At 4/29/12 11:52 AM, ChocolateKitteh wrote:
Hello ChocolateKitteh :)
I'm ChocolateKitteh and I'm new here ^^ Jut signed up yesterday :3
Welcome on board!
I'd like you to ask what you think of my work:
It's an uncensored version of my "Enchained Lust" painting on deviantART :3
I know it seems as if everybody was criticising you solely because you drew something excessively sexual. But that's not the point, or at least most of the users did not have that intention. For the moment, forget that stuff about all that "artistic value" blah blah blah. There's not more or less artistic value or "credibility" in the topic of your pic than in a pic of a giant robot battle someone else drew up. There may however be more value in the technical realization of other pics.
Ephyse mentioned some vital points about the composition already. pockets08 doesn't really seem to know what focal point means yet (no offense to him intended), cause to me the focal point is the face of the upper girl (which you wanna have as focus) and the torch on the wall (which probably should not be a focal point).
Squint a little at your pic and and check what stands out, what draws your eyes to it. You can also try to close your eyes infront of the pic and when you open them again try to realize what the first thing is you are looking at. That would be your primary focus.
All that focus talk aside, it is obvious that you know how to draw basically. So please don't take all the criticism you get personal. The other artists just try to give you more qualified advice since you are NOT a noob. :)
There are some issues with the light. There are candles in the background, but they don't seem to result in highlights on the curtains, the girls' bodies or on some areas of the wall.
The main issue is the anatomy. Even if women are skinny, their lower arms and hands can't become that thin.
Now look at the upper girl's right arm (left from our view). Her elbow reaches down to her hip, but with correct anatomy a humans wrist aligns horizontically with the hip (give or take an inch). So obviously her arm is too long (since her lower body also doesn't look bent or anything). Both arms are not the same length either. The legs are not both the same length either and given the seam of her boot, her left leg (right from our view) is oddly curved. At the angle she is holding her lower foot, shouldnt there be a fold in the leather boot?
Now we are getting to the NSFW part again. I don't mind you or anyone else drawing stuff like that, but be aware that if you depict naked or half-naked people, your anatomy knowledge should be nearly flawless. Even if you wanna exaggerate any features or stylize them, you should really know what your doing.
I hope this is not discouraging to you, I just think some anatomy studies could help you a lot.
Check out www.posemaniacs.com or www.pixelovely.com and see where it gets you.
And before anyone else feels the need to say it: yeah I should practice human anatomy more myself.