Help devolp this story

[Specalist117]

So far I've been trying to wirte this story for a good month but I cant find inspiration with character (name wise) so in short read the story below and write comments to help me devolp and create characters.
*It is only a rough draft of the first chapter*

We begin our story atop a tall hill and at this point on said hill is a manor owned by a Duke of england, him, and his family live their quite live's here as they have for generations. His sons play in the courtyard as he watchs with his wife as they recal the day that are now long behind them. The boys talk of what they shall do in the future on of them talk of leaving and going around the world living a life of adventure, the other talks of a quite life as his father lives. Both are determined youngsters and as they chat and play the boys realize the sun is setting. The duke calls his sons inside for dinner the family all at the table the servants were cleaning as the boys pass they on their way to the dinning hall. The Duke's favorite butler serves them a four course meal fitting of a king. The family eats thier meal and retire to their indivdual rooms, but as they slumber a shadowy figure comes in through the once locked door he takes everything not nailed down and moves it to his carriage outside after he cleans out the home he desides to not leave tracks so the figure took one of the candles lights it and throws it at the oak stair case, he quickly flees the now burning manor to his carrage outside he then whips the hourse. One of the boys smell the smoke and sees a part of his bed come falling down he screamed and the peice of lumber hit him of the head rendering him unconscious. The next thing he see is a monor begin burned to the ground but the boy did not know who's home it was. He even questioned who he is.

[mhzinski]

Aside from all of the writing errors the story needs to be written not developed. If everyone except the boy is dead and the house and everything else that was presented in the first chapter is destroyed all you have is a back story or a prologue. Nothing has been established and there is no motivation for the boy to do anything right now. There is nothing engaging or humanizing about him aside from the fact that he got knock unconscious and gained the powers of teleportation inexplicably.

[paradigmvulpes]

seriously, i'm not gonna lie to you, i just read through an unfinished story me and others made, its 3 and a half pages long, i thinks its over a hundred post, and i didnt read youre story, i can't even remember if you used paragraphs, but i seem to remember the huge brick as my writing was once referred, so two things, us paragraphs often and i like to use names from the countries of origin, german, irish, finish.
sorry for how sloppy this is, i got like 2 hours of sleep last night.