Script for Teaser

[Darkdeity200]

I have finally decided to turn this script into my first animation. I am an adept artist so I think It wont be too too difficult.
criticism, opinions and pretty much anything except dickweed comments are appreciated.

0:00-0:010
(sound)Loud bass kick followed by strings that give an unsettling effect.
Camera fades in and out of a blurry view of a destroyed city through a large hole in the wall.

0:10-0:20
(sound) low humming sound and the strings start get higher.
camera slightly rises and tilts to the left so that it is nearly angled correctly. still fading in and out slowly, but less of a blurr.

0:20-0-24
(sounds) all sounds quickly and smoothly fade off except for the slight hum.
Camera focuses in on the destroyed city while seeing tripod like creatures with shorter legs crawling the buildings searching through windows, and odd looking soldiers scouting ground level.

0:24
(sound) hum cuts off completely, loud lenghty bass hit
Tripod creature climbs up to his floor in his building and stares at the camera.

0:24-26
(will add idea for sounds l8r)
Creature spits out arm out of its mouth and grabs the camera(you)
you (you can now see your arms and legs) grab a piece of broken glass with left hand and try to stab the arm, but the glass shatters on its hard surface.

0:26-0:35
(will add idea for sounds l8r)
the camera(you) is yanked out of the building by its leg and views the chaotic city from a predator view.
You are then dropped and you hurdle towards the ground. You hear a crack and the screen goes blank.