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At 5/4/11 09:59 AM, Me-Patch wrote:

At 5/4/11 09:57 AM, Asandir wrote:

It´s Star Wars Day! Come all and join the dark side by changing your aura to evil!

Why would you go evil and not dark?

Oh! That´s right! Then change it to dark!

SpaceVaginaWhaleBoob

At 5/4/11 10:16 AM, Space-Whale wrote: SpaceVaginaWhaleBoob

I hope you don´t consider requesting this as name change?

It´s Star Wars Day! Come all and join the dark side by changing your aura to Dark!

THAT'S YOUR POEM you cheeky shit

At 5/4/11 10:14 AM, Asandir wrote:

At 5/4/11 09:59 AM, Me-Patch wrote: Why would you go evil and not dark?

Oh! That´s right! Then change it to dark!

I feel like the Edison to joethesouleater's Tesla.

At 5/4/11 10:22 AM, Me-Patch wrote: I feel like the Edison to joethesouleater's Tesla.

You know, the sheer awesomness of the poem of the OP blinded me and let me forget the existance of the Dark Aura, but I made up for it and changed the colour of my signature again!

It´s Star Wars Day! Come all and join the dark side by changing your aura to Dark!

At 5/4/11 10:09 AM, Manly-Chicken wrote: Vagina-Chicken

Manly-Boob

WRITING FORUM

At 5/3/11 11:53 PM, VaginaBoob wrote: Yeah, well here goes nothing.

It's a full grown tulip.

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The yellow petals that flow in a never-ending spiral towards the root of the stem.

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It's a cycle.

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Ok, so here we've determine you know not shit about poetic meter. This is prose where you hit enter ever few words so people wouldn't think you were a pussoir.

Spring, Summer, Fall, then Winter.

Always going in a circle.

It's a spiral. Circles don't always move forward. Every year is slightly different from the last. , not the same at all.

It never goes back, and it never skips.

I THOUGHT IT WAS A FUCKING CIRCLE> WHY DO YOU LIE TO ME?!?!?!?!

RAGE!

It's always going forward.

Why?

Way to go there, syllable count of 1. I'm impressed. BY YOUR IGNORANCE OF WHAT THE WORD "POEM" MEANS.

Because everything was predestined to be like that.

Take the word "like" out of the sentence. See how nothing changes in it's meaning, and yet it sounds much less written by a product of Disney Channel parenting? Yeah.

But words and their meanings...it's so varied.

10 without the ellipse... 11 with. How the fuck are you using prime goddamn numbers in your meter counts? Have you never even read real poetry? Syllable count is EVERYTHING! Also, just like using the word "like" unnecessarily earlier, your ellipse just makes you sound like you're stalling for time... IN TEXT. YOU'RE PRETENDING TO BE DUMB IN VOICE IN TEXT. HOLY FUCK, DID YOU EAT PAINT CHIPS AS A KID?!?!

A single word can be used in so many different ways.

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I have not hit the same number twice in your meter counts. This means you suck. How are you determining line length? Just hitting enter every few words and hoping for the best?

It's never the same...

it's never different...

Oxymoronic. With, in your case, extra moron.

It's just...misjudged

The flaw is in your eye, not in the world you pompous dumbshit.

This poem really moved me, I hope it goes to inspire others too

Yeah, it moved me alright. Moved me as far away artistically from your dumb ass as I could possibly go.

At 5/4/11 10:33 AM, FUNKbrs wrote: herpa derpa

FUNKboobs

At 5/4/11 10:19 AM, Stuart-Stevenson wrote: THAT'S YOUR POEM you cheeky shit

I was hoping to get more constructive criticism

DiseasedVagina.

Hey Wade, read your pms. Please.

straight outta compton crazy motherfucka named ice cube

LOL! somebody plz do my username, I can't think of which combo sounds better...

To sum it up, VaginaBoob (OP), the ppl on this thread seem confused if you intended for them to evaluate your poem, find irony with your name and the thread title, or BOTH!

At 5/5/11 08:47 PM, VaginaBoob wrote:

At 5/4/11 10:19 AM, Stuart-Stevenson wrote: THAT'S YOUR POEM you cheeky shit

I was hoping to get more constructive criticism

Constructive Vagina's? HERESY! We have other types on new grounds though. Cheesy. Torn. Gaping. Take your pick good sir!