Need someone to critique this

[BoobyDaBunny]

So I am drawing this for a friend who requested I draw Dracula fro him. The only things he asked for was white hair, gold eyes, and a bloody sword. This is the first time I have ever drawn a vampire, sword, or armour like stuff and I need some advise...
How can I improve it?

Oh, and this is just the line work. Colouring will come later ^^

[LotsOfEvil]

At 1/26/11 10:10 PM, BoobyDaBunny wrote: So I am drawing this for a friend who requested I draw Dracula fro him. The only things he asked for was white hair, gold eyes, and a bloody sword. This is the first time I have ever drawn a vampire, sword, or armour like stuff and I need some advise...
How can I improve it?

You obviously have skill, but you're compensating for what looks like weak anatomy. You've hidden the majority of the character's body behind things like the sword, a goatskull, etc. The parts we can see, such as his legs, look like nothing more than a block or trunk. While the detail is very impressive and you definitely know how to make the image exciting, I would also work on rendering the human body element of this.

[Harukawa]

There is potential there, for sure. The legs are a bit of a mess though. The perspective just seems really weird, and they seem stumpy. Also, the sword (Frostmorne?) does not seem to have a hilt, which makes me wonder how he is supposed to hold it.

[Nae]

At 1/27/11 12:24 AM, Harukawa wrote: which makes me wonder how he is supposed to hold it.

I wondered the same thing... also, is he supposed to be sitting on something or just squatting? it's a very odd stance.

Is this a known character? or are you making it up? if you are... why would you cover his mouth? the one thing that would clearly say 'dracula' would be fangs, no? I dunno :P

I like the pose you were going for on his upper body & arms, but the perspective/angle are off on the bend of the wrists and the lengths. As mentioned, his legs and feet are a mess.

Lots to fix, but a good start! Could turn into something really awesome!! Keep us posted! :D

side note ...he reminds me of of Maximo ...he's just a regular dude... that runs around in his boxers! Good times! lol

[617frankie]

you defiantly got skills, defiantly better then my stuff lol. Your friend will love it :D

[rockartofwar]

At 1/27/11 12:24 AM, Harukawa wrote: There is potential there, for sure. The legs are a bit of a mess though. The perspective just seems really weird, and they seem stumpy. Also, the sword (Frostmorne?) does not seem to have a hilt, which makes me wonder how he is supposed to hold it.

Yeah what he said, u need some perspective work but done very nicely. Try using basic shapes first. It sounds stupid but it simply works. U can creat the hole pose before put the detail. Its a awesome thing to know if the perportions look right or not.

[XwaynecoltX]

At 1/26/11 10:10 PM, BoobyDaBunny wrote: Oh, and this is just the line work. Colouring will come later ^^

Very nice indeed, linework looks good sofar, would love to see a more finished work, on another note this reminds me of the linch king cover for world of war craft? any relation?

~X~

[LotsOfEvil]

I'm assuming from the style that you're a big Spawn/Todd McFarlaine fan.

Perspective/Foreshortening
Anatomy
Concept Design

I'd say finish this one as is, fix up what you can, and then go do some practice in the areas listed above, then come back and try redrawing this or a different image of Dracula down the line just to see how you've improved.

You definitely have a good style though so keep fine tuning it.

[BoobyDaBunny]

At 1/27/11 11:39 AM, LotsOfEvil wrote: I'm assuming from the style that you're a big Spawn/Todd McFarlaine fan.

Perspective/Foreshortening
Anatomy
Concept Design

I'd say finish this one as is, fix up what you can, and then go do some practice in the areas listed above, then come back and try redrawing this or a different image of Dracula down the line just to see how you've improved.

You definitely have a good style though so keep fine tuning it.

Thank you!
And I will finish it as is since my friend "loves it" but I knew there was lots I could change. When my midterms are done I will try again with the perspective and body work =)

[Nae]

At 1/27/11 02:27 PM, BoobyDaBunny wrote: I will finish it as is...

So why did you bother asking for critiques then?! I'm officially adding you to my 'people to not bother with' list. Good luck on your midterms.

[BoobyDaBunny]

Thank you everyone!!!
Okay to sum it all up....

- Need to work on the anatomy more. I clearly I have issues with legs ><
- Perspectiv
- Need to work on wepons!!! I never noticed the hilt issue! Thank you for pointing that out!
- Should show more characteristics of Vampire.... should have drawn fangs *faceplam*

Like LotsOfEvil said, I will just finish it as is and give it to my friend since he didn't seem to spot any of those issues >.>.... However, I want to try again with this. Maybe not a vampire but I really do need to work on anatomy and wepons more. I usually draw cute stuff (like pokemon) so this has all be a very good exercise for me! =)
I just came up with this character on my own (since some of you asked) and I have no idea what Spawn of Todd McFariaine is ^^"""" I shall google it tho!

Thank you again for all your input! It really helps me see my work with new eyes. When I start on a new one I will post it back in here so (if you guys want) you can critque me as I go ^^

Thanks a bunch!!!!! <3 You all rock!

[BoobyDaBunny]

At 1/27/11 02:39 PM, Nae wrote:

At 1/27/11 02:27 PM, BoobyDaBunny wrote: I will finish it as is...

So why did you bother asking for critiques then?! I'm officially adding you to my 'people to not bother with' list. Good luck on your midterms.

So when I do another one I know what to change... it wont be exactly this peice but similar. I have already done the lineing and my friend is demanding it just the way it is because he wants it asap. Sorry if you think I wasted your time =( I'm very greatful for your imput!

[Kashi]

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