Yourix Random Comics Series

[YouriX]

I am starting a webcomic that i update every Friday. And i need some feedback to know if im on the right track. I already decided to instead of writing in the word-baloons i just type it all up. Is easier that way for me and more easier for you the reader. I started using fonts on the 6th page.

I made the comics in flash so that i can combine animations and do some interactive activities. maybe a small little mini game.

[YouriX]

Oh jeez forgot the important part the website! www.yourix.nl

[maadis]

Yeah.
You did it. The faces of them are fantastic!

[J-qb]

I agree that the faces are cool, Im not too fond of the sketchiness of it all though; you could use these ase. states and just draw them on a new layer though, i think that would help.

[YouriX]

At 3/26/11 07:03 PM, maadis wrote: Yeah.
You did it. The faces of them are fantastic!

Thanks im glad you noticed! I like or atleast try to give my characters alot of emotions!

At 3/26/11 07:08 PM, J-qb wrote: I agree that the faces are cool, Im not too fond of the sketchiness of it all though; you could use these ase. states and just draw them on a new layer though, i think that would help.

Yeah i personally like the sketchiness. BUT!!! I will consider to tone it down a bit. Thanks for the comment though :)

[Daverom]

work on the comic flow, the text reads really awakward in the first one. I'm not to hot onthe humor so far either.

[YouriX]

At 3/26/11 07:19 PM, M-Vero wrote: work on the comic flow, the text reads really awakward in the first one. I'm not to hot onthe humor so far either.

Okay.

- Use less sketchiness
- Work on the humor
- Fix the text on the first page

[Morthagg]

I have a bit of a problem with the first frame of your first image. Since we read from left to right and up to down, we tend to read text that's placed up and/or left in the frame first. So the the dialogue seems really odd, since "Funny, right" seems to be a reply to "I'm not feeling it", which doesn't make sense regarding the second frame. You can fix this by the characters trading placed or by moving the text of the robot to the bottom of the frame, and the other one a little to the left.
Also, yeah, the sketchyness is a little confusing and disorienting, but that may be helped just by smoothening out your frames a little, making them thicker, and maybe making them a little less.. crooked.
The humour seems fine, though a little more training on your 'timing' and placement (like with the text) will surely make it come forth better.
I hope this was of some use to you.

[YouriX]

At 3/26/11 07:51 PM, Morthagg wrote: I hope this was of some use to you.

I have to say i have to agree with you. Just noticed that little mistake. But since it had a question mark. It would have been o.k. But like you said it brakes the flow of the comic.

[YouriX]

Also thanks!!! ;)

[Aigis]

Your comic kinda embodies everything I hate about webcomics.

Flash websites, 'random' humour, characters talking about what 'should' be happening in the comic as a substitute for actual jokes, and an impossible to follow panel flow.

What if I wanted to follow your webcomic, and I reached the most recent update. When I came back to the website to check if there are any new updates, it seems I would have to click through every comic again. And this is something you've made particularly difficult since the 'next' button keeps changing position.

[YouriX]

At 3/26/11 08:17 PM, Aigis wrote: Your comic kinda embodies everything I hate about webcomics.

Flash websites, 'random' humour, characters talking about what 'should' be happening in the comic as a substitute for actual jokes, and an impossible to follow panel flow.

What if I wanted to follow your webcomic, and I reached the most recent update. When I came back to the website to check if there are any new updates, it seems I would have to click through every comic again. And this is something you've made particularly difficult since the 'next' button keeps changing position.

Dont worry about that. Thats why i made this thread so i can improve myself. Funny you should mention about the updates. Im busy with the flash file now, so that people can go directly to the newst page.

Also since there is like only six pages. I didnt worry much for now. (My bad)
And im fond of random humor. And make fun of the mistakes i made in comic form. I wouldnt make a comic that i myself wouldnt like to read. But is hard to judge yourself. So you need people to point out the things that you yourself would never see.

