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Critique my work? Jul. 18th, 2011 @ 12:31 AM Reply

Here's a short flash I made with CS4. What do you think? It's my first flash. Tips? I want to improve.

http://www.newgrounds.com/dump/item/cdca acaadebc7909d75c416d2774d5b3

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Response to Critique my work? Jul. 18th, 2011 @ 09:31 AM Reply

it's nice and smooth, JUST DON'T UPLOAD IT TO THE PORTAL

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Response to Critique my work? Jul. 18th, 2011 @ 10:30 AM Reply

At 7/18/11 12:31 AM, UltraPotamus wrote: Here's a short flash I made with CS4. What do you think? It's my first flash. Tips? I want to improve.

http://www.newgrounds.com/dump/item/cdca acaadebc7909d75c416d2774d5b3

It's very short pretty good for a first flash

but you might want to work a bit with your lip-syncing work and might want to improve a bit in drawing and shading

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Response to Critique my work? Jul. 18th, 2011 @ 11:05 AM Reply

At 7/18/11 09:31 AM, RyanBustersword123 wrote: it's nice and smooth, JUST DON'T UPLOAD IT TO THE PORTAL

Haha. Don't worry, I won't upload it. :P

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Response to Critique my work? Jul. 18th, 2011 @ 09:54 PM Reply

everything im about to say is probably a bit hypocritical because im not the best lip syncer (or whatever that is called) BUT

the voice has an attitude. that attitude should be animated on the character. not just the lip sync but a person with that kind of voice probably moves around a lot and the apple should too. if you don't make the character look like the voice then it wont look like said character is talking.

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Response to Critique my work? Jul. 26th, 2011 @ 06:24 PM Reply

Hated it.

k'bye!

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Response to Critique my work? Jul. 26th, 2011 @ 07:03 PM Reply

Stereotypical Husband. Why are you popping up and being a douche everywhere.
No one appreciates your faggotry.

I thought it was good for a first flash ;)


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Response to Critique my work? Jul. 26th, 2011 @ 09:21 PM Reply

its awright

tip: keep at it


ama gon chill

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Response to Critique my work? Jul. 28th, 2011 @ 05:34 AM Reply

kewl. wanna make a music video?

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Response to Critique my work? Jul. 28th, 2011 @ 01:19 PM Reply

Its ok, BUT you should really change the colors. the BG was boring, you should blur the sun a bit.
Thats about it. Keep animating.:DDD

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Response to Critique my work? Aug. 1st, 2011 @ 05:27 PM Reply

good start into the fantastic world that is flash and animation in general


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Response to Critique my work? Aug. 1st, 2011 @ 08:19 PM Reply

Don't give the highlights outlines, and don't tack the sun in the corner in of the stage. Putting the sun in the corner of your drawings should have ended in 4th grade. Also, LOOK UP A TUTORIAL ON LIP SYNCING. I'm not trying to be critical at all, but there are as many different methods of lip sync as there are fish in the sea. Using a tutorial will help you get started and develop your own fast and efficient technique. Just keep practicing, and you'll do just fine without guidance. (I do HIGHLY recommend using someone else's method of lip syncing before developing your own, though.)


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