I would really like some critique.

[LordofK]

I started to draw with simple black and white, and I wonder if there is anything I am blatantly missing, something obvious that I could do to improve. I stopped working on this because I was beginning to ruin it, and I realised this would be a good time to ask someone else for assistance.

So yeah, say what you think, there's no point holding anything back because I can't improve then.

[killahwatts]

it looks okay, if a little confusing.
i really like the silhouettes, they look really good. but is that electricity that is pumping into that dudes head? because that doesnt look great. and i think that thats the bit that confuses me.
my opinion is that you should have left it out.
as there is not much of the characters i cannot tell if you are good with proportion or not, or anatomy. but i can see that you are good with detail.

[LordofK]

At 2/14/11 03:11 AM, killahwatts wrote: it looks okay, if a little confusing.
i really like the silhouettes, they look really good. but is that electricity that is pumping into that dudes head? because that doesnt look great. and i think that thats the bit that confuses me.

Thank you for your review, yeah the stuff pumping into his head isn't so much electricity as raw power. I tried to cut out a lot to make it less confusing, and I tried to keep the "veins" of power basic, but I obviously did not try hard enough if it was still confusing for you. I didn't want to do whole characters because I thought homing in on a specific part of them, like their faces and expressions, would be a bit more dramatic.

Thanks for taking the time to review this anyway.

[Falonefal]

I suggest you show us some more submissions so we could make a review based on not one but many drawings.

[LordofK]

At 2/14/11 10:33 AM, Falonefal wrote: I suggest you show us some more submissions so we could make a review based on not one but many drawings.

Alright, I'll put a few more up just now, I'll try and pick out some more varied stuff.

[LordofK]

Mutant zombies, how imaginative.

[LordofK]

Pinky, from Doom. Pencil outlined in pen.

[killahwatts]

these are all pretty great. the zombie/ mutant one looks a bit odd, what with pencil on red, they look like cutouts.
to be honest, your style in drawing is fine the way it is, but you need to straighten those lines a bit. thats it. the only criticism i can give for your drawings is to polish them up a bit and refine their shapes a little.
i use colour rarely, so i shall not push it upon you, but i do think that you might need to get some Photoshop (or similar program) practice.

[LordofK]

Thanks for the feedback, I was hoping to get Photoshop CS, it has a pen tool for straight, neat lines. It's very expensive though, so I got Photoshop elements instead, a lot cheaper but no line tool.

I will get in some practice with colour though. That combined with some nice neat lines should make everything look a lot better.

[duoz]

I really enjoy the style of the first one; you achieved a good balance of detail and basic with only using black and white. I would really try out your other pieces in that style, I think it would really make them your own, unique feel to them.

[LordofK]

Thanks, and yeah, I actually enjoyed making it, my only real regret being I could't add in a background because I screwed up all the layers on photoshop. It's good to know you like it though, I feel inspired to do more.

[LordofK]

Guess this is now my art thread. Hrm.

More lightning pl0x.

[LordofK]

I based this dude of the Lancer Big Daddy in Bioshock 2. Compared to the other Big Daddies, I thought Lancers look a little bit like knights.

[LordofK]

... and this is it coloured.

[bigjonny13]

At 2/20/11 02:29 PM, LordofK wrote: ... and this is it coloured.

Not bad. I suggest if you want to colour it, to first go over your rough line sketch in a solid black line so it's more clean.

[LordofK]

Not bad. I suggest if you want to colour it, to first go over your rough line sketch in a solid black line so it's more clean.

Heh thanks, sometimes I make the lines solid black, but this time I left them scratchy looking. The newgrounds picture upload thing hasn't really helped that though, it looks far more pixelated here than anywhere else I uploaded it to.

[LordofK]

Some Grammar Nazis.

[Breaktroll]

At 2/24/11 07:32 PM, LordofK wrote: Some Grammar Nazis.

The guy running (or dancing. ..?) has two right hands. But the rest looks good though.

