Accidental Poem

[Mortdwort]

I was trying to write lyrics a couple years and got a dark poem. I thought it was pretty good, I was hoping you guys could give me some critiquing. From what I can tell it's about how people are afraid of death but they really shouldn't be. Not entirely sure though.

Forever and Always

Homicide, genocide, xenocide
Millions, billions, quintillions
The end just keeps going
forever and always, into eternity
Waiting, always waiting
the salvation of life, is death
But for the salvation of death itself there is none
And thus it shall remain
Forever and always, into eternity
Many try to stay it's rueful hand
Not knowing the relief it caries
the pain it lifts from our over-worked shoulders
but all have failed
All attempts made futile by the unwavering certainty
And infinite dependence
For the only promise of life is for it to end at death
And none shall force this oath broken
Forever and always, into eternity

Forever and always, into eternity

Forever and always, into eternity

[rainyxnightshade]

This is just the kind of writing I like to be honest. It has kind of that "dark" type of thing goping on. It is very well composed for an accident.

[Mortdwort]

Thanks, I like the darker stuff myself, obviously, that's why I write it. I was surprised after I wrote this, I know it's not perfect but for a fourteen ear old to pull this from outta nowhere is something.