At 7 minutes ago, DweebyHawkeyes wrote:
WIP for 6! Before I get any further into aesthetics, I just want to make sure my idea works with the emoticon, that the emoticon is apparent enough, etc. Those things. Please and thank you!
Good stuff! I'm gonna try to start being more comprehensive in my critiques, so prepare for a larger than usual review.
The concept is funny and I like it. So far, the colouring is flat but good, I realise you haven't put much lighting yet, so I don't have much to say on it. It seems a little dark overall though, and you could tighten up the edges of the colour overall. Considering there isn't really a background, I think the fogginess works nice, although the whiteness of it bothers me, it almost seems like the hero on the right is being highlighted, when it should be about the main face.
I think the face you've chosen is captured adequately and cleverly, although it comprises a small area of the image, which leads me to my next point - the main thing I dislike about this is that the joke is just being smacked in my face. It's not a hard joke to get, especially with the current state of the art portal, and due to that, you end up wasting like a third of your vertical space with a boring rectangle/words. I know that it will be put in a collab where it will be viewed, perhaps briefly, before moving on, but it's still just too strong. I think you should make the image as good as it can get, and THEN worry about that aspect of things.
More specifically about the words themselves - the designer aspect of me just doesn't really like the typeface you're using. It doesn't really fit the spacey theme of your picture. I'd go for something more computer-y OR comic-y, check sites like Font Squirrel, dafont, or The League of Moveable Type (the last one might not have what you're looking for, but I remember Orbitron as being good).
The rectangles with the character descriptions are cutting off a big portion of the colouring in your picture. Try putting them on a different layer style, or at least lower the opacity, so it doesn't just look like some rectangles were slapped on the pic. The placement of the rectangles also bothers me - I don't like that the outer ones are touching the edge, and also, the center one overlaps with the left one. OKAY. SORRY ABOUT HOW MUCH I WROTE ABOUT THE RECTANGLES. Also, overall it's up to you, I was just stating my preference on the rectangles' presence in this picture.
So, uh, yeah, I can't really think of anything else to say about it.
TL;DR - Good concept and progress so far, work on composition concerning rectangles/text, make the main point of this picture bigger, lighten it up a lil bit.