At 4/19/12 03:05 AM, Spags wrote:

At 4/17/12 06:16 PM, Decky wrote: Done alittle more still needs some more shading although any advice would be nice :) so here's another WIP. Please don't give up my place Spag :).

I hate to be that guy, but you need to work on this - the linework is kinda boring, the colours are flat, and the background pattern is ugly. Also, I don't really see how it relates to the emoticon. If you don't have something more relevant/ironed out by 11:59PM EST Friday April 20th, I'm afraid I will have to give up your spot.

Right, ok. Well I can understand your comments on the background and the flat colours but you don't see how it relates to the emoticon? it's face is pulling the emoticon face that I picked?! I can add shade (as i stated still needed to be done) and change the background/ work on the drawing in general but if you think that I'm starting again you are sadly mistaken. I just don't get why this doesn't relate?! I understood for my first attempt but this one fits in my opinion.

At 4/19/12 05:15 AM, Decky wrote: Right, ok. Well I can understand your comments on the background and the flat colours but you don't see how it relates to the emoticon? it's face is pulling the emoticon face that I picked?! I can add shade (as i stated still needed to be done) and change the background/ work on the drawing in general but if you think that I'm starting again you are sadly mistaken. I just don't get why this doesn't relate?! I understood for my first attempt but this one fits in my opinion.

It's mainly in the eyes. The cross-eyes throws one of rather a lot. When I first saw it, it looked as if you were going for the slightly mentally challenged one (37).

Don't get so offended tho, Spags just wants this collab to be really good :)

At 4/19/12 05:48 AM, test-object wrote: It's mainly in the eyes. The cross-eyes throws one of rather a lot. When I first saw it, it looked as if you were going for the slightly mentally challenged one (37).

I did think that the eyes were a little wrong myself, i'll straighten them out when I get home (at college at the moment).

Don't get so offended tho, Spags just wants this collab to be really good :)

I do understand, if I was in his position I'd obviously want the best and I'm aware that my artwork is nothing compared to some of the pieces that have got in so far and maybe I over reacted. I'm just under quite a bit of stress at the current time, I apologise. But I still stick to the fact that I'm not starting it again. I'll try and get as much done as I can by tomorrow and show that it still can be a good piece that is worthy of this collab.

At 4/18/12 07:52 AM, ZaneZansorrow wrote: Calling it done

Holy fucking shit, how the when did you even like how did you even get to this level of artistic goodness?!!?!?

Right then, lets try this again, just had about an hour on the thing, some more problems have arisen and now it needs to be neatened up but I changed the background and got rid of the text which shall be added again. I added some filters to the rabbit and desk to give it a less flat fell. They haven't 100% worked but i'll have a play around with it later and I'm sure I can make it better :) (i like playing with rabbits). Please don't bite my head off for producing this quite yet as I'll post an improved one tomorrow. Please give me some advice for now though. (higher quality)

I'm aware the lines currently look shit, I'm just going to go over the lines again.

At 4/19/12 06:55 AM, Decky wrote: stuff

scratch that, the filters look terrible. I'll try again.

Firstly sorry for the amount of posts.

Improvement...............Behold (better version) just needs a little neatening up now.

Sorry for being quiet so long. Here's what I got.

Still working on it!

rage (17) wip

At 4/19/12 09:54 AM, Decky wrote: Firstly sorry for the amount of posts.
Improvement...............Behold (better version) just needs a little neatening up now.

Why a rabbit? and why are you trying to make it into a joke? it's an art collab.

It looks like something a design student would do with the very rigid unfree lines and regular shapes and then the flat colours that you've tried to make look better with unsubtle textures. Like it's obvious you were using a drawing software and not using a free moving tool which makes your drawing look very unnatural. Also your colour choices aren't very harmonic.

Also your drawing doesn't seem to properly reflect your emoticon. You've got the face going all like "oh god, what the fuck, what did I just see" ..while to me that emoticon is actually more of a "is this guy serious?" sorta face.

At 4/19/12 03:05 AM, Spags wrote: Open spots are 19, 26, and 40.

May I please take number 26?

At 4/20/12 12:23 AM, CloudEater wrote:

At 4/19/12 09:54 AM, Decky wrote: (stuff)

Why a rabbit?

Why not?

and why are you trying to make it into a joke? it's an art collab.

Because I'm a funny guy and I'm sure the people who veiw the finished flash would like humour, it is still NG. Nobodys is going to swoon at the sight of it. It's not The Tate.

It looks like something a design student would do with the very rigid unfree lines and regular shapes and then the flat colours that you've tried to make look better with unsubtle textures.

The lines do still need to be improved although I usually do draw like this. It's how I do things, maybe it doesn't look as good as the tip top of the artists round here but I'd still say it is a valid style. As for the texture, if your talking about the one on the rabbit I'd say it works and the desk looks wooden now so, yeah in my books that works.

Like it's obvious you were using a drawing software

Well yeah, it's how I draw, using a computer. I'm a digital arts student.

and not using a free moving tool which makes your drawing look very unnatural.

I hate graphic tablets if that's what you are going on about, mouse all the way. And there is nothing more natural then a rabbit looking at what I guess is some disturbing porn on the internet.

Also your colour choices aren't very harmonic.

Which colours would you prefer?

Also your drawing doesn't seem to properly reflect your emoticon.

I disagree.

You've got the face going all like "oh god, what the fuck, what did I just see" ..while to me that emoticon is actually more of a "is this guy serious?" sorta face.

