Help design pitfalls for this story

[iamgrimreaper]

I'm developing an interactive story. Here's the basic outline of it:
Plot:
Conflict - You regain consciousness in an unfamiliar place, and realize it's a prison, and have to get out.
Rising action - A note leads you to a cell that has the time machine in it.
Climax - You find a machine that looks familiar and after investigation, you find out it's a time machine that you built. After investigation, you find out you're in 2121.
Falling action - After finding this out, something blasts through the wall which gives you a way to escape.
Resolution - You escape the prison.

There are 3 main places in the prison:
1.) The cell - this is the cell you woke up in. Cell "C74"
Here, in the beginning you're tied up. There's a note there saying "Cafeteria," but you only see this after you've escaped and started investigating the cell. You can go out into the hallway, but unless you've found the "cafeteria" note, there's no options available.

The other places are only available after investigating your cell, and investigating the hall you find...
2.) Cafeteria - this is where you are lead to the time machine.
Here you'll find a dead body, and some spoiled food. In the spoiled food warning you "Don't go to cell C2!" and on the dead body, there's a note saying "C2. C2. C2. C2. C2. C2. C2. C2. C2. C2. C2. C2. C2. C2."
That's when you can go to the exit.

3.) The exit - This is just a locked door at the very end of the hall.
Beside the exit is cell C2.

4.) Cell C2 - This is where you'll find the time machine.
After discovering the time machine, observing it will show your last name on it, and something will blast the wall open, allowing you to escape.

That's pretty much the main story. But can anybody help me think of things in any part of the story that will prevent the rest of the story from happening?

[PainasaurusRex]

I'm baffled... It shouldn't end there. Who blew up the wall. Why was he in prison.
I think it should go through the process of him planning his own escape. Also, are there other people in the prison. It's the year 2021 right. Explain what's happened. I don't, that's just what I think.

[BluGil]

-You drop the soap in the shower one day and receive chlamydia.
-You are beaten for trying to escape and given the death sentence
-You are a paranoid nihilist and do not believe that the time machine will work and don't want to take that chance
-You realize that you're in prison for a good reason and that its probably better to do the time

[iamgrimreaper]

At 2/12/11 03:26 AM, PainasaurusRex wrote: I'm baffled... It shouldn't end there. Who blew up the wall. Why was he in prison.
I think it should go through the process of him planning his own escape. Also, are there other people in the prison. It's the year 2021 right. Explain what's happened. I don't, that's just what I think.

I was thinking of that as the sequel. hehe

[PainasaurusRex]

At 2/12/11 05:42 AM, iamgrimreaper wrote:

At 2/12/11 03:26 AM, PainasaurusRex wrote: I'm baffled... It shouldn't end there. Who blew up the wall. Why was he in prison.
I think it should go through the process of him planning his own escape. Also, are there other people in the prison. It's the year 2021 right. Explain what's happened. I don't, that's just what I think.

I was thinking of that as the sequel. hehe

Seems like a really short story based on how you've described it to me. I'm imagining an empty Prison, but maybe that's just me, is the prison fully functional, or is it a real prison?

[iamgrimreaper]

At 2/12/11 05:59 AM, PainasaurusRex wrote: Seems like a really short story based on how you've described it to me. I'm imagining an empty Prison, but maybe that's just me, is the prison fully functional, or is it a real prison?

Yeah, it is an empty prison, and it's just him there.