Happiness

[BloodCoveredWolf]

Happiness is what all people seek in their life being a loved one, a job, or being family. Happiness is what people seek everyday its whats keeps us going every day. But would you give up your happiness to saves anothers happiness like giving up a love life or letting a family member go I would give my happiness up to make my loved ones happy

[mhzinski]

You...

Just truly heartbreaking. If you're going to lie to me, at least lie to me and produce good content.

[mhzinski]

Also since newgrounds leads the league in unimaginably poor forum construction (with a .358 average) you'll have to open my youtube link in a new tab to understand it.

[starwarsjunkie]

At 7/18/12 02:29 AM, BloodCoveredWolf wrote: Happiness is what all people seek in their life being a loved one, a job, or being family. Happiness is what people seek everyday its whats keeps us going every day. But would you give up your happiness to saves anothers happiness like giving up a love life or letting a family member go I would give my happiness up to make my loved ones happy

Muh. That's all I can say. A combination of 'meh' and 'huh'. I'm not sure what you were goin for. There's nothing here but a sappy, cliched half-statement half question with spotty punctuation and grammar.

Yay?

[BloodCoveredWolf]

At 7/18/12 11:30 AM, starwarsjunkie wrote:

At 7/18/12 02:29 AM, BloodCoveredWolf wrote:

Hey guys give me a break im still going through high school barely going to the 10th so don't judge me as if im already in college i still got more things to learn

[Hinuta55]

I love it u make me want to go make someone very happy! :) <3 Keep up the good work!!

[Deathcon7]

At 7/18/12 02:54 PM, Hinuta55 wrote: I love it u make me want to go make someone very happy! :) <3 Keep up the good work!!

Please don't. Don't encourage him. I'll kill everyone one in this damn forum if this is the type of work that is going to be celebrated, even remotely, even but someone indistinguishable from the din of NG users.

And BloodCoveredWolf, stop making so many threads. Stick to one. There's no need for it. Also, if you're going to write to share, write with purpose. There is absolutely nothing here that can be critiqued. With this we're like the judges of Iron Chef, and you're bringing us a bowl of Frosted Flakes. Do you want me to applaud the effort? Yay, you used your keyboard! Do you want me to encourage your train of thought? Yay, your palaverous, purposeless, pseudo-purple prose portrays sociopsychological proto-principles!

You may still be young, but that is not a excuse. If you want to learn, do, don't pantomime. Be an autodidact. That's the first step. Then, when you have a foundation upon which to further your knowledge, others such as myself can help you. Always keep in mind Christopher Paolini, who at a younger age than most here finished, published and promoted his own novel. Trite as it is, critically assaulted as it was, it was a published opus nonetheless, worthy of praise for the surrounding details if not for the work itself.

[DeftAndEvil]

At 7/18/12 02:35 PM, BloodCoveredWolf wrote:

At 7/18/12 11:30 AM, starwarsjunkie wrote:

At 7/18/12 02:29 AM, BloodCoveredWolf wrote:

Hey guys give me a break im still going through high school barely going to the 10th so don't judge me as if im already in college i still got more things to learn

Let that be your first lesson: put more effort to produce something more than a lame platitude. Clean it up and spend more than 2 minutes on it.

[Fluffychickens]

At 7/18/12 02:29 AM, BloodCoveredWolf wrote: Happiness is what all people seek in their life being a loved one, a job, or being family. Happiness is what people seek everyday its whats keeps us going every day. But would you give up your happiness to saves anothers happiness like giving up a love life or letting a family member go I would give my happiness up to make my loved ones happy

Sadness is what all people seek to avoid in their life, by finding a loved one, a job, or by staying with family. Sadness is what people wade through everyday, but keep going. Would you dwell in sadness forever to prevent another from ever being sad, ever being forced to feel physical or emotional pain. I would never sell my happiness for my loved ones.

Also; this isn't justified- But a person's got a right

Human kind is serpentine
Cold, heartless and as acrid as turpentine
Neglecting the world at every turn
Eventually our air, we'll burn.
I decided this is the place for my short
So stand and deliver, what's your retort.