[LordofK]

The guy running (or dancing. ..?) has two right hands. But the rest looks good though.

Hah, yeah, I just noticed the two right hands. I'll re-upload it some time later, for perfections sake. It's all on one layer though, so it might be a tad tricky.

Didn't really know how to make-up a good running pose either, when I start messing with perspective stuff gets real complex, real fast. But hey, maybe that's something to start practicing.

[Breaktroll]

At 2/25/11 12:14 PM, LordofK wrote: Hah, yeah, I just noticed the two right hands. I'll re-upload it some time later, for perfections sake. It's all on one layer though, so it might be a tad tricky.

Didn't really know how to make-up a good running pose either, when I start messing with perspective stuff gets real complex, real fast. But hey, maybe that's something to start practicing.

When drawing someone running towards the screen, try drawing his/her hands from ..the front?.. you know, the side with which you pawnch someone..

[LordofK]

When drawing someone running towards the screen, try drawing his/her hands from ..the front?.. you know, the side with which you pawnch someone..

Kk, thanks, I get what you mean.

[Abbyka]

I really like it! It wouldn't be as intriguing if it were a line drawing, but the silhouette is what gives it something extra to make it pop. :)

[LordofK]

I really like it! It wouldn't be as intriguing if it were a line drawing, but the silhouette is what gives it something extra to make it pop. :)

Thank you very much, I figured bad guys with dark emotions needed dark colours. I'm pretty poor with colours, so I thought why not just use black on white?

[LordofK]

The Knight of Hearts. I was going to do a set, so a Knight of Clubs, Diamonds and Spades too, each with a distinct look and personality.

[test-object]

I find it hard to critique these. Not that they're bad or anything, but they have a massive amount of space to grow and you're doing a pretty fine job developing it.

Just try and make sure to put weight in your characters. These seem to be floating in every picture. I feel no support or strain on their body. The monster without legs for example should be leaning VERY heavily on its hand, yet it seems doing almost no effort... if it even IS leaning.

Perhaps drawing a background and a simple horizontal line would help you.
Do keep on posting, I would like to see this evolve.

[Abbyka]

The knight is awesome, probably my favorite!

[LordofK]

At 2/25/11 06:28 PM, test-object wrote: I find it hard to critique these. Not that they're bad or anything, but they have a massive amount of space to grow and you're doing a pretty fine job developing it.

Just try and make sure to put weight in your characters. These seem to be floating in every picture. I feel no support or strain on their body. The monster without legs for example should be leaning VERY heavily on its hand, yet it seems doing almost no effort... if it even IS leaning.

Perhaps drawing a background and a simple horizontal line would help you.
Do keep on posting, I would like to see this evolve.

Thank you very much for your thoughts, no joke; I have never actually received proper critique before submitting these to Newgrounds. After 5 months on dA and Sheezyart, I have not yet received one constructive comment on any of my submissions, just +faves and the occasional "lol, kewl". I think I will concentrate more on submitting these to Newgrounds, seeing as it has helped me to improve vastly already.

I will work on adding depth to illustrations and characters. When I tried using backgrounds before I had trouble as I made them seem far too distracting and cluttered. And as for the weight behind my characters, I do feel that is now a very big issue. I see what you mean by floating, and I think maybe exaggerating certain details in future submissions (such as the emphasis on weight) may help them to seem that little bit more believable.

[LordofK]

At 2/25/11 06:33 PM, Abbyka wrote: The knight is awesome, probably my favorite!

Thank you, I like him a lot too :)

[LordofK]

A character developed from sketches, I'll call it Shroomy.

[Breaktroll]

At 2/26/11 01:24 PM, LordofK wrote: A character developed from sketches, I'll call it Shroomy.

Hey man, nice character design. I like the perspective of the syringe, even though that it's probably not 100% right. Maybe look up some syringe pics on teh intarwebz to see how most of them look, maybe for future drawings.