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How can I make this better?

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Response to How can I make this better? Sep. 25th, 2012 @ 01:47 PM Reply

Well, you can add some color, some background, some sound effects and... voila!

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Response to How can I make this better? Sep. 25th, 2012 @ 04:02 PM Reply

ok, first of all, are you using onion skinning? his body is moving around like crazy. you should fix that.

i see that you included a bit of anticipation before he fired his gun, which is good, but the recoil is a bit too slow. on top of that, the projectile moves too slow to make the recoil (and that the guy tied to a tree is blown away) appear natural.

the projectile should continue in the same direction, it looks a bit like it hits an invicible wall at the end.

i hope this helps, i find it a bit hard to explain things properly so just send me a PM if you don't understand what the hell i'm on about, and i'll try to help you further.


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Response to How can I make this better? Sep. 27th, 2012 @ 11:34 PM Reply

you might wanna re-draw his legs, the whole thing looks really shaky.

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Response to How can I make this better? Sep. 29th, 2012 @ 04:20 PM Reply

At 9/25/12 04:02 PM, Daagah wrote: ok, first of all, are you using onion skinning? his body is moving around like crazy. you should fix that.

i see that you included a bit of anticipation before he fired his gun, which is good, but the recoil is a bit too slow. on top of that, the projectile moves too slow to make the recoil (and that the guy tied to a tree is blown away) appear natural.

the projectile should continue in the same direction, it looks a bit like it hits an invicible wall at the end.

i hope this helps, i find it a bit hard to explain things properly so just send me a PM if you don't understand what the hell i'm on about, and i'll try to help you further.

helped alot
The invisible wall was supposed to be there.
Something new I guess
http://www.newgrounds.com/dump/item/905cfd639c22407c7d2fc22a 1ec39dd9
I need help on this, yes I know that the shadows are shaking like crazy.