Webcomic - The Life Of Steven Arrow

[duffosaur]

so here is my webcomic i am currently doing
<a> href="http://<a> href="http://www.smackjeeves.com/comicpr ofile.php?id=98785">web comic<a>">webcomic<a>

so if you could look at it and tell me what you think and any improvements

thanks all

[duffosaur]

hers the proper link i some how messed it up sorry

[Kinsei]

At 9/26/11 07:35 PM, duffosaur wrote: hers the proper link i some how messed it up sorry

Meh.... too lazy to look.... Post it here instead...

[Daverom]

3 things I noticed right off the bat.

Stop Capitalizing Every First Letter Of Words, not everything is a proper noun.

Use some punctuation, sentences end in periods. There were a lot of "were"s where there should be "we're"

and learn the differences of there, they're, and their, this is 2nd grade English, man.

[Morthagg]

The childlike quality (don't see this as an insult) and simplicity has its charm, in my opinion. But yeah, I'll say you have to watch your language too. Literally. Also, the lay-out of your site is pretty confusing, especially the homepage. I thought I was reading from first to last, but it was the other way around.

[ImKingLouie]

I came in expecting to hate it. But it's not bad. The story progresses well, but it's pretty generic. Work on your English.

[ThunderSpam]

Well first things first. I commend you on your colouring. I almost expected to see half assed marker lines everywhere, smudging and whatnot. Congratulations on not being part of the general populous that can't colour using markers.

The comic is not the worst thing I've ever seen, but it's not quite the best either. The characters maintain to real proportions, often changing in depth, angle and the like. Oh wait though... your characters are arrows. The characters don't offer very much visual appeal, most being the same geometric shape, with some hair tacked on top and some hair. They are honestly just boring characters. You've taken what would traditionally just be a stickman and changed its shape. This however does not save it from the boring simplicity of the stick figure. I am not saying you need anatomically correct humans or anything, but a little variety in characters would be nice. At least throw in some more shapes... like cubes, cones, etc.

The three panels don't do a whole lot to hold the attention of the reader, and each piece to it seems fragmented. However, the story itself isn't developed enough for me to actually care what is going on either. Remember in English class, your teacher would show you that stupid ass mountain diagram with the introduction, rising action, climax, and conclusion? Turns out that shit is actually useful, and form the basis to any good story. I have no real reason to want to get to know Steven Arrowhead, and he is honestly just a weirdly shaped guy that quickly gets into a plot about nothing as far as I'm concerned.

Keep going, as it takes a surprising amount of tenacity to maintain a webcomic. You'll certainly hear a lot of advice from a lot of different people. Just take it into mind, but do what you want to in the end.