When working with typography, legibility should have a high priority I think. Text over text is usually a big no-no, but I'm also looking at the hands of the clock, specifically the one for minutes. Squishing and stretching text *can* work if it's only by a very small percentage, otherwise you'd be better off choosing an extended version of that typeface, or adjust the tracking. That also goes for the quote at the bottom.
I do like the way you've sorted the background text though, compared to the Mars one it's much more interesting to look at. However, I don't think the words are following your concept of positive on the outside, dark on the inside. "Death" is one of the more prominent words getting repeated, which is as negative as it could get I imagine.
Composition wise, I'm not really sure what's going on. My eyes are drawn towards the hands of the clock because of the high contrast between the hands and the background, but other than that I don't feel like there's any direction to it. I didn't really get the idea of dark inside positive outside, but that might've just been me.
Continuing on composition, I think making the inner circle dark with white text on top would make that idea more obvious, but I'm assuming the colour had to be recognizable from Saturn. What I'm thinking instead would be flipping that whole concept, so the text inside has a positive view, while the surroundings are all dark, cold, and cynical (like space!). That way you could also have all the word in the background just spell "Death" at different sizes, so as to clear up any noise there too.
Another thing is the composition is almost entirely playing on one colour tone. Maybe more colours could've been applied to the composition?