I need critques

[GamerGoddess360]

I have hit a point in writing where I find myself re-editing and being very hard on the story. Though this is a good thing, I wonder if there is some places where I haven't looked, characters that are not as developed as I thought, or that there are ideas I haven't considered.

I reallysuck at making summaries-- even though, this really isn't much a summary, but more like a quick, vague explanation -- because I always feel that they never give justice to the writing itself and feels like a generic plotâEU¦or how I write them anyway. ButâEU¦here is the best of what I can do:

The story is a dark fantasy (which I plan to make into four books) about a warrior who is a callous and slightly self-serving woman. But she is of a race (Which any race has a chance to give birth to) that is considered too unstable and corrupt that the law dictates that they are to be killed at birth.
-Trust me, it sounds better if you read it.

Anyway, I really need some critiques (aside from spelling and my famous typos) like ideas how to make it more interesting or things like "Well I feel that this character needed to BLANK" or "I like that one part, don't change it." But even though, as a writer I should be thick skinned, I ask you to please not insult my work unless you really believe you should, and if you do, do so lightly...I have been working on this for about four and a half years, so it is like a child to me.

So I have the first eleven chapters of the second draft for you to read. You can take as long as you want, I'm not hurrying you a bit and I really appreciate your time.

So send me an e-mail at the address below and I will send you the chapters.

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