[PlagueStudios]

Funny comic, I like your art style :D

[YouriX]

At 3/26/11 08:42 PM, PlagueStudios wrote: Funny comic, I like your art style :D

Thanks! Do you really ment it? :3

[Daverom]

Last comment was on my phone so I couldn't load the actual site.
I'd recomend a different layout, because I lost interest after about 20 seconds of waiting of the 30 second animation.
I wasn't even in the site yet and I was bored. rethink the animation start up.

[YouriX]

At 3/26/11 09:40 PM, M-Vero wrote: Last comment was on my phone so I couldn't load the actual site.
I'd recomend a different layout, because I lost interest after about 20 seconds of waiting of the 30 second animation.
I wasn't even in the site yet and I was bored. rethink the animation start up.

But you can scroll down to read the comic. The animation on the header is mostly decoration. Plus the site loads fine atleast on my computer.

[jeeshwa123]

the website is snappy as all hell! nice work :D
my only problem is the lack of effort put into some stuff, it's really sketchy and the handwriting is illegable at points, but i AM pretty tired, so maybe that's just me xDD

[YouriX]

At 3/27/11 12:16 AM, jeeshwa123 wrote: the website is snappy as all hell! nice work :D
my only problem is the lack of effort put into some stuff, it's really sketchy and the handwriting is illegable at points, but i AM pretty tired, so maybe that's just me xDD

Yeah but dont worry later in the comic, i start using fonts. So yeah its not you ;)

[14hourlunchbreak]

I agree with Aigis, you really need to work on how you present the comics. I don't want to have to go through all the other comics whenever there's a new one. Also keeping the Next and Previous buttons in the same place throughout would be a good idea. Just some things to keep in mind.

[YouriX]

At 3/27/11 06:28 PM, 14hourlunchbreak wrote: I agree with Aigis, you really need to work on how you present the comics. I don't want to have to go through all the other comics whenever there's a new one. Also keeping the Next and Previous buttons in the same place throughout would be a good idea. Just some things to keep in mind.

Dont worry im on it. Still at school right now. So once i get home i'll work on it ;)
Also new comic will come this Friday. And i only just made 6 pages.

[YouriX]

OKay i updated the website! And made a archive where you can directly go to the newst page. FIxed the Next and prev. buttons!

[kidd25]

a nice new webcomic trying to make it in a big big world. try and hook up with some bigger webcomic such as ctr alt del or scandanavia (probably misspelled it)

[YouriX]

At 4/1/11 11:28 PM, kidd25 wrote: a nice new webcomic trying to make it in a big big world. try and hook up with some bigger webcomic such as ctr alt del or scandanavia (probably misspelled it)

Well i could try i mean i got nothing to lose i guess. Also if you liked my comic and have a facebook account you can like my page or comment!

[YouriX]

A new page from www.yourix.nl

[bigjonny13]

At 4/4/11 01:29 PM, YouriX wrote: A new page from www.yourix.nl

Why did the guy in the first panel change?

[YouriX]

At 4/4/11 01:48 PM, big-jonny-13 wrote:

At 4/4/11 01:29 PM, YouriX wrote: A new page from www.yourix.nl

Why did the guy in the first panel change?

LOL what? This is a diffrint character coming into play. a.k.a The World.

[bigjonny13]

At 4/4/11 01:57 PM, YouriX wrote:

At 4/4/11 01:48 PM, big-jonny-13 wrote: Why did the guy in the first panel change?

LOL what? This is a diffrint character coming into play. a.k.a The World.

Well that clears that up, but it's really not that clear that that's The World.....

[YouriX]

At 4/4/11 02:34 PM, big-jonny-13 wrote:

At 4/4/11 01:57 PM, YouriX wrote:

At 4/4/11 01:48 PM, big-jonny-13 wrote: Why did the guy in the first panel change?

LOL what? This is a diffrint character coming into play. a.k.a The World.

Well that clears that up, but it's really not that clear that that's The World.....

I guess i will redo it. And put his name on top. I guess sometimes my mind goes far ahead then my comic.

[YouriX]

FIXED! Also there is a new PAGE ! I am already at mine 9th page!

[YouriX]

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