unlike that DeviantArt one) I can't improve without your input.

Let me know anything, like where do I need to work on to give the feeling of depth, what parts appear flat to you, should I increase the highlights or shadows, etc.

I also understand the girl is "beefy" looking but believe me that's the physique I aimed to draw. I'm looking for help on a technical level of the image in terms of painting. Never took lessons in drawing or painting so I look at our feedback as a mean of learning.

You may over paint to illustrate your point
Thanks :)

There's something about the legs that doesn't seem quite right. Are they dangling in the air or resting on something? Even if you don't intend on drawing a background, drawing some temporary outlines of whatever she's sitting on might help figuring out the pose. Also the feet look a bit to small and pointy but it's hard to judge with the shoes she's wearing.
I'm not a good one on anatomy but maybe if you draw the feet without the shoes you'll figure it out yourself.
Peace Out, Brotha.

[ForskinGump]

Something about the feet bugs me, more detail perhaps? also her lower half of the legs don't seem long enough

[Blud-Shot]

Thank you all, I will be making the modifications based on what you have found. I will post an updated image afterwards and I would love to know what areas need to be worked.