I have always though that emoticon was more of a "????" Face and I believe that is what I have created.

Thanks for the crit though.

At 4/20/12 02:11 AM, Decky wrote:

At 4/20/12 12:23 AM, CloudEater wrote: Also your drawing doesn't seem to properly reflect your emoticon.

I disagree.

You've got the face going all like "oh god, what the fuck, what did I just see" ..while to me that emoticon is actually more of a "is this guy serious?" sorta face.

I have always though that emoticon was more of a "????" Face and I believe that is what I have created.

I've got to agree with Cloudy. That emoticon is a condescending eyebrow raise, which isn't what you've drawn.

I don't think it's the humor we mind, so much as that the style it's in is the sort you'd find in a editorial cartoon- it doesn't really fit in with artistic goals of the collab as maintained through the other entries.

As for your piece looking like the emoticon, i had to look up which one you'd picked- i couldn't match it to one. The eyes are the main dissonance here.

Color wise you've chosen purple and brown with a spot of teal. If you want suggestions, blue and brown tend to work well together because our brains are geared to find earth/sky combinations satisfying. There's a plethora of combinations that will work better than your current color system though.

Thanks for all of your comments, I'm guessing that Spag will give up my place on the collab as I don't have the time to change the drawing much today. I'll take what you have said on board and hope that it helps me with art collab work in the future. Hopfully I get on with the next art collab I have time to do.

At 4/20/12 03:00 AM, lovingthedark wrote: I don't think it's the humor we mind, so much as that the style it's in is the sort you'd find in a editorial cartoon- it doesn't really fit in with artistic goals of the collab as maintained through the other entries.

Apparently some people do mind the humor and it has even been questioned why he made it into a cartoon. And yeah even why he used a rabbit. I don't see a problem with both. Stylewise, I agree but I think it's the low line quality that gives it an even worse look. Decky, didn't you want to go over the lines again?

As for your piece looking like the emoticon, i had to look up which one you'd picked- i couldn't match it to one. The eyes are the main dissonance here.

I don't think it's thaaaat far from the emoticon. Making the eyes the same size and adjusting the left (right from our view) corner of his mouth to get closer to the emotes mouth, should make it more obvious. The bigger eye pretty much says "shocked" instead of the actual emote.

Color wise you've chosen purple and brown with a spot of teal. If you want suggestions, blue and brown tend to work well together because our brains are geared to find earth/sky combinations satisfying. There's a plethora of combinations that will work better than your current color system though.

Agree with that absolutely. I think you should drop the purple background and draw a new one, instead of giving up on the pic completely. Even if Spags doesn't accept it, in the worst case you end up with a nice cartoon.

Add some shade and highlight to the lower part of the ear, some highlight to the arm, some shading to the foot in the front and the white parts in his face also don't have any shading yet. Just generally, make the light and shade more consistent.

Slapping a filter over a finished drawing is usually frowned upon, but I like the grain you added somehow. Matter of personal taste I guess.

----------------------------
Since I don't know at what time I will be home today, I am going to post my most recent WIP. Keep in mind that the lines will disappear altogether, so don't worry about the sketchiness. I restarted my piece yesterday, so sorry that I don't have a lot more to show yet.

My main question is, is the emotion "derpy" enough? lol

At 4/20/12 11:17 AM, Luwano wrote: Since I don't know at what time I will be home today, I am going to post my most recent WIP. Keep in mind that the lines will disappear altogether, so don't worry about the sketchiness. I restarted my piece yesterday, so sorry that I don't have a lot more to show yet.

My main question is, is the emotion "derpy" enough? lol

Allright, Im going to give you some critique.
The eyes are not on the same height, maybe this is on purpose but i dont think it will add to the derpyness.
you could however give him big eyelids, most retards have this.
also maybe put his tongue out of his mouth, and put a bigger smile on his face so his cheeks will bulge more.
I think its a good sketch though!

wippy what

Well, without bothering to reply to anyone specifically, after accounting for everyone who has PMed me, dropped out, or failed to update, there are now a LOT of open spots. I will most likely have to update the deadline, as I figure this will take a long time to get completed now. In retrospect, I should've had the WIP deadline be earlier, but oh well. I learned something for next time!

Open spots:
3, 8, 18, 22, 23, 28, 29, 30

At 4/21/12 12:45 AM, EJR wrote: I'll trade 40 for 18!!

Ok, thanks! That makes my choice easier! I'll take 22. (We're allowed to do two, right?) I should be able to have 'em both done by Monday. Barring any spastic weather again! lol

Mind if I take three? I've got an idea for it.

I'll take 29, I'll work on it right now, probably be done in a few hours

Alright, you guys :D
Open spots:
8, 23, 28, 30, 40

At 4/21/12 03:39 AM, Spags wrote: Alright, you guys :D
Open spots:
8, 23, 28, 30, 40

Can I take 40?

I fell asleep while working on this, dunno what I was trying to do, but I wanted to show that I was in fact doing SOMETHING

At 4/21/12 03:44 AM, ImpendingRiot wrote: Blergh, last WIP before the final...

looks wonderfull, but what happened to his ears?

More progress

I'm calling this done 'cuz I'm tired of looking at it! Kinda meh, but at least it's not the creepy cupie doll thing I had in the beginning! That thing gave me nightmares! lol!!!

Yes or no? This is just a sketch...