my new pome i'd like to share

[badwolfpup]

"If you only knew and now you do"
By: John

If you only knew how I felt maybe things would be simpler
That change is best some people may guess.
Promises are meant to be broken so I'm told,
even though I didn't brake not a one on my soul.

If only you knew how I loved you and still do.
That I worry if your change was for the good or worst.
How I want the old days back,
to feel those true feelings once again.

True friends are there till the end,
that I could be.
I wounder if I should stay with you,
or just be friends before we can't stand it.

If you only knew why I can't sleep at anymore.
That I'm afraid to lose you even as the friend you could be.
I wounder why you don't look at me anymore,
when I talk to you it makes me think if you really care.

I know you wounder whats on my mind.
Now you know, so what can we do?
Do you just wanna be friends,
or much more.
A couple takes two, and with that I need help
from you.
Just always know I'll always love you.

[badwolfpup]

**I mean poem**

[OddlyPoetic]

I don't like it because it's about love.

That simple. People need something new to write poetry about it.

Love poems can be good yeah; but rarely are.

[DeftAndEvil]

Oddly generalized too much, but he has a point.

Here's a hint for love poems: try some subtlety. Be direct and concise but don't just say "I love you."
Hitting that happy balance is kinda difficult though.

[monkeybars]

At 1/26/11 11:57 PM, OddlyPoetic wrote: I don't like it because it's about love.

That simple. People need something new to write poetry about it.

Love poems can be good yeah; but rarely are.

I agree, do something we won't be bored with after the first line.

Shameless plug on self. Listen to my songs they were originally all poems.