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Jul. 18th, 2011 @ 12:31 AM
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Here's a short flash I made with CS4. What do you think? It's my first flash. Tips? I want to improve.
http://www.newgrounds.com/dump/item/cdca acaadebc7909d75c416d2774d5b3
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Jul. 18th, 2011 @ 09:31 AM
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it's nice and smooth, JUST DON'T UPLOAD IT TO THE PORTAL
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Jul. 18th, 2011 @ 10:30 AM
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At 7/18/11 12:31 AM, UltraPotamus wrote: Here's a short flash I made with CS4. What do you think? It's my first flash. Tips? I want to improve.
http://www.newgrounds.com/dump/item/cdca acaadebc7909d75c416d2774d5b3
It's very short pretty good for a first flash
but you might want to work a bit with your lip-syncing work and might want to improve a bit in drawing and shading
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Jul. 18th, 2011 @ 11:05 AM
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At 7/18/11 09:31 AM, RyanBustersword123 wrote: it's nice and smooth, JUST DON'T UPLOAD IT TO THE PORTAL
Haha. Don't worry, I won't upload it. :P
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Jul. 18th, 2011 @ 09:54 PM
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everything im about to say is probably a bit hypocritical because im not the best lip syncer (or whatever that is called) BUT
the voice has an attitude. that attitude should be animated on the character. not just the lip sync but a person with that kind of voice probably moves around a lot and the apple should too. if you don't make the character look like the voice then it wont look like said character is talking.
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Jul. 26th, 2011 @ 07:03 PM
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Stereotypical Husband. Why are you popping up and being a douche everywhere.
No one appreciates your faggotry.
I thought it was good for a first flash ;)
Wait.. What?
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ama gon chill
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Jul. 28th, 2011 @ 01:19 PM
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Its ok, BUT you should really change the colors. the BG was boring, you should blur the sun a bit.
Thats about it. Keep animating.:DDD
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Aug. 1st, 2011 @ 05:27 PM
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good start into the fantastic world that is flash and animation in general
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Aug. 1st, 2011 @ 08:19 PM
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Don't give the highlights outlines, and don't tack the sun in the corner in of the stage. Putting the sun in the corner of your drawings should have ended in 4th grade. Also, LOOK UP A TUTORIAL ON LIP SYNCING. I'm not trying to be critical at all, but there are as many different methods of lip sync as there are fish in the sea. Using a tutorial will help you get started and develop your own fast and efficient technique. Just keep practicing, and you'll do just fine without guidance. (I do HIGHLY recommend using someone else's method of lip syncing before developing your own, though.)
